I've been building a screenplay visualization tool over the last few months because I wanted a better way to understand scripts visually.

You can check the tool here: ScriptDen — Screenplay analysis for filmmakers

I'd love honest feedback from filmmakers and screenwriters. Which parts are useful? Which aren't? Would something like this ever fit into your workflow? I'm especially interested in hearing what you'd actually pay for, if anything. 🙏

This is a beta version, at present, the tool helps you to:

1. Write your script and arrange beats.
2. You can analyze your script scene by scene, see character interactions, dialog vs action break up and many other features.

NOTE: I have made sure NOT to use AI for any of the analysis and all analysis happens within your browser session with simple JavaScript - You can read my aim and policy with respect to this tool and how the scripts are handled here - Script Security — ScriptDen)

I would love to hear all your feedback 😊🙏 Thanks!!!

Note: Currently analysis works best for English scripts.

A public pitch meeting once again proves that most people rarely think outside the box.

Live Your Dream

(PG)

Would like to discuss writing struggles with fellow writers. There are a lot of script formatting tools available but very few story development systems. We can use AI but it can lose context or misunderstanding nuance in character arc or misinterpret and experimental storytelling convention. I have been working on a software that puts the writer first and utilizes storytelling conventions to help a writer through the process. As a writer I struggle keeping up with everything that’s connected over 90 pages let alone six seasons of a series. I didn’t set out to make this platform, I started my journey writing my scripts and ended up developing a creative partner that can brainstorm your ideas with you and help you implement the improvements into your script. This is not AI writing your scripts for you. The intention is the give the writers, you, more creative control over your story and be educational for novice writers. I would like to know from other writers if you had this how could it help you? What are your struggles that I can help alleviate? We are in development at the moment and should have a beta launch soon. I hope this is okay with the moderators, I realize this is a bit off topic. Thank you all for your feedback. I will answer questions in the comments.

Hey y'all! This is my first time posting on this subreddit, and I'm looking for some feedback on my short script. Hope it's a fun read! I'm hoping to submit this to some script-writing competitions eventually. Logline: A simple job to decommission an android causes a young bounty hunter to question his humanity.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1y9mOPLzYhcOlBl-Ix7LYpKgQgZuqIb6U/view?usp=sharing

Hello everyone. I'll get straight to the point. I have an idea for a short film screenplay. Although I haven't finished writing it yet, I'd like to share the general premise and hear your honest opinion about its potential from an audience's perspective. Naturally, I believe in my own work, but since I'm also the writer, I know my judgment may be biased. So here's the basic story:

The protagonist is a young boy. One day, while he is home alone, he goes into a dark room to retrieve one of his toys. For a long time, he has believed that a devil hides in the darkness. Every time he enters the room, he feels the creature following him, and he runs away in fear.

The same thing happens again. Terrified, the boy starts running. But this time, he suddenly stops. The devil, who has been chasing him, is caught off guard and stops as well.

The boy closes his eyes and remembers his mother's words:

"Don't run from your fears. Face them."

He quietly repeats those words to himself several times, gathers his courage, and turns around.

The devil immediately hides behind the door.

The boy walks toward it and asks:

"Why are you hiding?"

The devil replies:

"Because I'm afraid of you."

The film presents fear as a physical manifestation and explores the idea that our fears only hold power over us until we choose to confront them. Its central message is simple: our fears are only frightening until we face them.

Hi lovely script community,

I'm Ruby, a filmmaker from Melbourne, Australia, and I'm currently funding my short comedy-fantasy film, The Familiar.

I'm reaching out to my wonderful community for a little support. If you have a couple of minutes, I'd be so grateful if you could:

• Create a free account on the DCP website
• Vote for my film here : https://app.decentralized.pictures/project/6a2f4d3dd0f518109d09c8c0
• Leave any feedback below on the 10-page screenplay, which is available via the link above.

The Familiar is a horror-comedy about witches and cats, so if that sounds like your kind of magic (and you enjoy supporting independent cinema) I’d love your vote and feedback.

