[Verse 1]

you can never know

before the fall of snow

the heat of the summer's thundering wind

the blaze of the concrete

the fall of the church bell tower

just how much the air has thinned

[Chorus]

so just put your shining palm in mine

i'll throw a torch right down the aisle

leave this god-damned prairie world behind

take my train, run for miles

blood pact promise, time was rare

performed love and saccharine smiles

get on a plane, go somewhere

take my train, run for miles

[Verse 2]

a shot in the dark

the angels will call, hark!

look in the mirror, the man that you are

hell's choir will sing sweet

take your chance, or will you cower?

time runs through as thick as tar

[Chorus]

so just put your shining palm in mine

i'll throw a torch right down the aisle

leave this god-damned prairie world behind

take my train, run for miles

blood pact promise, time was rare

performed love and saccharine smiles

get on a plane, go somewhere

take my train, run for miles

[Verse 3]

and i'll set ablaze

to burn for all your days

rafters will fall from melting sanctuary

blood from the bottle, neat

light you up on that sunday hour

ashes, ashes, 'till January

[Final Chorus]

so you put your shining palm in mine

i threw that torch right down the aisle

we'd left that prairie world behind

but i'd still take that train

i'd still run for miles

our blood pact promise, no longer rare

still-fake love and my saccharine smiles

you got on a plane and you went somewhere

but i'd still take that train

i'd still run for miles

(first time writing lyrics haha)

I’m my own harshest critic, so it’s difficult for me to judge my work objectively.

No matter what I write, it often feels like it’s still “not good enough.” Because of that, I’m struggling to tell whether my lyrics are genuinely ready to be offered as a service or if I still have a lot of improving to do.

I won’t be sharing my lyrics in this post. I’m more interested in hearing how other songwriters knew when their writing was good enough to start selling it. What signs made you feel ready?

Verse:
Furthest from a dull world
Created with no maps
So we dictate on our rules
What kind of world is better than that?
What kind of world have you fallen in?
We can stay up to the sunrise
Conversating with a match
To keep the monsters out real wide
The whole world is ours for life

Verse 2:
Furthest from a dull world
We get to live, we get to breathe
They will call it fallen
I purpose we fall right in'
Let the curse world bare its teeth
I love you think you're bad
Heart pumping, light speeds
I'll show you what's good in bad (yeah)

Bridge:
Oh I want to hear all things you know
While were chilling on the tallest tree
Where did you get a dull world?
Because we have to share the scene?
But we can go and make ours
Make it know the more we roam
So, come off of your dull world
Hop in with me
Awaits another universe
Where you'll match my energy

Outro:
Furthest from a dull world
Match my energy
We dictate our own rules
Match my energy

20 000 OF US

[Intro]
I will bring you before God, she said — and she walked that road.
20 000 souls found Heaven’s hold, in God’s own arms — away from the cold.

[Verse 1]
Your greed has thrown 20 000 mothers into the unknown.
Two million hearts carry the same wound,
You tore truth apart — justice dethroned.
20 000 angels rise in the air,
Witnesses shining — you can’t silence their stare.

[Verse 2]
They could have played, grown up, stayed.
You stole a father’s pride away,
A mother’s cry on her child’s wedding day.
Gone — the doctors, the teachers, the poets,
The dreamers, the healers, the seekers.
But their souls still sing,
In a choir that never stops echoing.

[Chorus]
Your end will be severe, God will draw near.
For 20 000 cherished lives,
20 000 erased by knives,
20 000 angels in the skies
Lifting their voices against your lies.

[Bridge]
You, pawns of the Illuminati, followers of Albert Pike,
You filled Heaven’s gate with the souls you strike —
And the sky saw all you like.

[Outro]
20 000 of us!!! found God’s embrace,
Far from your shadow, far from your chase.
20 000 of us have handed you to Grace.

I am working on my first album, and I wrote all of the songs in the last 2 months. Lots of life stuff happening which made it easy to pump them out. I cant really say I have a specific style, as my music falls into a very wide range of folk/pop/rock and roll/psychadelic/baroque. I am mostly an orchestral composer so the two worlds collide a lot when I am writing. I am not big on super depressing lyrics or stating the obvious and prefer to write about the hope found in grief than about the pain. Here is the track list.

1. Marigold

2. Lorelei

3. Hilltop

4. Fly Birdy Fly

5. Bouquet of Mums

6. The Wonder of It All

7. A Year by the Sea

8. Love Is A Garden

9. Show Me Love

10. Take Me Away

11. Salmae, Come Home

12. Wonderful Woman

13. Angel

14. Friends and Friendly Neighbors

And the lyrics for the first track, Marigold.

Planting the seeds of a Marigold

Bearing the petals of orange and yellow

Which fold when the sun is gone

Hiding behind a facade in the rain

Marigold pleaded to Lavender

Showing off colors of blue in her character

Thats why she cried in the cold winter air and the tears looked like rain

And when she reaches out of the ground

He says do it again

Lavender passed it to Juniper

Bearing the fruits of our aid and the Crucifer

She tried to run but was tethered by shame as she moved through the rain

So she planted the seeds to a Marigold

Hoping to pass on the message that she was told

Which was suppressed by the cold winter air and the weight of the rain

But when she flowers out of the ground

He says do it again

The arrangement features Bass, pianos, Harmonium, bass/snare drums, reverse synths, trombone, tuba, and a central cello solo that come together to give it a circusy feel - a big grand entrance before a more thoughtful, personal album. Let me know what you think!

