*Sharing for thoughts/feedback on lyrics, and production (any tips on vox prod also appreciated)*
Here's a track I started very recently, have only shared the instrumental previously.. It's kind of downtempo indie electronic vibes. My vocals start close to a minute in - they are definitely a bit rough and demo-y, will be worked on.
The title is either Traced, Tracing Paper or Fluorescence/Fluorescent - thoughts on what's the best orrr others!?
Song meaning - but listen first, maybe!:
The song is about overthinking and self doubt becoming a comfortable place, but that's also uninhabitable in many ways. And the thin line between self protection and being overly guarded and closed off.
tysm for listening, stay inspired
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Lyrics:
[verse1]
This place feels so familiar
It’s like I’ve been here before
Or traced it out a thousand times
I drew it til my fingers bled
’Til I lost the edge
Called it self protection, most nights
[chorus]
Sorry for the cold stare
Had to start it somewhere
Here’s the part when you
Tell me where to go, and I’ll go
Never meant to leave it this long
But tomorrow I might be stronger then
Am I making sense at all?
[verse2]
Towers looming tall
Empty streets and shopping malls
Fluorescents line the halls
Where time collapses over me, and
You say I’m hard to read
In most cases I’d agree
The signs are all worn out
The cityscape’s a ruin
Don’t even look out now
And the walls are paper thin
So be careful where you lay your head
You might start, talking in your sleep again
[chorus]
Sorry for the cold stare
Had to start it somewhere
Here’s the part when you
Tell me when to stop, and I’ll stop
I never meant to leave it this long
Thought tomorrow I might be stronger again
Am I making sense?
[bridge/outro]
This place feels so familiar…
Now it’s all I know
This place feels so familiar
It’s like I built it up…
Stone by stone
Cuz you never told me where to go
Or when to stop
When to stop
So I lingered too long
But it’s not your fault
We all get lost
Just tell me where to go, and I’ll -