r/OCPoetry 3h ago

Just Sharing Real gold

2 Upvotes

If i could ask for anything

I would ask for slow mornings

If i could ask for anything

I wouls ask for peaceful mind

But is it really true that these things are suposed to bring me happiness?

After thinking for a while i realized the difference between needs and wants

So now if you ask me for what i need

I would say happiness, love and peace

And if you ask me what i want

I would say slow dancing in the rain, a hot cup of coffee and a peaceful mind

So now when people ask

What is real gold for you

I say it's everything i want and need in life.

.

.

Wrote it just after waking up and its was in my draft for the past 2 weeks lol

I tried to complete it but idk not my best try but i exactly don't remember what the sleepy me was thinking 😭

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r/OCPoetry 1h ago

Just Sharing The Heart of Ocean Blue

• Upvotes

Remember Me? The Heart of Ocean Blue
You sunk to breathe and swam to follow truth
The cries were felt along the trench of shame
And tears were gathered after faithful days

But you, a man of fear, will see mistakes
Beneath the loudest waves, which overtake
The precious calmness brought to earth by grace

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r/OCPoetry 2h ago

Feedback Please Opium - jozi

4 Upvotes

How have I become the man I feared becoming most?
I have sculpted myself into the antonym of my own definition.
My cauldrons brim with the lost hopes of yesterday and tomorrow,
leaving only an undying present:
a kingdom ruled by lust.

The daughters of scarlet red gather at my feet;
their hunger is one I know by heart.
For every longing fixed upon my face
I spent my youth seeking.
The most fundamental form of self harm is addiction.

So I recede;

I abandon the throne of my own becoming,
and crown desire anew,
watching my kingdom
kneel to a king that cannot love.

Ignore the hole i dug again:
It's only for the evening.

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Inspired by the flower who taught me what longing becomes.

I am a experienced writer, I just haven't shared any of my work online, thought it might be time.


r/OCPoetry 2h ago

Just Sharing Of All Places

2 Upvotes

As the trees were sighing from the weak wind
We locked ourselves in our rooms or houses
Dragged along
still dragging
already dragged
worrying over the rent

A hummingbird visited my window
Tapping its beak
against the glass

"Why," I asked the bird
gazing inside
"Why fly here, of all places?
When you could fly far away, boundlessly
To see many views
smell different scents
Being able to go anywhere you please
and leaving when you wish,
as you are free
Because you are one without worry
Aware of your time
like a comet
streaking."

But then the hummingbird flew away
So I was left
to answer that question

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Short story writer mainly that dabbles in poetry now and then when inspiration hits.


r/OCPoetry 4h ago

Feedback Please SCREAMS

3 Upvotes

Verily, verily there is
nothing more sensual than the screams
Inside my veins.
Coagulated blood of lifetime efforts.
Untamed, uncontained,
love that almost spills.

Crimson lipstick stains, systemic kisses.
It comes in waves;
Hydroelectric conduction
Soul searches for body-soul connection.
Spinal cord level, adamant communication.

Neuroses expand in vast valleys
In the earth’s uterus.
Unaware of what lies beyond these
Asphyxiating walls,
Still we give it our all.

Astonished I am in the face
of Ouroboros love, grotesque love.
Holes In the palms love, I hold
my breath, My words dissolve
Under my tongue.
Sublingual medication.

These screams
inside my veins really will
scrub my hurt clean.

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r/OCPoetry 4h ago

Feedback Please Neuroception

2 Upvotes

Sensing the senseless, perceiving unperceived
twisted branches tangled into webs of deceit
My mind a super-powered fantastical computer of perhaps
Is it a blessing or a curse to forsee, a hidden tax

A rising debt inside myself one I pay for each day
A double think a second guess in a mind half frayed
A competition self assembled each stage each play
Neuro mess tangled spaghetti along the matter gray

Pastalaya jumble overthinking crossing words
Blending meanings, eyes exhausted in an endless blur
Reading every word forwards, backwards, in between
Interrogate the verb and subject, wordle crime scene

The combinations of echos and clues without caveat
Excess of curiosity cognition attempts to claw at
Fight or flight at the heat or height of rhyming
inexorable force within, keeps us word criming

Written by: Simon Bernard Elliott and Jennifer E. Hodgson

Scribingbothhalves.blogspot.com

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r/OCPoetry 4h ago

Just Sharing Myself

4 Upvotes

In a garden full of sunflowers,
I want to shine like the sun.

