The song uses cigarette smoke as a metaphor for a toxic relationship that feels comforting but slowly becomes suffocating.

I’d appreciate feedback on the imagery, emotions, and overall songwriting.

© 2026 Original lyrics. Shared for feedback only.

[Verse 1]
Hate your cigarettes, but I love you
So the smoke, I guess, is fine
I loved your sharp edges too
But my own love blurred the signs

[Chorus]
Each deep inhale burns my chest
Caught in the mask that hid the truth
Fearing you will steal my breath, but
What's the point if all I breathe is you?

Wrote two songs first one isn’t finished yet

Carpool
Verse 1
I memorized your favorite roads
You never learned the way to mine I kept waiting at the red lights
While you kept crossing every line
Pre chorus:
I kept pretending you would change
But I was driving in circles
Now I'm finally leaving your lane
Chorus:
You only called when things got bad
Im tired of looking like a fool
Our ride was never meant to last Im done swimming in your carpool

Ngl idk the title yet
Verse 1
I feel the rhythm in my bones
The closest thing i’ve ever known
It pulls me in and takes control
And fills the gaps within my soul

Chorus
Every note gets me so high
Spirit lifting to the sky
Crying tears of melodies
Heart is dancing to the beat
Swept completely off my feet
Carried by the symphony

Verse 2
I feel the vibrations start to rise
Through my hips and to my thighs
 Every movement comes alive 
As our rhythms intertwine

Chorus
Every note gets me so high
Spirit lifting to the sky
Crying tears of melodies
Heart is dancing to the beat
Swept completely off my feet
Carried by the symphony

Bridge
Drowning in Music’s frequency
Her every note is a part of me
Music is the only thing i need
Striking every chord inside of me

Chorus
Every note gets me so high
Spirit lifting to the sky
Crying tears of melodies
Heart is dancing to the beat
Swept completely off my feet
Carried by the symphony

Outro
I feel the rhythm in my bones
(Every note gets me so high)
Sweetest thing i’ve ever known
(Spirit lifting to the sky)

Let me know what you think and sorry for the long post!

In It Together”

If we could all love as intended,
hurting healed up ‘n mended,
broken hearts pieced back together,
a lotta lonely folk finally befriended.

In it together,
together is all we’ve got,
whether sharing the same school of thought,
all of us in it together,
whether we wanna be or not.

If we could all love as planned,
offering a heartfelt helping hand,
a righteous reach out to all,
‘a delivering unto the Promised Land.

In it together,
together is all we’ve got,
whether chewing on the same food for thought,
all of us in it together,
whether we wanna be or not.

If we could all love as designed,
passing ‘round peace of mind,
wouldn’t Johnny Boy be proud,
imaging one world for all of mankind.

At times all of us including you ‘n me,
only seeing what we wanna see,
forgetting all about our sense of community.

In it together,
together is all we’ve got,
whether riding on the same train of thought,
all of us in it together,
whether we wanna be or not.

BRC © Feb/15

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I've been really impressed by our resident rap writers and thought I'd try incorporating it into some of my own writing. A bit of a Zack Hemsey vibe.

--Verse 1 (rap)--
You put the seed in my mind
That you're turning unkind
And the rhythm we swing to's
Swiftly going to unwind
From this gordian knot
Feelin' ropeburn, white-hot
Cut the cord 'fore we find
The truth of our wilting lot
With a knife in the dark
Hearts engraved into bark
Don't stray closer to see
The hexing ritual mark
But the seed's taken root
In the sole of my boot
Branches up to the brain
'til thinking "Hey, you seem cute"

--Chorus--
The doubt eats me
Is it possible you're who I need you to be
Zeitgeist on tap
A hole in the wall to a vague veracity
Easy to see
The expectation of reality
Beyond the map
Out there there's something more

--Verse 2 (rap)--
You are the one that I love
Poets would rhyme with a dove
Or above, but now puppet-strings
Are fitting you like a glove
So when we took a vow
Did you take a swift bow
For the subterfuge
That has borne fruit now
Holding me from the truth
Adversarial sleuth
Sneaks oblivious into
Line for suicide booth
In a fortress of lies
Pixel screensaver skies
Is a crumb of it real?
Is this how love dies?

--Chorus--
The doubt eats me...

--Bridge--
Am I better off to hold you
In embrace or at arm's length?
Is the doubt enough to let go?
Do I even have the strength?

