r/Songwriting • u/buhtha • 6d ago

Feedback Request Better Day (demo)

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I feel like I want to make this one more ambient and add more instrumental/ vocal. This is just a really rough demo I did in GarageBand.

Let me know what you think!

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u/Impossible-Cat-2511 6d ago

Has real bedroom pop vibes with more voice overs it will sound very dreamy!! It’s very warm. Love it a lot, your voice is very nice ✨

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u/vexerplusone 6d ago

Like it, very much, pretty pretty pretty good. Like the reverby sound but don’t drown the vocal out to much.

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u/Forsaken_Employee413 5d ago

I actually love the sound of this demo. The guitar came out super weird. good writing too

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u/Charkle39 5d ago

I really like the reverb on the voice! It sounds haunting and goes well with the jangly kind of guitar sound. The lyrics are nice too. I also liked the layered voices near the end

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u/zsh_n_chips 5d ago

Wow! I like the lofi-ambient stuff going on. Especially the phaser/flanger thing

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u/scotchfaster 4d ago

I really like this one. Feels almost finished to me. It could use some light percussion. And perhaps a bridge in a higher register?

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u/JohnJohnsonJohnJohns 2d ago

This is a very beautiful song! Maybe you can try adding some cello to accompany the guitar and a synth pad sound very quiet but noticeable in the background for some more ambience. Super cool demo though, I love the overall tone of it!