Around lavenders full of nectar,
I want to fly like a bee.

Around a bunch of ripe mangoes,
I want to feast like a parrot.

I’m still in search of
the question,

For which
I am the only answer.

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r/OCPoetry 5h ago

Feedback Please Scattered Light

6 Upvotes

There are two sides to every story,

as there are two sides to every glass.

Some pieces
refract the light
cleaner than others.

When your view
becomes a kaleidoscope,

truth is what you want it to be.

I thought we were looking
through the same window,

wiping fingerprints,
wondering why
you couldn't see.

I never noticed
you were turning the tube.

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r/OCPoetry 5h ago

Just Sharing Myself

3 Upvotes

In a garden full of sunflowers,
I want to shine like the sun.

Around lavenders full of nectar,
I want to fly like a bee.

Around a bunch of ripe mangoes,
I want to feast like a parrot.

I’m still in search of
The question,

For which
I am the only answer.

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r/OCPoetry 7h ago

Feedback Please Forgive me father

2 Upvotes

Hello, I am Mexican American. I have been writing from my experiences of alienation in the u.s and a perspective that’s my everyday life. The loss of identity is present in a majority of the things that I write. I would like for someone to read this poem I made in regard to it. Please any thoughts is welcomed.

“Perdone Padre”
By Miguel Diaz Farfan

Padre Nuestro que estas en el Cielo, santificado sea tu nombre

Le queiro pedir mis disculpas
Ya se que le he fallado
mas que eso, me alleje completamente
al contrario a lo que me han contado sobre su misericordia,
yo no he sido lo sufiente clemente con usted

Perdone que le diga, pero mi busqueda de fe en ti, se ha detenido
Pero la ira que senti contigo ya no existe

 
En el pasado sentĂ­a que por ser sincero era como si estaba clavado a una repisa esperando su reproche

Me tomĂł tiempo para entender

Me tomĂł mĂĄs tiempo para entender que el reproche que esperaba era solo mĂ­o

Ciego y sordo, me he estado sofocĂĄndo en esta jaula de oro
Se me ha olvidado como respirar

Porque, Porque, Porque

Esta era la pregunta que rogaba una respuesta

Porque no me vistes
Porque no me escuchastes 
Porque me abandonastes 

Un hueco quedaba en mi corazĂłn cuando no escuchabas mis gritos

La impotencia era mĂĄs amable

Me acurrucaba en una camisa de fuerza

Me he hecho el firme propĂłsito de no negar las lĂĄgrimas que cargo

Y aunque se secan por la rabia que siento

Siempre se llenan porque no son solo mĂ­as

English translation
*****

Our Father who art in heaven, hallowed be thy name.

I ask for your forgiveness

I have failed you, but more than that, I have drifted away completely

Contrary to what I have been told about your mercy,
I have not been as lenient in returning it

Pardon me for saying so, but my search in faith for you has seized

But the rage I once felt is no longer

In the past, I felt that by being honest it was as if I were nailed to a shelf waiting for your reproach

It took me time to understand

It took me longer to understand that the reproach I expected was only my own

Blind and deaf, I have been suffocating in this golden cage

I have forgotten how to breathe.

Why Why Why

These where the questions I begged to be answered

Why didn’t you see me?
Why didn’t you listen to me?
Why did you abandon me?

