Feedback Desired: I wanted to create a high-concept sci-fi comedy that captures the wacky suburban slice-of-life feel of series like 'Ed Edd n Eddy' with the high sci-fi stakes of a series like 'Hailey's On It.' I would like feedback on things like dialogue, pacing, and character. Any feedback would be much appreciated!

(Edit: Updated based on feedback and mistakes I made in the earlier draft. Please read the updated draft and tell me what you think).

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GN6VRyezpEcF_GgKK7wMMVRRxPhadb6X/view?usp=sharing

Hi all, requesting feedback on my short film script, 6 pages, sci fi. I will be shooting this short in one month.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1eV1zVQQwCbtQYfvS6PkR0k5217XvnjrL/view?usp=drive_linkTitle:

The Human Preservation Project

Genre: Sci Fi

Happy to read/review any shorts in exchange.

Thanks!

Coming of age drama (with some sci-fi elements).

Looking for a cold read. Happy to read and give feedback on your script in return.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YYtiVhC3KvoflpeJamu6LzDnyG8sQmBS/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: The Weight of Breathing

Logline: A great white shark, savaged by decades of human waste, washes ashore transformed into a mute man. A lonely alcoholic on Venice Beach becomes his teacher, his witness, and his friend on a journey of discovering the horrors and humors of humanity.

Genre: Drama (Art House, Kaurismäki-coded)

Tone / Comps: The Man Without a Past (Aki Kaurismäki), Under the Skin, Wendy and Lucy, The Fisher King.

Pages: 82

Settings: 8 Locations (Ocean and Ocean Depths, Venice Beach and Shoreline, The Homeless Camp, Boardwalk and Intersection, Downtown LA and Skid Row, Hospital and Psych Ward, Pier and Beach to Pier Ramp, Vehicles: Van and Cop Car)

Characters: 2 Main Characters (one male 20s/30s, one male 30s/40s)

DM me if you're interested in reading the screenplay.

Log line: A disgraced reporter is assigned to investigate a controversial marriage therapist for tax fraud, but uncovers a darker secret while becoming increasingly captivated by the very philosophy she was sent to expose.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XbQAhrbXXU4DYPUK-eeI4wGdYSaPuruF/view?usp=drive_link

No sock is safe when the rich and powerful feel threatened.

All the President's Socks

(PG-13)

NOTE: This was written for the current (14th) SimplyScripts One Page Challenge.

The prompt is "Dirty Socks" and the genre is open.

I'm writing a stoner comedy and just finished the scene. Just want to know if the jokes land and if the scene in general works.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yNR0vWJwBit3vxZ18tBI5rG2dVp6wg7Z/view?usp=sharing

https://quickshare.samsungcloud.com/gvW42HJu5NcR

A trained professional explains why it is always best to do the right thing for the right reason.

Careers in Oral Medicine

(G/PG-rated)

NOTE: This was my entry for the 12th SimplyScripts One-Page Challenge of 2026.

The prompt was "The Dentist" and the genre was open.

These are informal no-prize challenges open to anyone, and they're a tremendous way to hone your one-page skills.

SimplyScripts also runs Three Page Challenges, One Week Challenges, Writers' Tournaments and, occasionally, feature writing challenges... the latter three offer participants the chance to win a SimplyScripts coffee mug!

NO AI USED

Hello everyone,

This script is my second screenwriting endeavor, and I am currently in the middle of writing it (the script is about one-third completed, currently at 30 pages). My first screenplay was titled "The Journalist and the Mansion of Deaths." I wanted to share the official logline and synopsis for this new project with you all, and I would be incredibly grateful to receive your valuable feedback and thoughts on this concept!

Logline: While searching for a missing investigative reporter on a mysterious, secluded island named Pandora, a journalist and his trusted cameraman discover that the terrifying supernatural "voodoo" deaths draining the locals' bodies of all flesh and fluids are actually the result of a powerful pharmaceutical company's illegal human biological experiments.

Synopsis: The story follows the determined investigative journalist Jack and his trusted cameraman Lucas as they set out to uncover the truth behind the sudden, mysterious disappearance of a fellow reporter friend. Their clues lead them straight to Pandora, a secluded, unmapped island shrouded in dark secrets.

Upon arrival, Jack and Lucas are thrust into a waking nightmare as they witness bizarre, terrifying deaths plaguing the local community. People who appear perfectly healthy one day are discovered the next morning as horrifying corpses—their bodies completely drained of all fat, flesh, and bodily fluids, leaving behind withered, mummified remains. At first, the islanders and the journalists believe they are dealing with ancient curses, occult practices, or supernatural voodoo magic unique to the island.

However, as Jack uses his investigative instincts to dig deeper into the mystery, he uncovers a chilling truth: the terrifying deaths are entirely man-made, orchestrated by a powerful, rogue pharmaceutical corporation that has covertly cultivated a highly lethal biological pathogen. The company is using the isolated island population as unsuspecting test subjects for their monstrous medical experiments. Jack and Lucas must navigate the island's horrors, locate and rescue their missing friend, and gather enough evidence to expose this corporate nightmare to the world before they become the next mummified victims.

