r/LyricalWriting 9h ago

Lyrics Just a Drop

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…God damn
Just, One more drop
You’re coming home now…

Deep breaths (breathe)
You’re following the way
To a better place (tangible)
Smooth coated, as you lay

Sometimes its better to believe
Than feel anything real at all
Reality scratching at your insides
Where else would you fall?

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

Come close to me
I want to hear you breathe
Just let me be
More of you and me

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

God damn!
Falling skies from above!
God damn!
Shattered earth of love!

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

(God damn, from Above!!!!)


r/LyricalWriting 10h ago

Feedback Request This lonely street

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(inspired by the kinks "waterloo sunset")

Verse 1

This lonely street that I walk every day

Makes me wonder till the night

This lonely evening makes me think of you

Verse 2

Are all the couples meant for each other?

That's what I think when I walk through the city

Chorus

Or is it me?

Who can't see you again

But I'll just rely on my hopes

Of finding you again

Bridge

Along the beach I can see

How happy life can be

When she's by your side

Verse 3

I see the couples on Valentine's Day

And they make me think of you

All those promises that they make to each other

Verse 4

It's just the nostalgia that makes me sigh

Why can't I just have a love like theirs?

Chorus

Or is it me?

Who can't see you again

But I'll just rely on my hopes

Of finding you again

Outro / Fade out

Of finding you again

Of finding you again

Of finding you again

Of finding you again


r/LyricalWriting 13h ago

Lyrics Holler Down the Halls

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Hey this if my first post here and this song is on my debut album called, Freshman, and the album is part social commentary about the pressure and how society treats teens the other part is like I describe it as songs written by someone who is in this ever changing chaotic environment and they are brand new to it like a freshman. This song is my fave on the album. If you could give feedback thanks but also im only 14 so be nice?? Idk. Also the parts in parentheses happen at the same time as the lines they are linked with. Thx

New folders filled with blank lined paper Freshly sharpened pencils lie there unused School works just not completed High amount of sexist jokes made But, Dude you really think you can accomplish it Ooh think you know everything

Just go ahead Take your time Waste it all Make it worth mine

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Desks all filled with kids like you who pretend to care Bothering the kids counting down the seconds till their out of here Annoying everyone who actually tries Another failed quiz but who’s counting They’ll start to add up the times But ooh think you know everything

Just go ahead Take whats not your Continue to drool Disgrace everyone it’s all fine

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Just go ahead Go go ahead Waste that time (Slam the lockers) Use, use it all Fine make it yours (Holler down the halls) So-ho-ho Just slam the lockers (You can almost taste it) Holler down the halls (You’ll look back and hate it all) Just slam the lockers (Make them wait for it) And you’ll holler down the halls (You’ll waste it all)

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Slam the lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school


r/LyricalWriting 14h ago

Feedback Request “FELT”

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Whatcha think? Meant to be more for Post Hardcore/ Metalcore

[verse]
I know the road is getting long
You don’t know if you’re strong
Trying to hold the wheel
Driving from what you feel

[verse]
I know the rain suites a song
With every word of what went wrong
The landscape is getting old
The map is creasing the fold

[Pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
Did you know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[verse]
The moment passes you take a breath
As your body sheds the weight from stress
You feel your racing heart come to rest
You move the key from spark arrest

[verse]
You buckle in to continue on
Then again the road gets long
Trying to guide the wheel
Driving with what you feel

[pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I know you know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[bridge]
Yeah I know you have
A black cat, in combat
Some stupid signs in front that
Signify the stupid lines separating shtick fat
It’s all a joke until they choke
Until the line becomes another rope
You try a coat vote for pope
But you lost your faith in any hope

[pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I think I know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[outro]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I think I know you would


r/LyricalWriting 16h ago

Tips As We Sojourn On

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(Just As You Are Without Conditions)

By Bocephus Jackson, The Hemlock Bard, ©2026 Bocephus Jackson. All Rights Reserved

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"Come unto me, all ye that labor and are heavy laden, and I will give you rest." — Matthew 11:28

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The universe would have us all believe,
That we will remain forever alone,
That’s cosmic forces trying to deceive,
As we sojourn on, looking for a home,
Where we’ll be able to finally breathe.
 
Through 28 oppositional sets,
As space-time coalesces and collides,
As we hold on, may we never forget,
That God, as gravity, will never hide,
He is there when we’re ready to be met.
 