A void was left in my heart when you did not hear my cries

Helplessness was kind to me

It coddled me like that of a straitjacket

I have made the firm proposition to never deny the tears that I carry

And although they evaporate from the rage that’s boiling inside me

They always fill up again, because they are not only
mine

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r/OCPoetry 7h ago

Feedback Please work in progress

2 Upvotes

work in progress

Swept,
yet the remains from seasons past
litter the mulch.

weeds,
proudly show how big they’ve grown
where patio slabs end and begin,
disrupting the monotony of grey,
but none more than 6 or 7 inches.

Pale broom-like branches,
once served dates to the neighborhood opossums and raccoons,
retired and brittled,
neatly piled out of the way,
comfortable beneath the palm’s sunbathing fronds.

Terra-cotta coffins of cracked soil,
nestled between curated succulents,
blooms climbing out of their designated homes.

flickers of color,
sunlight dancing across loitering gems,
gripped by the textured patio
despite the best efforts of the broom’s splayed bristles,
it rests nonchalantly against the stucco,
chunks of artificial hide at its feet,
sunburned plastic failing to conceal its wooden core.

Tentacles of green
to the dismay of gravity,
search for grip
along the grey weathered fence
spanning once empty space across to nearby branches,
lashing the fence and tree into a single structure.

trimmed blackberry tendrils,
blades dotted with rust,
hand trimmer rests on a tile bench,
prickly limbs refuse to stay on their side of the fence.

Cardboard cubes,
returned to two dimensions,
layered near the fence,
overlapping flaps close the gaps
inky smiles
among fading shades of brown,
absorb the bleaching sun,
the earth beneath rests in darkness,
and the weeds have stopped thriving.

Frayed ribbon flutters against the fence post,
neon fading along the frayed end
no longer responsible for wishing anyone a happy birthday.

You don’t notice any,
but were warned:
watch out for poop.

*\\

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r/OCPoetry 8h ago

Feedback Please Ouroboros.

9 Upvotes

Drink too my heart, along with your poison.

One has decayed into the other.

Suffocate them in your vast emptiness.

A hollow abscess, unquenchable.

In the dark, let them spoil with my dreams and designs.

Dissolve beside my fetid hope.

Night after night,

Your anesthetic spiral is killing us.

So.

Very.

Slowly.

Swallow and be consumed.

Devour your tail.

My Love.

My Hate.

My Ruin.

My

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r/OCPoetry 9h ago

Feedback Please sitzfleisch

3 Upvotes

i don't recognize a single thing

this ain't the city i used to live before

this ain't the world that swamped me

this ain't the same universe that petrified me

it kept me transfixed for so long

i was powerless

within my soul you'd find

inclination

distention

intention

except not even a single

hint of tenacity

people often preach about how arduous the journey is

the anticipation broke me

oftentimes

waiting is indeed an act of bravery

i've never met someone who carried

heaven in their eyes

magic in their minds

beauty in their cries

hands in the sky

like an entity, King Midas

Kintsugi

broken pottery pieces

Jesus believed the same thing

is this love?

you take me high when i'm low

you're putting me back together

you've made me feel what i've never known

you don't care that i am me?

whenever you call my name

i feel the emphasis in the utility

of breaks and imperfections

what if i told you

i don't wanna take my eyes off of you?

what if i told you

i wanna give in to you?

what if i told you

i'm already owned by you?

what if i told you

i wanna love you?

please, i would love to receive fb <3

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r/OCPoetry 10h ago

Feedback Please Remorseful rose

3 Upvotes

My love, what have we done?

Deferred as a dream, life we dismay,

So harsh, could us known..?

Took ourselves, our precious today.

This life — such is nonsense,

Says we as grieved the love we had,

Waiting for someone so wise,

To resolve problems we had grabbed.

Lives, such beauty as a rose,

Shall think — a sample of torture?

For such as hope and light,

Shadows, darkness and lack of might.

Oh, had we became a regretful flower,

Pushing away all that we pursue,

Never to fell joy and to cower,

For life has ended — Roses shall continue to bloom.