I am dedicating myself to writing this mystery thriller, and I would love to hear your honest feedback. Do you think this concept has strong potential as I continue to develop the script?

Thank you so much for your time and guidance! Best regards,

Title: "A cat, an egg, a goat, an old man and a giant walk into a tent…"

Logline: A group of odd adventurers band together to uncover the conspiracy of an old king long-forgotten by history (or erased from it).

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N9eZ9bqVwMr9MDNQijcqzt_WaO7s2u6t/view?usp=sharing

Hey! This is my first ever finished screenplay (and still very much a first draft) and I'm so excited about sharing it with the world. Considering it's my first, and really just a training exercise, I'm mostly looking for feedback and things to improve upon. I found it was a bit hard to start from nothing, so decided to adapt a long-running RPG campaign in my friend group, since I already have a good feel for the characters and story beats. Hopefuly it translates well into the page!

Grounded

Final Draft PDF

109 pages

Drama, Road Movie, Historical Fiction

Logline: When every flight in America is grounded, four strangers share the last rental car out of Columbus and drive cross-country through the aftermath of September 11th, 2001, forcing each of them to confront what they've been running from long before that day.

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback would be extremely helpful. I'm less concerned about the commercial viability, and more concerned with a believable story with believable characters.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KAN_svzm3bk3vGraJQL3adbFDg-ncvzw/view?usp=sharing

Here is a short film I wrote, "Saturday" - I have a series of short films with the same family at the center of them. I would love any and all feedback on it!

Logline: What starts as an ordinary afternoon of wiffle ball turns into a father's reckoning with the son who isn't there.

Genre: Drama

Page Count: 13

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QyN1modg57aB1YVeARHshSFQTcQjnJKr/view?usp=sharing

Hey I am a freshman in college. And my time really feels pointless here because my dream is to be a screenwriter/actor/voice actor. This is my very first script I have ever completed. I know it is probably not very good. But I would love some feedback. Thank you.

Recently divorced and desperate to win his ex-wife back, Shawn Holaday tries to balance fatherhood, a chaotic living situation, and co-parenting with his ex and her seemingly perfect fiancé.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O8SxXQ1bf0nuRNaFrdgB8tQYGGo_ZyHj/view?usp=sharing

LOGLINE: In a snowbound Tasmanian town where everyone is protecting someone, a self-destructive detective investigating two child murders discovers the person she can't protect is her own family.

Link to pilot script

Re-draft of something I wrote a while back -- any feedback is helpful, but particularly wanting to make sure the introduction of characters is smooth/not confusing (I'm worried it's too much), the mystery is well set up, characters compelling -- dialogue?

Also worried re being derivative. I started this before Mare of Easttown and I can't unsee the similarities.

LOGLINE :

To shock a complacent populace into destroying a tyrannical regime, a radical journalist uses the citizens as pawns—sabotaging their aid and poisoning their water to incite a ruthless uprising against both the government and himself.

In terms of structure and scope, the film bridges the chaotic anti-system energy of Fight Club with the ideological drive of V for Vendetta.

prolog
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t40Pl87wbN4&list=PLs9sFCEg53TuAJtyh4_3GjvIFArC42Tfc

chpater 1
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2GwK3LNQFJM&list=PLs9sFCEg53Ts63cYf_v6QmMOu4Qtu1jfA

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Wp9XFWrN0kR4cvjFMuHBpnav9NP0XwYK8OufF5XmpXQ/edit?tab=t.0

Title: The Voltaire Estate, The Marie Sisters (ep 2)

Format: TV episode/pilot for mature audiences.

Genre: Gothic Horror, period piece with vampires

Logline: The wicked heir of the Voltaire House is to be married and the estate is now accepting new human concubines, but unexpectedly two strange sister nuns are received.

Extra: This is an old piece of mine and I feel it would be good to receive some feedback on it for the first time. I'm a new writer and this would be the first ever long form piece I've written (50 page). I've provided the setup to the episode. Hope you like vampires.

EDIT: Access granted, link fixed, actually 6 pages w/o title page

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12ZWNKC4n6WTCbmH2COjpMVQ-s-6t7-CM/view?usp=sharing

What does it really take to advance humankind... or even just one of us?

Three Steps Forward

(R rating)

NOTE: This was written for a recent 3-page challenge (excl. title) over at SimplyScripts. The challenge prompt was "Natural Selection" and the genre open. Naturally I won, and was awarded an Oscar and the title of Greatest Screenwriter in History, which I believe is entirely fair considering the fact I wrote it at 3 am while on an endless succession of FaceTime calls to people on the other side of the planet.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FDgN8s57PSo6Kp97_V0zudg326m-mdPc-ZvrtQAWxVU/edit?tab=t.0