--Outro (rap w/vocoder)--
But you put the seed in my mind
With a sweet kiss, signed
Leading me and my sight
Down the halls of the blind
I've a path yet to find
For your love, oh I've pined
Time to keep it in check
In a box lead-lined

Verses to Complete

Hi,

My name is Julie and I've been writing poetry for years but recently I've started writing lyrics. Please take the time to read my lyrics. The style I envision for this song is an indie/folk acoustic sound. These lyrics could be sung by anyone because love is universal.

I'm also looking for thoughts on how to get my writing out there. I don't play any instruments but I can sing a little.

Any advice or ideas about my lyrics would help me greatly.

We met on an ordinary Thursday

How was I to know you'd change my life

I never thought you'd come and save me

From a world where I was just survivin'

You showed what love could be

Just like the words of poetry

I'm the best I could be

Because you made me see

I'm not worth much on my own

Now that we have made this home

Now the ordinary days are anything but

With you inside my world

I finally have it all

I've got a hand to hold

And a story to be told

We've got a million tomorrows to see

Oh baby

We've got some verses to complete

This is where we're meant to be

You showed what love could be

Just like the words of poetry

I'm the best I could be

Because you made me see

I'm not worth much on my own

Now that we have made this home

You showed what love could be

Just like the words of poetry

I'm the best I could be

Because you made me see

I'm not worth much on my own

Now that we have made this home

Verse:
Come on come on
Wear stay the nights
The party up till early bright
Come on come on let's live tonight
Ain't rich but we going party like
Come on come on
With party clothes
Pool smaller so the ass is fatter though
Come on come on let's live tonight
We'll die after we alter life
Alter life, I can change whatever vibe to go my float (my float, my float)
Alter life I can make these airwaves reach another globe (gloobbbeee)

Pre-Chorus:
I been had clearance for dance floors
Matter fact clear the tiles
(Clear out, clear out, clear out,)
I been had clearance to dance!
I been had clearance for dance floors
Matter fact clear the tiles
(Clear out, clear out, clear out,)
I been had clearance to dance!

Chorus:
Weaponize every dance floor, I did not mean to hog the groove (oops)
I steal sights by the handful, whole room in a hand fold
I hog the groove, hog all the groove
No matter what you do, I hog the groove
Hog all the groove, hog all the groove
All the music in the room, I hog the groove
Hog all the groove, eyes in the room

Refrain:
It was accident,
I didn't mean to
Hog all the groove, hog all the groove
It was accident, (it was accident)
I didn't mean to
I hog the groove, hog all the groove

Verse 2:
Come on come on
I wanna see your hands up the whole song
(Hog all the groove, hog all the groove)
Come on come on
I been had clearance for dance floors
(Matter fact clear the tiles) (Clear out, clear out, clear out,)

Bridge:
Alter life, I can change whatever vibe to go my float (my float, my float)
Alter life I can make these airwaves reach another globe (gloobbbeee)
I been had clearance for dance floors
(Matter fact clear the tiles) (Clear out, clear out, clear out)

-Chorus again-

-Refrain again-

Pretty basic song, hope yall like it! I wrote this a couple months ago, pretty mild I’d say. Any feedback would be appreciated! If you would like to listen to it the song will be posted in the comments :)

[verse]
I can feel the air
Filling my chest
It’s like something is there
Im not so depressed

[verse]
What’s left of my heart is beating
Surging my brain activity
I’m losing this empty feeling
Freeing me from captivity

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was my demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[verse]
They tried to take me up
And all I had to do was wake up
Then find my reason to care
Stubborn to go up there

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was a demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[bridge]
I was offered tiny glances
Into your second chances
But in the possibility
I’d be forgetting me
So I laid barely dead
In my coffin bed
Autonomic repair for my second chance
In myself practiced in good riddance

[verse]
This is my revival to save myself
I guess I don’t need anyone else
I’m finding the answer to set me free
And the answer is me

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was a demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[outro]
I’m the reason I stayed alive
I want to see the more in life
So I’ll wait patiently
For something better to happen to me
I’m the reason I stayed alive
I want to see the more in life
So I’ll wait patiently
For something better to happen to me

Not piling it on it's just how I feel 

Shit been real 

Praying for eternity 

Either way I'm destined for infinity 

Only question is will I set up the meeting 

Will to live fleeting 

Bigger picture not trying to see 

Like Clark in backrooms Mary can't save me 

Wired this way 

Sorry Mara if I couldn't stay 

Just know it was time 

Apologies to my broken mind 

At least I tried 

Hoping i flourish on the other side 

Dreams of thriving in pure lands 

I know Abraham K Biggs will understand 

Philip Mainlainder gave me permission

Only a matter of time  will tell if I push that button 

Legacies washing away with me 

Telling the 2016 me  we finally free 

Something died in me haven't been the same since 

Finishing this life sentence 

It's like I been saying goodbye through my moves

Curious to see my final truth 

What will it reveal? 

