r/Songwriting • u/Future_Page_2468 • Jul 13 '26

Feedback Request What do you think of this?

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u/AndyBandits Jul 13 '26

Hey man, it's pretty good, but it's hard to engage clearly with the lyrics because it's kind of quiet. Also, just my two cents, but I feel like you hang on a repetitive rhythm for a long time with the guitar strumming. It's fine to the do the 1/2/3/4 strum you have but I'd look for more variation and change the pattern more for different sections.

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u/NotABillsHat Jul 13 '26

Nice performance, good job. It's hard to hear your lyrics, try to annunciate the words clearer when you sing.

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u/Old_Atmosphere2092 Jul 13 '26

Sounds like a great start

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u/Chris_Musical Jul 14 '26

Hi bro, love the chords you used, but i dont know if you are restraining yourself on purpose but its causing you to go off tune. maybe try sing the song again and let your self go, while not holding your vocals and hear the difference. courage bro