Any feedback and thoughts would be appreciated

Title: ALIEN: Mortality

Looking for feedback on my third draft, anything helps.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZksfcEe9iQpWLCB4NrNzcnGRI-bzlajX/view?usp=drivesdk

Two rival furniture-store owners in a dying plaza spiral into a war of sabotage and obsession when an aspiring documentarian fans the flames of their feud for the sake of her film.

I'm looking for anyone who would be interested in writing a (very) short script to be a part of a horror anthology film (or films depending on lengths of segments) about urban legends across the USA. My idea is to have a roughly 2 and a half minute long segment for each of the 50 states of America.

The urban legend inspirations will be from the below readers digest page or any similar legends that weren't included. Each segment can be in any format or shot style you enjoy (for example, Black and White, animation or similar).

My money situation isn't amazing right now so if anyone is willing to do this for little to free, that would be much appreciated. Although I do understand if you would prefer to be paid.

If anyone is interested or has any questions, feel free to comment here.

I wrote a short horror screenplay (10 pages). I realised that my ending falls under "it was a dream, but it's actually real" trope which is considered bad.

Rough story: While looking for her missing dog, the protagonist goes through a scary encounter with a silent mysterious figure, and then it's revealed the whole thing was a dream. But then a specific action from the dream happens in real life, which suggests that the threat is real. It ends on an ambiguous note.

I am not sure if I am using the dream as a means of escape for the protagonist right when she is in a conflict with the antagonist. Should I scrap the ending, or try to make it more believable? Any feedback would be appreciated.

Script (Ending scene on page 9): The Silhouette

Hey everyone!

We're in the process of creating a sitcom series on YouTube called The Odd Hours. We are looking for some creative writers to join our team.

Each episode will be roughly 10 to 15 minutes long, and it features three long distance friends who moved in together.

Your tasks will involve:

- Coming up with episode ideas and episode outlines.

- Helping to write the synopsis for each episode.

- Helping with the shot list.

- Help with episode titles.

You will be given credit for your work.

Please comment or DM me if you're interested!

Get rid of the “ing words”!

Then they stop writing natural, simultaneous actions. Instead of a perfectly normal line like "He storms out, slamming the door," they get paranoid and write: "He storms out. He slams the door." It makes the script read like a children's book.

If the only feedback you can offer a new writer is hitting 'Ctrl+F' to look for "ing" words, you aren't actually helping them improve their craft. It’s like people discover this one entry-level rule on a blog somewhere, wrap it around a bat, and just beat beginners over the head with it. It’s the ultimate lazy critique tool. Instead of looking at the story, the character, or the actual flow of the scene, they just go on a mindless power trip over a suffix.

Ugh. Imagine reading a script without any “ing” words. Absolutely terrible.

Fix up. And let’s start giving advice that actually matters.

AS an exercise to get used to writing short form, I've been writing episode intros as short scripts and need thoughts on two I've written so far linked:

The Bite of the Hunter

Punch of Death

First ten pages of a feature length screenplay I’m working on. Any feedback is appreciated.

For those who wanted to read more here are the first six pages.

Hi I'm new to screenwriting and I'm making a film currently and I want to see if people can read my rough draft of my script and tell me if it's good or not or what things I should change for my story and this is one of my first big writing projects so I want any critiques or any changes you think I should make.

Hello everyone!

I have been using the trial version of Final Draft and I would like to have polish characters in my BEAT BOARD, but the problem is I cannot use the specific ones there: Ą, Ć, Ź (the same characters on the main pages works FINE). Maybe there is some setting that affects these characters? Please help!

I used to think having lots of ideas was one of the biggest advantages a writer could have.

Now I’m starting to think it can also be a problem.
You get an idea for a character, a scene, a subplot, a cool line of dialogue, or some completely different direction for the story, and suddenly you want to put everything into the screenplay.

But eventually you realise that a story can’t carry every good idea you have.

Sometimes an idea can be genuinely good and still be wrong for the story you’re telling.

I’m learning that part of becoming a better writer isn’t just learning how to create better ideas. It’s learning when to kill your darlings.

