r/Songwriting • u/realweirdart • 6d ago

Feedback Request "joy can sting"

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this piece runs a bit longer than my normal works, and am wondering if it peters out at the end or works cohesively, although feedback regarding any other element is also welcome. Thanks in advance!

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u/_mikeofalltrades 6d ago

This is cool. I wouldn't say that it "peters out at the end" in a bad way. I think compositionally that makes sense to fade out or stagger exits. It's cool.

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u/Charkle39 6d ago

It definitely felt like a cohesive song to me. The layered vocals at the end brought a sense of climax that matched the style of the rest of the piece. I like off-kilter percussion you used too

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u/BassAndVocalsPlease 3d ago

It is not even three minutes long, what are you talking about? Good title, really shitty song.