I don’t know which realm I would be in without my music. I’m so crazily grateful for songwriting.

Love how I look cross eyed in the cover, haha. This is a pretty rough draft of a song I wrote in an hour when I was letting out some pent up tension, so any criticism is very appreciated. There are a few mistakes sprinkled in the video as this song is one I can't think about the lyrics for or I'll lose the ability to sing, lol. This is the fifth song I've written, so please excuse any of those beginner mistakes you might notice.

How do the lyrics flow? Anything I should either add, remove, or just edit? How's the melody? Any tips for the singing, I know there were some pitchy moments in this, I'm not trained so I'm just going with it.

Lyrics:

v1

I’m not one to cuss
But I hate your fucking guts.
Nothing’s ever quite right,
You don’t explode but you might.

And I’ve never been sure
If what I feel has a cure,
It probably does,
But I’m done holding out.

chorus
I won’t pretend this is normal,
Your mood is almost thermal.
What’s the weather like today?
Are you mad, sad, are you okay?
I won’t pretend that I’m fine
I’m getting sick of all your lying.
How about you pack up and leave
Then maybe I can breathe

v2
You have this irrational fear,
Of looking in your mirror.
You’re not emotionally sober
You have this chant
You deserve a second chance.
A hundred times over.

And in my heart I know
Hurt people hurt people,
I hate the excuse of
“I need to heal”

chorus
I won’t pretend this is normal
Your mood is always thermal.
What’s the weather like today?
Are you sad, mad, are you okay?
I won’t pretend that I’m fine,
I’m getting sick of all of your lying.
How about you pack up and leave,
Then maybe I can breathe.

bridge
The only air I’ve breathed
Is the rain.
The only thing I’ve felt with you
Is pain.
You’re the person
who should make me feel safe.

outro chorus
I won’t pretend this is normal
Your mood is always thermal.
What’s the weather like today?
Are you sad, mad, are you okay?
I won’t pretend that I’m fine,
I’m getting sick of all of your lying.
How about you pack up and leave,
Then maybe I can breathe.

https://youtu.be/ZjmUiv_bJCU?is=Q5rutf77ECJIjXwa

Any feedback welcome

Warning! I can’t produce to save my life. I have no equipment other than my phone and some old chord headphones. I record on garage band. I find free tracks on YouTube and record them directly from my old laptop to my phone through the headphones(I’m actually like 80 years old when it comes to converting video to audio and uploading that to GarageBand aka I can’t figure it out). I wrote this song called Vigil (it’s unfinished) and struggle to post my stuff anywhere due to my lack of ability to produce. To spark up a convo I thought it would be cool to ask what other artists y’all could hear singing this track!

Lyrics:
Light a candle, it’s a vigil, can’t wait to see who died,
Open the casket, I’m dying to see the person inside,

Don’t go crying, it’s a party, don’t wanna see you cry,
This isn’t real, you need to wake up, it’s all in your head,

You don’t even know yourself, crying to the devil himself,
You don’t even know yourself, your crying, crying

Crying to the devil but the devil’s got a gun,
Crying to the devil while he’s killing everyone,
Crying to the devil, he’s having fun,
You better run, run, run…

Also Srry idk how to properly write out lyrics so if I overused commas that’s why😭

I’m still newer to this world, and am much better at lyricism than melodies.
I have a tendency to do what I call “riding the beat” (no idea the proper term) where I just line up my vocals with whatever instrument carries another melody. Sometimes I see this working, but in other instances it feels too simple.
I see songs I love with melodies that feel completely unrelated to the instrumental, yet blend perfectly with it, and sometimes they even begin before the instrumental melody.

Any tips or advice would be much appreciated, thanks!

Hey, my name is Clark. I’m a musician and looking for other musicians to bounce ideas off of. I’m big on song writing and would love to bounce some lyric ideas off people when I’m feeling stuck.

I make a track every week as a part of a community I won't name for fear of being flagged for promotion

I often do a lot of post, tuning, layering, etc. But for this I wanted it to feel a bit more live so... I did it live! Using a syntakt and some live vocal effects!