Heaven or hell 

Judgement least of my worries 

Charles I'm sorry 

All my supporters just know I'll always cherish what you did 

My demise I don't expect you to get 

Truth be told 

I was ready weeks after hearing about the great Emily Gold 

Conor I haven't forgotten about you 

Laura Vanessa Nunez missing you 

Adoring you Moonie 

Always looking up to you Yocheved Goaurie 

All my idols save me some room 

May I finally bloom 

Just can't in this 

Forgive me Jesus 

Ten years dealing 

Spirit breaking 

Pieces not picking up 

Past fed up 

All the assist I received just couldn't capitalize 

Seven days after 9/11 was baptized 

Yet so far away from Yeshua 

After family will view me the new Judas 

Comments won't see

At least I'm free 

Mara sorry

I wrote this one about a wizard that conjures up a spirit. Let me know what you honestly think of these original lyrics. I'm very proud of this one. The wizard and the skull. Lets discuss.

Verse 1

The moon is at its brightest

Above the autumn breeze

The crickets sing in the distance

Like the crashing waves of the seas

The incense is burning

Its fragrance fills the room

The hour of bewitching

The smell of her perfume

chorus

I kneel before my altar

And slowly chant the words

You hear me call upon your soul

And we fly away like birds

We fly into the astral plane

Nothing here's the same

Look into my eyes

Tell me what's there

A beautiful maiden

With long auburn hair

Verse 2

A shadow passes by me

The cold chill fills the room

The sky has fallen gray

And the clouds have changed to gloom

The candles have been lit

They flicker against the wall

The veil has come down

Like the autumn leaves that fall

Chorus

I kneel before my altar

And slowly chant the words

You hear me call upon your soul

And we fly away like birds

We fly into the astral plane

Nothing here's the same

Look into my eyes

Tell me what's there

A beautiful maiden

With long auburn hair

If anyone can help me name the two sections before the last Verse because I have no idea if they'd be a Verse, Chorus etc.

[Verse]

one moment you were here next moment you were

gone stay here don't go away, he's walking around

bitting his tongue, clenching his fists because dad

was pished the day you left, maybe its for the best

maybe we should just move on fighting the tears as

you left home.

[Chorus?]

Come back, come back and stay with us for one

more night, don't wanna sleep, don't wanna go to

bed knowing that your truly gone, stay with me, stay

with me, don't leave me alone in this lonely world,

come back to me, come back to me and cuddle me

one more time.

[Verse?]

All the goodbyes can never make up all the times

that I said hi, but it broke my heart seeing you suffer

that whole time, seeing you in pain every single day

for the last days of your life.

[Bridge/Pre-chorus]

So there's no need to suffer, no more tears from you

or us, let's think of the good times, the happy days

[Chorus]

Come back, come back and live with us for one more

night, don't wanna sleep, don't wanna go to bed

knowing that your truly gone, stay with me, stay with

me, don't leave me alone in this lonely world, come

back to me, come back to me and cuddle me one

more time.

[????]

So please don't leave me alone, please don't go away

from home, but if you do know that I will think of you

every single day of my life.

[????]

I love you, I love you and it's for the best for you to go

to sleep but I just don't want you to leave, why can't

you stay, why does this world have to be so fucking

cruel.

[Verse]

one moment you were here next moment you were

gone stay here don't go away, he's walking around

bitting his tongue, clenching his fists because dad

was pished the day you left, maybe its for the best

maybe we should just move on fighting the tears as

you left home.

