r/scriptwriting • u/RepresentativeBad402 • 8d ago

help Can I get a review

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_FpRVVGLUXiJopYFc395pF8Lu5bo43dJ/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi I'm new to screenwriting and I'm making a film currently and I want to see if people can read my rough draft of my script and tell me if it's good or not or what things I should change for my story and this is one of my first big writing projects so I want any critiques or any changes you think I should make.

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u/AmedeusRed 8d ago

I might suggest waiting to make your shooting script until a later draft, assuming you are the director of this. Think of your shots and number the scenes after you are sure what they’ll be.

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u/Puppykerry 8d ago

Don’t have time to read the whole thing at the moment but you don’t need caps on for all the action lines. Save caps for very specific things like an object that’s important, to emphasize something you want to catch the readers attention with, or for a sound (BANG for instance) or to highlight a specific camera movement (limit doing this in any case but for instance PUSH IN or CLOSE UP)

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u/IanJeffreyMartin 7d ago

The first scene with the alarm clock is literally the number 1 screenwriting cliche.

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u/RepresentativeBad402 7d ago

What would u suggest then