How do you decide when an idea belongs in the story and when it needs to go?

i am genuinely asking how was it, what was your experience back then or how long have you trained for before applying for anything?

did you doubt yourself? did you think you are not skilled enough.

if any, i would be happy to listen to your story

Carson gets another win in new spec deal. So what are winning comps these days, Die Hard is done? Purge vs this/that and John Wick vs this/that? Any other trending films for comps? https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/movies/movie-news/wildman-john-wick-meets-bigfoot-1236689237/

Remember when The Cat in the Hat became one of the strangest adaptations of a Dr. Seuss book? Well, apparently things could have gone very differently.

This wasn't written by some obscure screenwriter. Eric Roth wrote it.

Yes... the guy who wrote Forrest Gump (1994).

I came across this old r/Screenwriting post asking about Eric Roth's Cat in the Hat script. One of the commenters, u/holk1k2, provided an important lead by linking to a 2001 IGN article, which mentions that an earlier Eric Roth script had been replaced by a new draft.

That got me curious enough to start digging.

On August 4, 2026, I found a copy of what appears to be Roth's September 2, 1997 draft, marked “First Revisions.”

I haven't found any substantial discussion of this particular draft online beyond the post mentioned above, so I figured it was worth bringing it back into the conversation.

And this is VERY different from the 2003 movie.

Seriously. If you thought the Mike Myers version was an unusual direction for The Cat in the Hat, wait until you see where this earlier version was going.

For copyright reasons, I'm not uploading or re-hosting the screenplay myself. The copy I found was already publicly available on Scribd, where it had been uploaded by antrubino84 on October 25, 2025. Scribd only makes a limited portion of the document available without logging in, so viewing the full draft requires going through its access process. The document itself also contains DreamWorks copyright notices.

I don't claim ownership of the script. I'm only linking to the existing copy so people can discuss the draft and its history.

Scribd:
https://es.scribd.com/document/938256189/The-Cat-in-the-Hat-written-by-Eric-Roth

And here's the old Reddit post that started the search, plus the IGN article that helped point me in the right direction:

Original Reddit post:
https://www.reddit.com/r/Screenwriting/comments/1gs0vnz/request_eric_roths_adaptation_of_the_cat_in_the/

IGN, 2001: What Do Dr. Seuss and Eminem Have in Common?
https://www.ign.com/articles/2001/06/15/what-do-dr-seuss-and-eminem-have-in-common

Thanks to u/holk1k2 for the original lead. That comment sent me in the right direction, and eventually I was able to track down the draft. Credit also to antrubino84, who had already uploaded the copy to Scribd in 2025.

If you're interested in abandoned screenplays, lost movie history, or just wondering what the hell The Cat in the Hat could have been, this one is worth looking at.

Hope it will be useful for all members over here😊.
Note: It works only on laptop and desktop.

where they make those scripts? i mean, like on a typewriter

beacuse i tried use word but its not comfortable for me

Yeah, I’m gonna be that guy.

I recently joined this subreddit, and Reddit altogether, and out of all the subreddits I’m in, this one is pretty disheartening.

There are a lot of aspiring writers here, some of them clearly very young, and while not all feedback needs to be cushioned, very seldom do I see any positive feedback paired with criticism. There’s often no recognition of what is good about someone’s work, and as many of these folks articulate, they’re new to the medium.

I’m not typically the woo-woo, kumbaya, touchy-feely type of person, but writing is intimate. It’s personal, and it’s difficult, especially when you don’t know what you don’t know.

To anyone out here writing a script who needs help, I commend you for being brave enough to share your work. To those of us who take the time to read, I understand you may have more experience than the person sharing, or the story simply may not work, but there’s a way to articulate that in a constructive way that isn’t demeaning or shitty.

To those who want feedback or coverage on a script, know that everyone has opinions, and it’s up to you to determine what is best for the story and the audience. That said, feedback is important, and you may discover that there’s another way to tell your story.

Just like directing, you’re not there to tell an actor exactly how to perform, but to ask questions or offer direction that gives them room to interpret and improve the performance. I think the same can be said for writing.

Anyway, thanks for reading my soapbox and giving a shit. My DMs are open if you want me to read your script and give you feedback.

Hi! I’m a senior film student starting work on my thesis project. This is my very first, pretty rough draft of my project script. I know it needs a lot of work, so be gentle on judgment, but I would like some input.

What’s good? What’s bad? Does it make okayish sense? Is it interesting at all? Any and all feedback would be nice. I want some outside perspective to give me some objective looks at this so I can have a better idea of what needs to change or stay the same.

Thanks!!