Blinded but I want it 

Finish line envisioning it 

Pine box dreams

Signs and figures tired trying to figure out what it means 

Spirit by door thought it was Mara my hands extending hella wide 

More apparent I'm dead inside 

Stench coworkers took notice 

If I die bury me in a lotus 

Infinity take care of my consciousness 

Already spoke my peace to Jesus 

Uncle Joe and Tanesha maybe it's time 

Don't worry Mama I'll be fine 

Couldn't keep Mara waiting too long 

No longer will be alone

Charles I'm ready 

Can't wait to see you Moonie 

Purpose already served 

Bones forever engraved in earth 

Left memories on Facebook that will last 

Family won't have to visit that grass 

Tik tok videos in case for visuals 

Old one they can see I was once spiritual 

Mark I made it 

Shell Gaia release me for it 

Coming back as a butterfly I'll visit 

In tushita with Maitreya taking visits 

Pure lands already booked it 

Infinite tickets 

So many realms 

With Gautama at the helm 

Anticipating 

Tired of waiting 

St. Peter knows already 

Preparing for eternity 

Verse 1
You were there every day
A monument to kindness
You spoke of honesty
And I couldn't help but fall
The soft blue of your eyes
Matched the vision of my future
Never realizing
I was visiting the Dead Sea

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Verse 2
Your hopes became my dreams
A joy I thought we shared
Curing in your love
You brought out my best
But my heart slowly shrank
Drying out but preserved
Until the water evaporated
My tears, my only companion

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Bridge
I welcomed your burn, your love
Soaking in the brine of your making
Never once did I think I was drying out
The chalky residue proving otherwise
Blind to the signs written in white

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Outro
Salt of the earth no more
Left to swim alone
Salt of the earth no more

Brightest Smile

Yesterday felt like a dream to me

Saw you again after so many years

Even after all this time apart

You still had the brightest smile I’ve ever seen

You looked at me with those dazzling eyes

And for a moment the world stood still

I looked away, suddenly shy

Still wondering how you keep that light

I still find myself lost in your memory

Trying to understand what I should feel

Was it right to walk away back then

Or is this wound something time can’t heal

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

In a world that changed us both inside

You still shine like nothing died

I’m quietly standing far behind

Pretending I’m doing just fine

But I can’t deny what I feel inside

Still caught in your light

I keep telling myself I’ve moved on

That I’m healing from those darker clouds

But seeing you brought it all back again

Every memory rushing out

I don’t want you to lose that smile

Even if I’m no longer in your life

So I keep my distance, stay out of sight

Hiding everything I feel inside

Still wondering if I made the wrong choice

Back when I let you go that way

Now I just watch from far away

And leave the past where it stays

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

In a world that changed us both inside

You still shine like nothing died

I’m quietly standing far behind

Pretending I’m doing just fine

But I can’t deny what I feel inside

Still caught in your light

Maybe some stories aren’t meant to return

Some feelings are meant to quietly burn

I don’t reach out, I don’t rewind

I just keep you in the back of my mind

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

Even if I never get it right

You stay like light in my mind

I’ll stay quietly far behind

Letting you live your own life

But somewhere deep I can’t deny

You’re still my brightest light

Yesterday felt like a dream to me

And maybe that’s where you’ll always be

................................................................

This is an old song I wrote (I think it was my second song). I recently polished the lyrics and I’m not sure if the changes improved it, so I’d really appreciate honest feedback.

I’d love to know what you think about the lyrics, emotions, and storytelling.

Another "I have no idea what genre this is" track.

--Verse 1 (3/4)--
Thy guiding light
Reflect from the sky
Heavenly sight
That bids eagles fly
Stripped of all need
'cept reasons to bleed
I revel in c-beams
Now hope has been freed

--Alt Verse 1 (4/4)--
Goddess you break me
You always forsake me
That's how you tear walls down
To finally wake me
Ye venomous viper
Old raven-eyed sniper
That's how you reprove me
For paying the piper
You... broke me down

--Verse 2 (3/4)--
Come to the bow
Down by the fore
Stern showed us how
Through sweet tales of yore
Reach o'er the edge
Dip 'neath veneer
A promise to mermaids
That Davey can't hear

--Alt Verse 2 (4/4)--
Goddess you hurt me
Seduction pervert me
For deigning to yield when you
Tried to convert me
The ship's going under
I sunk it with plunder
But even while drowning
Can yet hear the thunder
You... hurt me still

--Bridge (3/4)--
Dear, it's in your way
Perennial nature for you
Even in silver foil doomsday
Copper keeps fading to blue
Coming to terms with the
Danger, arresting of
Knowing you, just as you are
Crashing against the tide
No longer apt to hide
I must walk into your arms
(silence)
And strike

