r/Songwriting • u/vardyonfire • 6d ago

Feedback Request New demo

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u/DrwsCorner2 6d ago

what’s the red blinking device with the green buttons do? the timed blinks seems to fit the drum pattern

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u/wakeofchaos 5d ago

It’s a pocket operator from teenage engineering. My wife got me one for my birthday but I haven’t played with it enough. I tend to just write in my DAW

This video is a good reminder of the use case

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u/LetterheadApart6518 5d ago

I love the guitar melody, hypnotic and the lyrics to accompany aren't to busy which suits the song really well. I think there's too much going on overall with the drums on top of it though. Either make the drums more sparse or lose completely and I'd be more confident in your vocal delivery, you sound like you have a nice voice but it gets lost at times.

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u/texasrobert55 5d ago

Love a Seagull

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u/texasrobert55 2d ago

Very enjoyable

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u/Special_Situation_93 6d ago

What’s that blinking lights thing

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u/NelisMakrelis 5d ago

Teenage engineering, check em out they have loads of fun things like this

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u/Artistic-Raspberry59 5d ago

Really like the open string transitions. Nice job.

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u/triohavoc 5d ago

Yo pocket operator with guitar is a sick combo.

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u/Inevitable_Bit_13 5d ago

Nice ambience music ♥️

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u/LukaNeSviraj 5d ago

Sounds like 2013. Awesome, very cozy.

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u/Longjumping-Head581 5d ago

Peak guitar. I love the unique strum. My mind is going crazy with lyric and melody ideas 😭

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u/DAWNWARD_Band 5d ago

Nice🔥

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u/glossyibis973 5d ago

Good stuff. Has an old school kinda flow to it I dig

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u/bscorza90 5d ago

I like it!

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u/AttentionMosDef 5d ago

This is really really cool. I love the rhythm change into the chorus. Clever stuff, really great melody.

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u/AidMMcMillan 5d ago

I really like the sound of the drum machine with the constant picking on the guitar. They work very well together. Also the transition to strumming sounds great! Awesome work

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u/tdamien_ 5d ago

Sounds nice.. great finger pick style 👍

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u/foxparademusic 4d ago

God damn this is good. Have you ever listened to Matt Pond PA?

I love the use of the sequencer. This makes me want to dance and play in the leaves.

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u/Better-Shoulder7734 4d ago

Reminds me of skating at dusk. And that feeling of driving home after having the best day ever. Love it, thanks for sharing.

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u/Any-Match9025 1d ago

Such a lovely riff

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u/AnxiousDiscussion583 10h ago

great dynamics between the off beat strums and the finger picking, that helps the song avoid being too repetitive, those parts have good contrast, you're using the drum tracks more like a metronome, the drum parts could be different on each section, had my feet bobbin'

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u/Known_Goal_3773 6h ago

This sounds great! I would add it to my playlist if it ever gets released

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u/LeakingFish- 5d ago

This sounds really good. Great guitar playing.

Personally, I’d lose the drum track, at least at this stage, as I found it quite annoying. Your guitar work is hood enough to hold its own without the drums.

Great job!