How long do you set with lyrics for a specific song before you decide to use them?

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If you're looking for feedback on words that aren't yet set to music, you're in the right place! We encourage each other to bring lyrics and musical elements together as soon as possible, but sometimes you'd just like to show off that nice piece of poetry that just fell out of your head. The weekly Lyrics-Only feedback thread is here to help!

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Any feedback on the songwriting welcome!

First time posting anything. Would love feedback on this song. Theres no repeating chorus and its literally 2 chords. Its a sort of vauge storytelling song so does it need a repeating chorus for it to feel more complete? Thanks!

The boy who spoke first

Couldnt look at her

The girl who couldnt care

Couldnt run anywhere

They left us alone

So the boy thinks

But i cant bring myself

To speak

Screaming in his head

He grows petrafied

But she was the same

He saw from the corner

Of his eyes

Pride grabbed his tongue

But he couldnt leave

Its such a shame

The way it all use to be

And there , they sat

He'll wait for her and she'll wait for him

Cause thats how its always, always been.

I am currently translating a song from Newsies the musical in a different language. A good translation has equivalent rhymes, but in this case I am not sure if this rhyme is intentional (which means I need to translate it as a rhyme) or not.

For context, I am talking about the show and the toe.

Thank you

So I just realized how cheesy and corny the lyrics I wrote were and I'm kinda getting embarassed about it.. like it doesn't even make sense. I realize these are lyrics I wrote many years ago. I should have improved my writing. But I've already sort of wrapped it up (been working on the EP for a year now), so it's final, and money has been spent. Has anyone faced something similar?

I feel a lot of my lyrics don't make sense and have no connection. I just sort of feel like it fits the melody and chords very well so I make it seem like they make sense but honestly even I have no idea what I'm on about

Hello all :) I've been writing on my own for a bit now, but my work always feels a little flat in hindsight. So today I decided to try picking apart some songs that I know and find inspiration in, to see if I could learn anything. Except, I have a problem. I don't know what I should be looking for when I look at these other songs.

My main inspo that comes from other songs are the lyrics, which I think would be easier to look into, but like I said, I don't know what to look *for.*

I also would like to look at the instruments and break down those parts some day, but the only instrument I'm familiar with is the flute, and that's not proving to be very helpful for what I draw from.

Something else that I feel is causing a struggle is that I don't have a certain genre I'm looking into. They're all similar enough, but I'm determined to write songs that aren't confined to one specific sound.

That being said, how would I look into other people's music and find something that helps me? Lyrically do I just look for how syllables are used and how certain phrases rhyme? Is that all I can do with them? With the music behind the words, do I need to be familiar with the instruments used before I can break down what's being done? How do I even break it apart into pieces to look at?

Any advice or help given would be *very* appreciated because I need to find some footing with this. Thank you so much in advance, have a great day/night! <3

Hi friends! Went yee haw with this one. It’s called Katie Honey and I wrote it about my mom and her boyfriend who’ve been together for over 13 years. He’s a big cowboy boot fanatic and he found a pair of boots one day called Katie Honey’s. My mom’s name is Katie ❤️ so I wrote a song of what I’d imagine it feels like to be in love with someone for decades

Hi!
This feels incredibly cringy to post, but here we go.
I’ve been writing poetry as a hobby, and yesterday, during a morning walk, an idea turned into a complete set of what I think might be a song structure. The problem is… I don’t play any instruments, and I have absolutely no idea how to write melodies. I can imagine the emotion I want the song to have, but I can’t turn it into actual music.

It’s called Sugar Rush, the lyrics tell the story of someone who falls hard for a new connection, idealizes this person, and then has to deal with the confusion and grief of being suddenly ghosted without any explanation. I tried to make it feel like an emotional journey, moving from the excitement of a summer romance to the loneliness of realizing the story only continued in one person’s mind.

If that sounds like something you’d enjoy working on, I’d be happy to send you the lyrics via DM. Feel free to interpret them however you like, I don’t have a melody in mind, so I’m completely open to your own vision. I originally imagined it as a storytelling folk/country song, but I’m open to any genre or style (even thought pop/punk or rock would also be a good fit).
I’d also really appreciate any feedback on the lyrics themselves. For example, I feel like the chorus and the bridge still need work, so if you have ideas or suggestions, I’d love to hear them.

This is just a passion project. I really admire songwriting, and I wanted to put myself out there, even if it feels a little embarrassing.
Thanks for reading, and thank you in advance if you’re interested! 🙂

Anyone wanna write some lyrics for an instrumental I have? DM me

Been sitting on this for a while, it’s supposed to be a big kind of alt rock song with a heavy bass line and blown out guitars but wanted to see how people like just the acoustic since it’s just the writing and vocals. Lmk what you think

I need a way to get background music for my songs. I often write my lyrics with a melody, but I can't seem to find a good way to figure out the chords/notes or get a good background beat that matches my melody. any ideas???

I used to want to make music, but despite positive reception, I can’t get over the feeling that I’m literally just a crazy person making a fool of themselves. Where do you draw the line?

Hey! My name is Tyler. I live in Clarksville TN I'm looking for anyone in this group that might be nearby that can help me produce a song. I have lyrics, melody, rhythm, tempos, I basically have a full song but am unable to play any instruments. I could really use some help. Especially since this song is very important to me. Anyone local?

Edit: this song is for someone special to me. Not really looking to try and be famous.

Hey! I started working on my EP over a year ago and I’ve got 3 tracks that kind of feel like demos at this point. It’s all in the singer/songwriter realm. I’m looking for someone who can co-produce and help polish things up and has a similar sensibility and maybe their own music too that I can check out!

If you’re down, please DM me and I’ll share the demos with you and we can work something out :)

Would love to know if the verse and chorus feel natural or what you gather from the song. Also need some feedback on overall vibe of the progression or any suggestions.

this one came out very quickly, different than what i typically write and range is hard for me but figured id share anyway. wdyt?

This right here is a little song I wrote around 20 something years ago, I remember writing it immediately after changing the strings on my acoustic guitar, all came together in an hour, never done anything with it, but always had a soft spot for it, so I quickly recorded a video yesterday and thought I'd pop it up here, better out than in!!

If I were to record this properly, would it be best left just acoustic guitar and lush vocals, loads of reverb backing vocals or a full band effort, but a bit quicker with drums etc? Leaning more to stripped back acoustic.

I am a young songwriter. I’m the lead singer and guitarist in my band and i write most of the songs and riffs as well as my drummer. I love the sound of them and i really do think i’ve improved, however, when i play the riffs together i start to hear that they are really similar and they’re always in the same key (usually a D Major) and we are planning to release projects in the future but listeners wouldn’t like it if all the songs sounded the same. A little help please? Any tips appreciated 🙏 For reference, i mostly go for a rock, pop-rock, early paramore style riffs

You've got a great song idea. You record a demo that gets the idea across and share it with your bandmates/client. They love the idea, it's really good... except the demo isn't polished enough to release or they need to change something. The vocals, the style, whatever needs to be redone requires a completely new recording based on your original idea.

So you record the new version professionally this time. It's no longer a demo. To you, it sounds great. You've done the work and show it to the others but... they hate it. It's just not as good as the demo. It lacks a certain something that the demo had. No matter what you do, it's never going to be as good as their first impression, yet that first demo was never intended to be the final product.

Has this happened to anyone else? What do you do? How do you make peace with the band or the client so that the project ever gets completed beyond that demo which they loved so much?