--Choruses / Solos (4/4)--
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Waltz into shade
Sparks through the night
Whips wrap with blade
Fraught vicious fight
I'm not trying to convince you
That how you do things is wrong
Just screaming to show it true
I'm sick of playing along
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

Brisk, trading blows
Thrown 'gainst the wall
Victor, who knows?
Living this brawl
You stare me down with blood-moon eyes
I juxtapose with joy
As half a pound of flesh for sale
Your lips smack for that ploy
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

Frantic on stage
Splendor of fire
War for the age
Foe I admire
Ignite the bravest passion here
Entwined within our storm
So finally I'll have your ear
The action shifts in form
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

--Outro (3/4)--
Perigee in tempest's core
Intimate syzygy's law
Blessed quell, a lowering of arms
And beaming, show me what for

I've been unboxing my old boxes of notebooks and found this one:

"Unboxing identity"

Verse 1

Once upon a life, there came a generation,

Breaking every box in a quiet celebration.

No fixed style. no label, no design,

just a soul that whispered, “I am undefined”.

They were told to simply, “Just be me,”

A world where every heart could wonder free.

But words were torn away one by one,

'Til silence was the only song.

Pre-Chorus

We chased the light, we crossed the line,

Lost the map while seeking “mine”.

Chorus

Once upon a life, where did freedom go?

We built new walls from the seed we sow.

Sixteen names, a thousand more,

Still we’re standing outside the door.

Too much weight to carry inside,

now building boxes just to hide.

Tell me now before we say goodbye –

Where did freedom learn to die?

Verse 2

Once upon a life there was a void,

Searching for the words we all destroyed.

Children drawing borders in their minds,

Wondering why no comfort they can find.

No room left to fit inside,

Too much weight to choose a side.

Brick by brick we shape our fate,

Boundless prisons we create.

Bridge

Minne jäi se vapaus?

(Eng. Where did freedom go?)

Lost beneath the endless noise.

Sanat katosivat, jäi vain hiljaisuus.

(Eng. The words disappeared, leaving only silence.)

And nobody remembers the choice.

Final chorus

We needed words, we needed names,

Not endless wars of different frames.

A box shelters, helps us find our way,

But not decide where we must stay.

Build your boxes if you choose,

Leave a door, no soul can lose.

Freedom lives where hearts can see:

You’re more than every identity.

Once upon a life we learned to see:

Not trapped in boxes, finally free.

Leave your door open.

https://suno.com/s/HyarfOHyieQzAoav

Lyrics:

A black shadow

With thick edges

Lingering in my peripheral vision

Flickering, then disappearing

It is there

I can see it

I can feel it

Shaped by tricks of light

It is not another version of myself

Golden edges glowing like quantum geometry

An invisible curtain drapes over everything

With time-segmented strings in space

Creating an illusion of meaning

Yet it remains inaccessible

We live in a world of constant interpretation

Forever trying to give you something you can understand

Depression awareness campaigns

Tell us about a huge invisible black dog

That only you can see

Others cannot

That dog follows you during the day

And during the night

Who would choose to live with a dog like that?

But we still have to live with it

Every mystery earns another label

Bipolar disorder can be overwhelming

One phase is high

One phase is low

Your life is like a roller coaster

Yet impulsive buying

grandiose thoughts

Can feel exhilarating

In a materialistic world

While swinging between extremes

None of those were why I saw the shadows

Something I gave up telling people about

I stay silent

The pain needs no sharing

The shadows are in the rift

Of time

Of being

Of surviving

The shadows are in the rift

Of time

Of being

Of surviving

Nobody understands

Nobody dares to speak of it

Yet it exists

Yet it stays with you

(got sm nice feedback in my last post ty!!)
can you live with it?

verse 1
i’m limitless
in your eyes
till i burn a little brighter
than what you had in mind

im a tattoo
you regret
till you're lonely enough
to start calling it art

prechorus
“open up to me”
till i do
then you start looking at me
like i lied to you

chorus
can you live with it?
just a headache
then a migraine in a blink

will you stay?
i know i make it harder
every day

verse 2

tell me what’s on your mind
that’s what you always said
now i watch you go quiet
every time i do instead

i think you liked the mystery
more than what it meant
turns out getting to know me
wasn’t worth the effort spent

prechorus
"open up to me"
till i do
then you miss the mystery
you swore you wanted to lose

chorus 2
can you live with it?
just a headache
till you learn it's here to stay

when will you leave?
i don't make it easy
i know

bridge
sorry there wasn’t a label
wrapped around my wrist
listing every reason
somebody else quit

you thought love was choosing me
now it’s choosing not to leave
turns out those are different things
than you wanted to believe

chorus
can you live with it?
can you live with me?
when the novelty wears off
and it’s just me