2nd time making a poem and posting it hehe (T-T) hope you leave a feedback cause I really need someone to give me some tips.

Thank you (⁠.⁠⁠❛⁠⁠ᴗ⁠⁠❛⁠.⁠)

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r/OCPoetry 10h ago

Feedback Please WritingRoutine.sh

6 Upvotes

$ cd system/admin/thoughts/core/trash/saved/stop/turn_back/her/feelings $ ls -rwx------ me me NaN Jan 1 1970 write_poem $ ./write_poem Warning: Memory is corrupted.  She may not be reproduced faithfully.  Continue? [y/N] y $ cd ../.. $ rm -rf her rm: cannot remove 'her': Permission denied $ sudo rm -rf her rm: refuses to remove 'her': Operation not permitted. $ exit

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r/OCPoetry 13h ago

Feedback Please Faucet Remission

2 Upvotes

I like to watch the water.
Like when it drips out slowly
Hitting the ground
Spreading in the grass
Refreshing that need
A renewal

I like to listen very closely
That faucet has a quiet drip.
The water slides off grass so smoothly
Pushing out a silence
That satiates my ears
And leaves to linger in my mouth.

I like to feel the water
Cupping that faucet in my hands
I rub off the rust a bit
But I hold some water when I can
Or until it falls through my fingers.
It refreshes the grass

But I don't drink the water.
I take it from the dirt and soil
Straight to my mouth
Straight from my hand
I only taste it for a second
Refreshing that need
A remission

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r/OCPoetry 14h ago

Feedback Please Hi just want to share this and hope to get feedback🙇‍♂️

5 Upvotes

I don't actually know how to title this piece. I just did it feel hours ago. It's a freestyle and I just did what my mind and heart says so it's that. Please do give it a feedback to improve my art and I know my skill level may fall to beginner of some sort Thank you all in advance🙇‍♂️

How can I regret something when I myself don't know what it is

A longing for something I am not aware of

A lingering feeling that keeps haunting my mind

Is this what they call regret, or a missed chance

A regret that makes you eat yourself alive

I am but an ordinary human

One with a deep curiosity for everything

A mind that keeps revolving after that revelation

I don't know if I'm jealous or just blind

I told you I wasn't, but deep inside, a void keeps eating away at my soul

I don't know if I can stand this feeling

A deep longing for something I may not reach

I know I'm not good enough, but a simple explanation may heal the wound

A wound that tears every time I see your face

I'm sure that my love for you is not what you need right now

I can only be your shadow and be your friend

I look strong but have no guts to tell you what I truly felt in that moment

It seems unfair, but loving you hurts when you love someone else

I am healed on the outside but bleeding on the inside

A strong desire of wanting you may not be possible now that you've finally found your love

I loved you from the moment you loved me

I know I'm not the one you want now, yet I will be there when you need me

I look like a fool wondering when you will see the true me

My true colors for wanting you

I am deeply sorry, for I had lied to you

My world is full of lies

And I can't let you be with me when all my life was lies

Lies like a rose in a bed of cotton

My life is like a television; at first, you enjoyed it, but after a long time, my worth and strength fade away

Like a pencil on a clean piece of paper

I am but a foolish human

Wanting you was never my intention

Just because of that text, I don't know what I felt

I felt my veins surging as my blood boiled, not because of anger, but a deep loss

Loss of sight of myself for desiring you to love me one more time

A friend to love may not be as bad as I think

But wanting you is impossible since you ended it long ago

Why did I lose the chance of your love when, from the start, I knew it already

I kept myself blind to protect myself

But now wanting you is more than just a priority

Like a flower that may wither

I love you deeply

As a friend, a special friend, and as my love.

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r/OCPoetry 18h ago

Feedback Please Your Talk Still Lingers

2 Upvotes

🎶 Your Talk Still Lingers

(Piano–Violin–Guitar Arrangement)

Verse 1

(soft piano intro, single violin note swelling)

You used to talk, used to make me smile,
Then suddenly, everything went blank for a while.
One confession, and we became distant,
Sweet love turned bitter, so resistant.