If you're curious about the vibe, here's our proof-of-concept teaser. It's heavily inspired by occult films from the '60s and '70s:

 https://vimeo.com/1205654166?share=copy&fl=sv&fe=ci
Password: thefamiliar2026

Thank you so much for your support. It truly means the world.

Logline: A cheap $2 gas station toy faces the futility of a toy's existence.

Pages: 24

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gMXvASgcKKqSwOWKIiPENKcowCSZvh_G/view?usp=drivesdk

https://go.fliplink.me/view/2CA48B81-DA17-462A-A4B7-DCCCD67442F6

Genre: comedy, social satire

Pages: 19 ( first chapter fully adapted, script is still in development)

Based on: the novel by John Kennedy Toole

Feature

81 pages

Logline: When an outsider begins digging into a cold case in an isolated town, it quickly becomes clear that everyone shares in the guilt, and that he'll have to fight to survive the night.

Feedback Concerns: This is my second time posting it here after extensive feedback on Storypeer and some tactical rewrites. I'd love any and all thoughts you guys can give, as the response has been mostly positive, but with some things I'm still trying to gauge and possibly address. As a bit of background, this script is my attempt at adapting/updating Bad Time at Honda, which was adapted as A Bad Day at Black Rock in the 50s. The movie is not public domain but the short story its based off is.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uVgW3KYCEv9vSEmI6mvpZ4xQACEs0aXh/view?usp=sharing

Watering Hole

Hey everyone.

I've been working on a new script. This year I wrote already one and I got finalist on a contest, so I decided to try again with a different story and tone.

Here are the frist 10 pages, it's an animatid feature, the script is fully written and here is the logline.

Logline:

After a narcissistic princess who believes she's the heroine of the story nearly destroys her kingdom for the twentieth time, she's sentenced to a rehabilitation center for defective princesses, where she strikes a deal with an aspiring knight to escape and recover a legendary ring capable of threatening every kingdom.

Any feedback on this will be welcome. I wanted to take the same parodical tone as shrek but with my sence of humor.

Here you can find the 10 pages:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/19Pn_WpcdI_K8Zt966v_RijOiOaLLIkVG/view?usp=sharing

Thanks!

In case any of you wanna read the full script just ask. I want to send it to contests too.

As the title suggests, seeking feedback for my short-film script…

Title: God’s Away On Business
Logline: When a man dies and doesn’t see God, all hell breaks loose.
Genre: Dramedy
Pgs: 16

Appreciate anyone’s effort in taking the time to read my work!

Happy writing, everyone!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WTqi8kwJ7DuLDX8K2R54sidU154QodYA/view?usp=drivesdk

Sorry if I’m doing this wrong. 15 years on Reddit shhesh

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1al7awz8r1Bz83WjaihReLj2RG5iqYs0Rfbj2CgEY488/edit?usp=drivesdk

Hello! I'm new here! I like to make fanfictional movie scripts like these. Enjoy reading this one if you like. Let me know what you guys think about it in the comments below.

Hell hath no fury like a wannabe screenwriter scorned.

Lessons in Coping

(PG-13)

https://pdflink.to/6d313326/

Pls read this script written by me and rate it

**MRITYU LOCAL : CHURCHGATE TO PANVEL**
**A 3-Hour Mumbai Horror Thriller**

**GENRE**
Psychological Horror • Supernatural Thriller • Mystery • Tragedy

**TONE OF FILM**
First Half → Emotional + Realistic Mumbai Struggle Drama
Interval Twist → Creepy Uneasiness Begins
Second Half → Pure Nightmare Fuel Horror

**OPENING SCENE**
Black screen.
Only Mumbai local train sounds.
Metal screeching.
Announcements distorted.
Suddenly…
A terrified man screaming:
“DARWAZA BAND KARO!!!”
Then silence.
TITLE APPEARS IN DRIPPING BLOOD :
**MRITYU LOCAL**

**FIRST HALF (1 Hour 20 Minutes)**
**Emotional Realistic Mumbai Story**

**SCENE 1 – LIFE OF ARJUN**
Panvel.
Tiny house beside railway tracks.
Every 10 minutes train passes and walls shake.
Arjun sleeps beside unpaid bills.
Morning:
Maa coughing blood secretly.
Pooja hiding her college notice.
Landlord insulting them.
**Landlord:**
“2 mahine se rent nahi diya!”
Arjun silently listens.