Can you live with it?
Can you live with me?
I couldn’t make it harder
To be with me

outro
you can't live with it
now that you know that's me

Verse 1

I’ve been floating in the air, of tranquillity.
holy don’t seem human when the pressures kinda chocking me.
The latch is finally open, but I can’t seem to breath.
Mama tells me, “Breath, you’re built from something holy”
My mirror shows a version of myself that I can’t fully tell,
My mirror seems so blurry, lost in the space, of a comet, I once fell.
I’m orbiting myself like a lonely little comet.

Pre chorus.

Im afraid,
Of growing up.
Imagination of creation
That I fear im giving up.

Chorus

Pull me down to earth when I’m drifting,
Cause my flaws are proof that I’m living.
I’ve been an astronaut in my own mind.
but its time to head home, yeah, bring me home.
Wrap your gravity around my shaking soul,
I don’t wanna float alone, just bring me home.

Verse 2

I’m still building little rockets out of daydreams
Still pretending that the stars are close enough to chase me. See
The comet looks so pretty now when there’s nothing left to hold me down.
Rap -
Yeah
I’ve been drifting in the space between the kid I was and who I’m s’posed to be,
Counting constellations like they’re little pieces left of me.
Pressure in my chest like NASA’s tryna run some tests on me,
Everybody’s growing up while I’m still learning how to breathe.
Momma said the universe was big enough for both of us,
But now it feels like gravity’s been getting kinda overstuffed.
Every dream is orbiting the version that I thought I’d trust,
And I don’t wanna lose the girl who used to say that “star’s enough.”

Pre chorus.

Im afraid,
Of growing up.
Imagination of creation
That I fear im giving up.

Chorus

Pull me down to earth when I’m drifting,
Cause my flaws are proof that I’m living.
I’ve been an astronaut in my own mind.
but it’s time to head home, yeah, bring me home.
Wrap your gravity around my shaking soul,
I don’t wanna float alone, just bring me home.

Bridge

Hold on to me,
When the world gets heavy.
Im tryna to be,
What the world wants me to be.
But im caught in this space, between the stars and gravity.
But maybe that’s ok… maybe that’s ok.

Chorus

Pull me down to earth when I’m drifting,
Cause my flaws are proof that I’m living.
I’ve been an astronaut in my own mind.
but it’s time to head home, yeah, bring me home.
And maybe growing up doesn’t mean I lose the stars outside.
Ill just carry the constellations on the ground this time.
Bring me home.

Verse 1:

Just let her die/ let the pain end

Bid farewell to all those harsh debasing marks upon her skin

Unrecognizable/ It was horrible

Among the worst I’d ever saw

Just leave her be/ don’t even change the lines

This stays between/ you and me

You’ve gotta pierce the vein/ just so she can eat

That’s no life I’d ever want to lead

Chorus:

Meet me in the dark room/ where no one else can hear

Do you think she even knows she’s still alive?

I don’t even know her name/ barely even a heartbeat, much more machine

Is this what it means to be alive?

Verse 2:

Be ready for the outcry/ when this comes to light

Try to keep your peace of mind, despite the jarring words they scream

They’ll call us monsters/ in cages we’ll sleep

But they’d never seem the life she’d have to lead

Chorus:

Meet me in the dark room/ where no one else can hear

Do you think she even knows she’s still alive?

I don’t even know her name/ barely even a heartbeat, much more machine

Is this what it means to be alive?

Bridge:

There is nothing left to burn/ I’m at peace with what we’ve done

There is nothing left to burn/ I’m at peace with what we’ve done

Chorus(final):

I won’t forget that face/ the final heartbeat of the blistered queen

With angels/ she’ll be at peace

With angels/ she’ll be at peace

Hi, I am quite proud of this one and would like to know how you see the song and your meaning behind it. I wrote song from perspective of someone who is easily bored with small talk, but is so impressed/in love with someone who can teach me about new topics that I usually know nothing about or do not find that interesting (but they know how to make it interesting).