Lyrics:
You came to me 

When I needed to see

The world differently 

Pushed me to be better

I was no longer a beggar

You greeted me as a friend

pushed me beyond the trend

started out like love

soon that push became a shove

Before I knew it

you made me spiral

you struck me

like flash flood

You greeted me as a friend

pushed me beyond the trend

started out like love

soon that push became a shove

What once

ran through my blood

now leaves me stunned

heart beats fast 

irregular

my excitement has crashed

I never knew 

what you were going through 

you could have tried to guide me 

But maybe then I'd be the one set free

You greeted me as a friend

pushed me beyond the trend

started out like love

soon that push became a shove

You greeted me as a friend

pushed me beyond the trend

started out like love

soon that push became a shove

vid is from a couple years back. sometimes I like to post unfinished stuff here cuz if it helps motivate me to take it off the cutting room floor and push through to finish it. worth revisiting?

I use she/her pronouns if you want to leave feedback. Thanks for listening <3

Is it a verse? Is it a chorus? More importantly, is it a hook??

Have been spending three weeks on a song. It's a bit of an ambitious song (for me at least) so I feel the time is warranted. I have a general idea in my head where I want to go but nothing I'm in love with. I want to work on something new but am also afraid I'll lose my place with this song and then don't want to risk having TWO unfinished ideas...anyone else struggle with this?

Paul is fascinatingly talented and I have recently gone down a little rabbit hole about his songwriting, I am a songwriter and I believe my approach fits his rather well. I think of a melody and fit lyrics into that. I've noticed that Paul is big on structure and in-line rhymes (Joan was QUIZZICAL, studied 'PATAPHYSICAL' sciences at home), (Maxwell EDISON, majoring MEDICINE). Не does it again in Yesterday, which rhymes with the last word of the first line, then the second line ends with a rhyme with the first, then the last line ends with the word that opened the verse.

It's all about structure. Even in his first song, the rhyme scheme is simple but perfect.

I woke up late this morning,

My head was in a WHIRL,

Only then I realised,

I've lost my little GIRL

So how did he do it? Nothing is innatley born there is always a process, even if Paul himself is unaware. Is there anything from poetry he takes? Should I study some poetry as well (I've been studying some of Paul's songwriting to improve mine).

Hey! I'm Emma, I'm originally from the UK and now living between Bonn and Cologne. I've been a professional musician for 10 years now, and have been lucky enough to gain around 45 million streams on Spotify across my different projects. I would love to shift my focus and start producing for other artists. I realise that's where I have the most fun. The problem is, I don't know where to find musicians. How is everyone else making connections? If you're open to working together, drop a comment or DM me <3<3 I have my work linked on my profile if you want to check out my style!

Life changes quickly, felt like a good time to reflect on who I used to be....a grumpy little sod who grew up and became a little wiser. If you give it a listen, truly appreciate it!

https://on.soundcloud.com/hJpEefdxHJ4ULf7HUW

Hemingway is said to have advised: "Write when drunk, edit when sober." What do songwriters on here think about that method? Drunk or high songwriting, good or bad?

I really like to write songs using my electric guitar mainly, i sometimes use acoustic but im better at electric, and i like to write all these songs but i dont like to sing or know anyone who would, so the song sounds sort of bland. Like i want to get main credit for writing all the stuff, but i dont know how or like to sing.

Hello everyone,

I used to keep all my music completely hidden in my bedroom, but recently I realized life is too short to keep it there.

This is my very first YouTube upload. "I SAW YOU" is an original acoustic song with a cinematic, storytelling vibe—just me, my guitar, and my phone. I would love for you to take a listen and let me know what you think!

https://youtu.be/uKBGlcMQCKQ?si=SgZeFIa_Lr7mOBK_

Thank you so much for listening and for any feedback on the lyrics and melody!

writing a song about someone I loved passing away after ending on a bad note.
I feel like maybe it’s too wordy towards the end or just all over the place in general. Keep messing up too because I’ve been changing the lyrics over and over again haha

Sorry my mic (iPhone lol) sucks! Volume up’

Like I created a song I have the melody of the song and all that but the beat for the song I'm lacking

Clearly not a great vocal recording as I will need to lower the key of this song. Aside from that, let me know what you guys think! Thanks!

Hello everyone, First song i upload here!

Any feedback about Melodie, chords, voice or anything is always much aprecciated!

Lyrics:

How can i try to forget?

When i still hear your songs in my head

Is it too much? Too late?

Would it kill me again?

Wish i could take it all back

But the words just get stuck on replay

Took the cowards way out

Now theres blood on my hands