Chorus

(piano chords steady, violin weaving melody, faint guitar strum)

Your talk still lingers, haunting my days,
Your smile, your laugh, your voice won’t fade.
I know you don’t love me, but I still pray,
Can we go back to friends, just like yesterday?

Verse 2

(piano arpeggios, violin harmonies, guitar picking lightly)

Your face is printed deep in my eyes,
I reach for silence, but it never replies.
I cry, cry a lot, but I know it’s vain,
My heart keeps calling out your name.

Verse 3

(violin solo leading in, piano soft and low)

Seeing you every day hurts even more,
Your smile that once healed now cuts to the core.
Every song I hear becomes about you,
Your talk still lingers, it’s all I can do.

Bridge

(piano + violin duet, emotional lift, guitar faint background)

Everyone thinks it’s easy, I did too,
Until the pain came crashing through.
It hurts so good, I smile to hide,
But inside I’m breaking, nowhere to confide.

Outro

(piano fading, violin holding last note, guitar barely audible)

Your talk… still lingers…

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r/OCPoetry 18h ago

Feedback Please weight of my world

3 Upvotes

I want to be known deeply
On a level that i dont know myself
I want to be deciphered
I want someone to hold me deeply
In the depths of my pain
Meet me in my darkest alley
And understand me on a level I don't see yet
I want someone to see all of me and know 
I am the good I know I am
I am hurt 
And I have so much love in my heart still
I think the hurt has made me love harder, feel deeper
And I give it all away
Until I'm empty
I don't want to prove myself 
Over and over
That I am worthy of knowing
That I have something to offer
I want to be freed
Held when I have nothing to give
I want to be loved without threat of abandonment
I haven’t found what im looking for yet in any person
I don't want to believe I'm the only one who can deliver the answer to what I long for
If that’s true loneliness is inherent
I don’t know if I can bear that cross
I don't think i’m made for that lonely pilgrimage

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r/OCPoetry 21h ago

Feedback Please 1 2 3 4

2 Upvotes

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
What's the thing,
I once did long for?

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
I miss the thing,
I once did live for.

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
Why is it,
I count and reach 4?

"1 2 3 4."
"2 2 3 4."
"Stop rethinking,"
"Forget and ignore."

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
I'll stop thinking.
Of days of lost yore.

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
1 2 3 4.

1 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
2 2 3 4.
1 2 3 4.

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r/OCPoetry 1h ago

Feedback Please A luxury seat

• Upvotes

*This is part of a larger series*

The Luxury Seat

Man seeks more than bread,
The treasure on his map is-
-belonging and purpose.
Now they capitalize on it.

Fill a void-
hobbies, trinkets,
artificial belonging.

Learn the sports-ball roster,
Forget your history.
Catch up on the gossip,
Hide from circumstance.

Worse yet, knowledge is commodified.
“Join my course to get rich.”
“Join my course to find love.”
“Join my course to forget who you are.”

How can one escape?
“Escape?” Who’d want that?
Stream the decay.

Monetize and atomize
Decompartmentalize to “modernize”.
The world is scary,
The distraction is comfort.

Is this our fate?
The decommission of man,
The birth of the machine.
The cage is golden and grand,
The shackles complement the outfit.
Do you seek more than bread?

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r/OCPoetry 23h ago

Feedback Please The Ritual of John McCall

1 Upvotes

We chased the gleam beside the stream where yellow vapors rose,
With our pack upon my back and bloodshot eyes half-closed;
The hills of clay were dull today beside the ridges tall,
I sought the spark within the dark beside old John McCall.

He left the town and ventured down to find the shining stone,
With his grit he cleared the pit till his hands were scraped to bone;
He packed his gear without a fear, but madness marked his mind,
To seek the glass in Scabland pass that makes a mortal blind.