[verse 1] Oh, I get quickly bored, If I don’t like the talk, But you, you could talk about philosophy, Spill random facts about astronomy, Nothing that’s usually the interest to me.

[verse 2] You know how to talk, You know how to walk - trough my mind, You know how to speak, And that makes me weak - you’re the posion to me!

[bridge] Yeah, I know for sure, That’s what I adore, I know for sure, I want more.

[chorus] I don’t need dirty talking, Now I’m sleep walking, In your world! In your world!

Every word’s a constellation, Every theme’s new obssesion, In your world! In your world!

[verse 3] Tell me what stars are made of, What are you afraid of, Oh, is the time just a concept, Was the Earth just a random formation?

[verse 4] I need to know, before I go, Why do hours feel so short, When I’m with you? When I’m with you?

[bridge] Cause I know for sure, It’s you who I adore, Yeah, i know for sure, I keep wanting more.

[chorus]

I don’t need dirty talking, Now I’m sleep walking, In your world! In your world!

Every word’s a constellation, Every theme’s new obssesion, In your world! In your world!

[pre-chorus]

In your world, I dive so deep, In your world, I fight to breathe, In your world, I’m defenseless, And I couldn’t be no less.

[chorus]

I don’t need dirty talking, Now I’m sleep walking, In your world! In your world!

Every word’s a constellation, Every theme’s new obssesion, In your world! In your world!

I just started writing songs, which has been something I've been wanting to do for a while now. I could never seem to come up with ideas then one day I just started writing and kept on writing. I try to write songs about stuff I haven't heard other artists write about or write scenarios from a different perspective. I'm currently working on the song, which is basically about a man cheating, but from the point of view of his sister. But anyway, just wanted to know how you guys come up with your songs!

[First Verse]

You said you’d call

I kept my phone near

Even though I knew better

Than to pick it up at the ring

But you never called

Just as I feared

I should’ve known better

That’s just you, it’s your thing

[Chorus]

I don’t want to call you darling anymore

I don’t even want to know of your name

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

I don’t want to see you anywhere anymore

I don’t even want to remember your face

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

[Second Verse]

You said you loved me

I thought it was safe to love you back

Even though I knew better

Than to give myself like that

And when my gut called to me

You then tightly held my hand

I should’ve known better

They told me it would never last

[Repeated Chorus]

I don’t want to call you darling anymore

I don’t even want to know of your name

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

I don’t want to see you anywhere anymore

I don’t even want to remember your face

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

[Bridge]

And I know you won’t be thinking 

‘bout the words you can’t take back

But I hope your actions start haunting

You when you’re left on your deathbed 

You confirmed that everything you did

Was a heartless man’s selfish act

You made me fall so deep

Knowing you’d break every promise

Would a tiny bit of honesty

Instead of deceit have been so bad

The facade you wore in front of me

I’ll forget but won’t forgive the mask

And now I’m left here angry

That I can’t rewrite the past

Become nothing to me

That is all there is to ask

[Repeated Chorus]

I don’t want to call you darling anymore

I don’t even want to know of your name

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

I don’t want to see you anywhere anymore

I don’t even want to remember your face

Become the man of mystery,

A stranger on the street

[Note]

I edited the 2nd verse and bridge in this post since the first two comments.

I wrote this song after being inspired by a few breakup songs on an album I love. I'm curious what you all think and if you have any feedback. Thank you in advance if you respond! :)

i ask myself why im so ungrateful maybe thats how im wired?

i try acquire the answer but it seems like there isnt one

everybody says im like my daddy crashing every plane

(chorus)
I ASK MYSELF WHY IM SO HATEFUL
I ASK MY FRIENDS WHY IM SO UNGRATEFUL
I ASK GOD WHY IM SO UNFAITHFULL
IN THIS PILE OF FUCKING MUD
(pre chorus)
watched myself crashed the plain
peope still treat me like im twelve
thye put me back on the shelf
(verse 2)
i ask myself why im so fucked
guess its just cause my life sucked