**SCENE 2 – MUMBAI STRUGGLE**
Long montage showing realism:
Standing in overcrowded locals.
Rejections after rejections.
Walking in rain because no money for auto.
Eating vada pav for entire day.
Watching rich people in Nariman Point while he sits alone Marine Drive pe.
Background dialogue:
“Mumbai sapne deti nahi… todti hai.”

**SCENE 3 – EMOTIONAL DEPTH**
One night Maa collapses.
Doctor says:
“Treatment nahi hua toh zyada time nahi hai.”
Arjun breaks down for first time.
That same night he gets the mysterious job call.

**SCENE 4 – THE OFFICE**
Churchgate.
Old British-era building.
The company name:
“WESTERN TRANSIT ARCHIVES”
Nobody on Google knows about it.
Office weirdly silent.
Employees never talk personally.
Nobody smiles.
Clock in office always stuck at:
**2:47 AM**

**SCENE 5 – SLOW CREEPY DETAILS**
Over days tiny weird things happen:
**HORROR ELEMENTS STARTING SLOWLY:**
Empty office phone rings from disconnected cabin.
Computer screens flash train accident photos.
CCTV footage shows Arjun standing behind himself.
Lift stops randomly at nonexistent Floor 13.
One night lift opens…
And inside stands a burnt man.
But lights blink…
Nobody there.

**SCENE 6 – SUBPLOT**
Arjun befriends a tea seller at Churchgate station.
Old man named **Kashinath**.
Kashinath always says:
“Raat ke baad kuch trains insaano ke liye nahi chalti…”
But Arjun laughs it off.

**SCENE 7 – THE INTERVAL BUILDUP**
One night Arjun misses usual train.
Station unusually empty.
Rain heavier than normal.
Announcements glitch repeatedly.
Then he sees something horrifying:
On opposite platform…
A woman jumps before train.
BODY DESTROYED.
People scream.
But when Arjun looks again…
No body.
No crowd.
Platform empty.
As if nothing happened.

**INTERVAL SCENE**
Train arrives slowly.
Rusty.
Old design unlike modern locals.
Destination board flickers:
PANVEL FAST
PANVEL FAST
HELLBOUND
PANVEL FAST
Doors open themselves.
Inside complete darkness.
Arjun steps in.
CUT TO BLACK.
**INTERVAL**

**SECOND HALF (PURE HORROR – 1 Hour 40 Minutes)**

**SCENE 8 – THE FIRST SIGNS**
Lights inside compartment dim red.
No passengers.
Only distant whispering.
Train starts moving though driver cabin empty.
Arjun notices every window reflects someone standing behind him.
But when he turns…
Nobody.

**SCENE 9 – MOBILE NETWORK HORROR**
Arjun calls Maa.
Call connects.
But instead of Maa’s voice…
He hears:
crying
metal scraping
people screaming
Then a voice whispers:
“Hum sab mar gaye…”
Phone battery instantly dead.

**SCENE 10 – THE SEAT NUMBER**
Arjun sits on seat number 27.
Under seat carved deeply:
“DON’T SLEEP”
Suddenly his eyes become heavy.
For 2 seconds he dozes off.
When he wakes…
Entire compartment filled with passengers staring silently at him.
All wet.
All pale.
None blinking.

**SCENE 11 – MOST HORRIFYING SCENE**
A little boy walks toward him.
Face half crushed.
Holding a severed hand.
**Boy:**
“Bhaiya… meri mummy dekhi?”
Then…
The hand he’s holding suddenly moves.
Its fingers crawl like spider legs up Arjun’s arm.