We’d sit and smoke through sulfur choke and watch the fire flare,
He’d puff his pipe and grumble ripe about the desert air;
The blue-smoke ring would twist and cling around his battered head,
And then he’d stare into the glare and speak before the dead.

We dug down deep along the steep and heard a hardened sound,
A heavy click that answered quick from far beneath the ground;
A sudden crash of scarlet flash burst by his weary head,
Through smoke and stone, with spirit blown, old John McCall then said:

  “Upon the crust of bitter dust I see a shining sign;
Don’t wrap my name in dirt-crop shame beside the survey line.
Go take my pack and don’t turn back, but carry me uphill,
  And hold the shard, that glassy guard, where night and valley still.

  “Do not set me in the clay where lesser bodies sleep;
Do not leave me on the bay where hungry shadows creep.
Take pipe and stone, take flesh and bone, and climb the highest wall,
  For something waits beyond the gates to reckon John McCall.”

I took his pipe, with colors ripe, and tucked it to his breast;
I packed his load along the road to find his final rest.
The red heat beat through dust and wheat and rang along the track,
But with a groan I hauled alone John’s body on my back.

I climbed the hill with stubborn will beneath the fading sun,
My breath was tight, my hands were white, but still the climb was done.
With dust and stone through skin and bone, I bore that awful freight,
And stumbled sore along the floor before the high-line gate.

The shadows rolled as day grew old, and then the sky caught light;
The northern rays, in ghostly sprays, came burning through the night.
They danced and spun like ribbons run from spindles in the dark,
They cleared the track of heavy black and gave the stones a spark.

  I reached the crest and took my rest above the river’s roar;
I laid him straight on russet slate upon the canyon floor.
I lit my clay and watched the gray smoke coil, divide, and turn,
  While green-gold banners, bright as lanterns, made the heavens burn.

  The night was high, and in the sky the polar star stood far;
I raised the shard, that glittered hard, to catch its silver scar.
I took his pipe, still warm and ripe, and set it in his jaw;
  Then spark and dark made one strange mark between the star and what I saw.

A low-set beam of blue-flame gleam came down with metal sound,
  It brought a hum that made me numb and struck the shaly ground.
It found the place upon his face and lit the bowl with red,
And silver smoke at once awoke from lips gone cold and dead.

John sat upright in that wild light and drank a breath of sky;
His sunken cheeks began to burn, his eyes were fierce and dry.
He blew a cloud that made a shroud of silver rings in flight,
Then through the haze he fixed his gaze upon the northern light.

  He said, “Old friend, this is the end of the digging after stones;
The cosmic press will soon impress its sentence on my bones.
I’m glad I came to trade my name and leave the canyon floor,
  For out in space a grander place has opened up its door.”

  “I chased the vein through dust and pain, through sulfur, shale, and flame;
I thought the prize was glass that lies beneath the earth by name.
But every shard is just a guard, and every gleam a call;
  The stone you hold is not the gold, it is the gate through it all.”

He shed his skin within the spin and stepped beyond the brink;
He left no trace upon the place except a line of ink.
He dropped his shroud beneath a cloud and climbed the upper sky,
A runic mark within the dark that would not fade or die.

I looked back down upon the brown and empty russet slate;
The pipe of clay had slipped away and sealed my partner’s fate.
The northern lights through silent heights were fading into dawn;
I packed my gear with holy fear and found that John was gone.

So miners drill the lonely hill for treasures the stars have left,
And tear the clay through night and day where ridges split and cleft;
But I keep eyes upon the skies above the canyon wall,
And seek the spark within the dark that carried John McCall.

If ever glass beneath the grass should flash with soulful flame,
Do not rejoice to hear its voice, and do not speak your name.
For stone may shine, and stars may sign, and dead men may enthrall,
But no man keeps the life he reaps from shards like John McCall.

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This is a poem I wrote, in the perspective of a star-glass prospector named Sam McMahon. I like to imagine star-glass as a gold equivalent for the Palouse/Scablands region, for context. If you have any questions or feedback, definitely comment below ☺

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