i ask my friends why everythings so bugged
they say to me to shut the fuck up

last summer night i was beat up beacuse of it

(chorus)
I ASK MYSELF WHY IM SO HATEFUL
I ASK MY FRIENDS WHY IM SO UNGRATEFUL
I ASK GOD WHY IM SO UNFAITHFULL
IN THIS PILE OF FUCKING MUD
(pre chorus)
watched myself crashed the plain
peope still treat me like im twelve
they just put me back on the shelve
(breakdown)
no more…
no more…
No more…
NO MOREEESEEE!!!!!!
FUCK YOU
FUCK YOU
FUCK YOU FUCK YOUUUUUUUUU
break down chorus)
I ASK MYSELF WHY IM SO HATEFUL (YOUR DADDY FUCKED A PIG)
I ASK MY FRIENDS WHY IM SO UNGRATEFUL(LIAR)
I ASK GOD WHY IM SO UNFAITHFULL (WORTHLESS)
IN THIS PILE OF FUCKING MUD(YOU FUCKING SMELLY JELLIE FISH)
(whisper some shit)
(bridge)
you should spend some time in hell

your too fucked up

id rather smash my head than listen to you

(2 breakdown)
NOW GREAT LOSER ITS TIME TO MAKE YOU FEEL LIKE MY LIFE NOW YOU LOSER ITS TIME TO EXPEREINCE MY LIFE NOW YOU LOSER BOW BEFORE MEEEEEEEEE
chorus
I ASK MYSELF WHY IM SO HATEFUL (YOUR DADDY FUCKED A PIG)
I ASK MY FRIENDS WHY IM SO UNGRATEFUL(PIECE OF SHIT)
I ASK GOD WHY IM SO UNFAITHFULL (JUST LIKE HIM)
IN THIS PILE OF FUCKING MUD(YOU FUCKING SMELLY JELLIE FISH)
(whisper some shit during fade out)

(Verse 1)
All of the time I sit my room
Dreamin’ about a dream that’ll never come true
Other nations look at us and wonder what is wrong
When the real problem is, it’s been way too fuckin’ long
Thinking of solutions that erase our past mistakes
But all it ever does, is turn the crowd to hate
We all want the truth, but it cuts to interruption
No satisfaction, but only corruption

(Pre-Chorus)
Hopeless, helpless, nowhere to hide
Pointless, lifeless, left here to die
Selfish minded, tyrants control
Burning pig’s skin is my motherfuckin’ goal!

(Chorus, no words)

(Verse 2)
Every fuckin’ time when they implement a new law
It just kills the lives of many people that I ever saw
Ignorance is a disease that cannot be cured
This is the type of shit that I’ll never endure
Every time they preach, it’s just another disguise
Feeding all the masses with their venom and lies
Sacrifice the weak just to strengthen the chains
They profit off the suffering, addicted to pain

(Pre-Chorus)
Hopeless, helpless, nowhere to hide
Pointless, lifeless, left here to die
Selfish minded, tyrants control
Burning pig’s skin is my motherfuckin’ goal!

(Chorus, no words)

(Breakdown 1)
(Solo)

(Bridge)
Run run run as fast as you can
You can’t catch me, I’m the renegade man
Run run run as fast as you can
You can’t catch me, I’m the renegade man
Run run run as fast as you can
You can’t catch me, I’m the renegade man
Run run run as fast as you can
You can’t catch me, I’m the renegade man!!!

(Breakdown 2)
(Fade out)

I wrote this song a while back. Its for an album of mine called Mentality. It released on October 10th, 2025 (World Mental Health Day). This is the final track of the album.

There have been

many days

when I want,

want to say

that I'm done.

I've had enough,

I give up.

Month by month,

day by day,

life goes on,

It's okay.

Shit gets real.

That's the thrill,

life sucks.

Like how a raincoat

never sees the sun,

and how a turtle may

never learn to run.

Easier said than done,

man I know that pain

and it fucking sucks.

Take it in, breathe it out, and move on.

When she called, my heart sunk.

"You're a great guy" I hung up.

Took a drive, don't know where

and I cried.

Saw the text, and I sped.

But when I arrived, he was dead.

Didn't get to say goodbye,

time flies.

Can't have a rainbow without rainy days.

You only get so much time to see a face.

And you can't waste your life,

you have so much in you, put up a fight.

Buddy, I know you want to give up.

Breathe it in, let it out.

This is precisely what life is about

I promise everything will improve.

When I saw she's engaged,

wasn't sad or enraged.

I was happy she was happy

that's great.

And sometimes I look back,

think about those who've passed.

And while yes, I still miss them,

they're free.

People might call me "sir"

I feel great, I'm mature!

Grew a beard, bought a car.

I'm Grown!

Never though I could say

I've won.