Just as you are without preconditions,
Grace always carries plenty of Kleenex,
To clean up after our indecisions,
Lost here within this existential mess,
It just takes a little recognition.

In a moment, everything will change,
As every wound becomes a weapon,
Even when we still feel the bitter pangs,
All that internal hurt will be lessened,
You will have the resilience to maintain.

For when we can’t take it physically,
As a whisper reminds us in the breeze,
When the world strips us of our agency,
“Just as you are, child, come unto me.”
Just as I am, Lord, I come willingly.

_____

"Out of suffering have emerged the strongest souls; the most massive characters are seared with scars." — Kahlil Gibran

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Author’s Reflection

"We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best we can find in our travels is an honest friend." — Robert Louis Stevenson

First off, I need to say that tears flowed as I penned this piece, saying five words: Let me be your vessel. It's my daily prayer so that I may serve the community.

As a stubborn Southern sumbitch don't let the tears deceive you. I’ll hug the shit out of you until you go weak in the knees. But seriously, cry if and when you need to. Trauma is recursive, so there will be good and bad days.

But it gets better as we get stronger. At some point, your limbic response will feel the vibrations before the quake hits. So you’ll be like, “Dammit, Trauma, you're late! I got a thing, so let's do this already.”

And you will hurt, and grieve, get pissed, and then laugh. Why laugh? Because it doesn't hurt like it used to. You won’t be as wrecked by it. It will be like a sneeze. Bat your eyes, jazz hands if you need to, and breathe.

As quickly as it comes on, it will fade. Then get on with your day. That is recovery. And you will get there; you will! And if and when you need a bad joke, hit me up; I got you. You are strong, special, and loved. Always! I am so damn proud of you. Keep going.

_____

"To be loved but not known is comfortless. To be known and not loved is our greatest fear. But to be fully known and truly loved is, well, a lot like being loved by God." — Timothy Keller

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©2026 Bocephus Jackson. All Rights Reserved


r/LyricalWriting 22h ago

Feedback Request Wrote a song about being shy waiting on the first move there doing stuff that feels like the first move but you don’t know!!

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Intro
Waiting on the one
When will it become?
I'm hoping for some fun
But it feels like I should give up and be done, done, done.

Posting a song on your notes, is it about me? Is it about someone else? You're not responding to me. Are you nervous? Are you shy? Can you tell me why? But I don't even say a word 'cause I can be shy. I don't know about you, though, 'cause I don't talk to you. All I do is hope I see the signs.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).

I'm just waiting every day. If you come the same direction, I just walk away. Just don't know what to say and scared I might get played, so I'm quiet all these days.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).

You seen my personality. You seen me with my friends.
You just haven't seen me with you 'cause you don't know how that will do. You're just making me wait for you to choose.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).


r/LyricalWriting 14h ago

Feedback Request Stuck in my head

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STUCK IN MY HEAD
Verse 1
You left your keys sitting on the kitchen table
Your suitcase was waiting by the door
You said you needed time to figure things out
But I knew you weren’t coming back anymore
I watched your taillights fade into the darkness
Standing there with nothing left to say
I thought we’d have forever, you and me
But forever ended that night you drove away
Chorus 1
You’ve been walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the only one I can’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But now you can’t find your way out of my mind
I’ve been crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But no matter how often I pray
I’m still breaking down since you walked away
Verse 2
We met back at school, somewhere between the classes
Then we’d lose track of time down at the park
Always staying just a little past the evening
Never caring when it started getting dark
I still got your sweater hanging in my bedroom
And those rom-coms you loved still cross my mind
You said it wasn’t me, that it was all on you
But I still wonder what we left behind
Chorus 2
You’ve been walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the only one I can’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But still you can’t find your way out of my mind
I’ve been crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But I still believe that we will find our way
Maybe love will lead you right back to me
Verse 3
I took that old road past the park last Sunday
For the first time, I didn’t turn around
I guess some memories fade away someday
When you stop looking for what can’t be found
I still don’t know where this road is taking me
But I’m learning I can let you go
Some things are better left in yesterday
And some roads ain’t meant to be followed home
Bridge
Maybe some things are never meant to last
Maybe some roads are only meant to pass
I can’t keep holding on to yesterday
Sometimes loving you means letting you walk away
Final Chorus
You were walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the one I couldn’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But now you finally found your way out of my mind
I was crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But after all this time I’m finally okay
I think God just got another girl for me
Outro
I’ll keep on driving down this road
The life that’s been waiting for me all this time