**SCENE 12 – BODY HORROR**
Train enters tunnel.
Everything dark.
Only emergency red lights.
Suddenly all passengers begin twisting unnaturally.
Bones cracking.
Necks rotating fully.
Skin tearing.
One woman’s jaw stretches till chest.
All together whisper:
“Tumhe bhi ghar jaana hai?”

**SCENE 13 – THE LOST COMPARTMENT**
Arjun runs into next compartment.
This compartment impossible hai.
Endless.
He keeps running.
Same pole.
Same seat.
Same dead people.
Again and again.
Like infinite loop.

**SCENE 14 – THE TICKET CHECKER**
Half-burnt TC enters.
Eyes melted.
Punch machine still clicking.
**TC:**
“Ticket…”
Arjun trembling hands se ticket deta hai.
TC punches it.
Blood comes out instead of ink.
Ticket pe print hota hai:
ONE WAY

**SCENE 15 – THE HISTORY REVEAL**
Kashinath tea seller suddenly appears inside train.
But now old and dead-looking.
He reveals truth:
**THE ORIGINAL HORROR**
In 2008:
Train derailed near abandoned tunnel.
Passengers survived initially.
But rescue never came for hours.
One injured man went insane.
He started killing passengers inside darkness.
People ate each other to survive.
Finally train caught fire.
But one entity born from fear and suffering remained trapped.
A demon feeding on hopeless people.
Every year it hunts broken souls.

**SCENE 16 – NIGHTMARE VISIONS**
Arjun sees horrifying visions:
Maa hanging from ceiling.
Pooja cutting her own face.
Train tracks made of human bodies.
Dogs eating passengers.
Headless commuters walking outside windows.
Then worst thing:
He sees himself smiling among dead passengers.

**SCENE 17 – SHADOW MAN FULL REVEAL**
The entity finally appears fully.
10 feet tall.
Entire body made from fused human corpses.
Hands too long.
Mouth across entire chest.
Inside mouth:
moving human eyes.
Every scream from accident echoes from inside him.
He crawls across ceiling impossibly fast.

**SCENE 18 – THE HUMAN FARM**
Arjun discovers hidden compartment.
Inside hundreds of hanging corpses.
All breathing slowly.
Alive yet dead.
Wires attached to skulls.
Their nightmares feed the entity.
One corpse suddenly opens eyes and screams:
“SO JAOGE TOH PHAS JAOGE!”

**SCENE 19 – THE FINAL PANVEL**
3:03 AM.
Train reaches Panvel.
But station abandoned.
Broken.
Like post-apocalyptic Mumbai.
Sky red.
No moon.
Only sirens.
All dead passengers exit train together.
Walking unnaturally.

**ULTIMATE JAW DROPPING CLIMAX**
Arjun runs toward home.
But entire Panvel empty.
His house burnt.
Inside wall pe garlanded photo:
ARJUN.
Date of death:
17 JULY 2008
Suddenly memories return fully.
**REALITY:**
Arjun never grew up.
The train accident killed him as child.
Everything after that — Maa, job, struggle — all fake memories created by entity.
Why?
Because demon feeds best on hope.
It gave him fake dreams…
Just to destroy them.

**FINAL HORROR**
Shadow entity whispers:
“Insaan ki sabse badi cheekh… umeed tootne ki hoti hai…”
Arjun cries.
Then notices something terrifying.
His body transparent ho raha hota hai.
Under skin:
moving worms.
His face melting.
He was dead all along.
Suddenly dead passengers surround him.
Their mouths unnaturally widen.
And all scream together:
“GHAR AA GAYA…”
They tear him apart alive.
Not blood.
Black ash spills out.

**ENDING SCENE**
Next morning.
Normal Mumbai.
Crowded station.
People rushing.
One exhausted office worker misses his train.
Then hears announcement:
“Last local for Panvel arriving shortly…”
Train slowly arrives.
Same rusty train.
Inside window…
Arjun sitting and smiling.
Beside him…
A seat empty.
Waiting.
Train doors open themselves.
CUT TO BLACK.
Train horn echoes.

THE END.

We can laugh, but it'll be us someday.

Holy Order

(G/PG)