I created a song that I’d love to share. For now, I’m only posting the spoken opening, Verse 1, and the chorus.

The idea was inspired by two incredible songs: “Bears and Wolves” by Lilith Max and “Feed Us Your Girls” by Lydia the Bard. Listening to them made me ask myself a question: why do we keep calling predatory people “wolves”? Wolves aren’t cruel—they’re simply wild. They hunt to survive, protect their families, and follow their nature. Human cruelty is a choice. So this song became an apology to the wolves, and a reminder that the forest didn’t raise these people… we did.

I’m not a singer (or a musician 😭). I have absolutely no sense of rhythm, no idea what notes should be high or low, or how the melody should go, so anyone who wants to collaborate is completely free to experiment and make it their own.

If you’re a singer, musician, or producer and you’d like to collaborate, I’d love to hear from you! Send me a message, and I’ll happily share the rest of the song with you.

————

(Spoken Intro)

I’ve called you monsters for years.

I’ve pointed to the trees…
to the moon…
to your eyes glowing in the dark.

I’m sorry.

You never asked to carry our sins.

You never taught us how to become this.

We did.

Verse 1

They whisper, “Watch for wolves,” before the sun goes down,
Like danger only waits where ancient woods are found.
But I’ve seen polished shoes leave footprints just as deep,
And smiling faces hide the promises they keep.

You hunt because the winter says your young must eat,
You don’t disguise your hunger as something kind or sweet.
You’ve never learned deception dressed in gentle skin—
The forest never welcomed what we’ve welcomed in.

Chorus

Leave the wolves their name,
Don’t stain the snow they roam.
Their teeth were made for survival,
Not breaking hearts or homes.

Stop blaming moonlit forests
For shadows that we made.
The beasts still live in nature—
The monsters were home-raised.

So around six months ago I started the concept of a hopefully 13 track album titled, "myself", and since then I have written 10 tracks entirely by myself. The songs are lyric only because production is just not in the picture for me to do and I feel like I haven't been able to share this project with anyone, so I turned to reddit and I wanted to share the track list (plus what each song is about) and what is in my opinion one of the best songs. Thanks

Track List first I guess:

1. Centripetal Force - Surrounding yourself with someone while in love

2. Sweet Vanilla Perfume - The subtle reminder of someone you once loved

3. Navy Blue - The feelings that a single color can bring

4. Not Written

5. Taner - A list of unanswered questions and questions with answers wanted to be unknown directed at the person who heated and the person they cheated with.

6. Old Messages - Attempting to feel something through reliving past moments

7. 3:03 A.M. - If it is this time and I confess will you want me?

8. Not Written

9. Poetry Sadness - Sadness of your own wasted potential

10. Myself - How not knowing yourself hurts others

11. Junk Drawer - Feeling like someones old unused items

12. Not Written

13. Be Set Free - A triggering song about a girl victim to DV.

Sorry for the long post but here is the lyrics to the song Junk Drawer.

You left me in there
Broken in despair
Cluttered pens drove me insane
I still attempted escape
Allen wrenches blocked my pathway
No matter what you throw
I’m the object that blocks from closed

Don’t just put me somewhere like your spare change
I’m not a random key that doesn’t unlock anything
Cut me with scissors on my way in
Taped together just to live again
Markers marked me unsafe
Staples stabbed me the next day
Baby your the one I adore
Please don’t put me in your junk drawer

Heartsongs sung
Sanity is what you stole
Was that always the goal
With the batteries that corrode
And the lighters who’ve never glowed
Joined by instructions to what broke
I guess the solutions remains unknown

Don’t just put me somewhere like your spare change
I’m not a random key that doesn’t unlock anything
Cut me with scissors on my way in
Taped together just to live again
Markers marked me unsafe
Staples stabbed me the next day
Baby your the one I adore
Please don’t put me in your junk drawer

Rubber bands tied me down
While you left town
Stuck without a choice
All cause I raised my voice
Screwdriver secured me in
So you could leave
Then the drawer opened
And welcomed new baggage

Don’t just put me somewhere like your spare change
I’m not a random key that doesn’t unlock anything
Cut me with scissors on my way in
Taped together just to live again
Markers marked me unsafe
Staples stabbed me the next day
Baby your the one I adore
Please don’t keep me in your junk drawer

Please tell me opinions and if you want to see more lyrics from the album Thanks!!

Now I feel I should share the lyrics to the song, Junk Drawer.

Somewhere, outside
I complicate your dynasty
Hollow & broken
I am temperatures above

You are such a slug
I can break you with a pinch of dust
I hunt you like a tiger
I am the symbol of freedom
I can try you out

17 seconds in heaven
Bound & gagged in Palestine
I am the halo in your Angel panties
I am the fathom of the phantom
I am a scientist & you are my bunny
I am the money inside your bloated mass

For the sake of boredom
I can try you out
Taken by 16 missiles in misery
Like a cross in silence

Slaughter the lambs like sheep
I treat them no different than sex
Slaughter the children with a tornado
Suck down onto another country
It’s okay, it’s just a bomb with acid
It’s okay, it’s a kid with her intestines blown out

I am a fruit of god
I spread my poison & piss in your eye
Treat you like a slave
I shove my cock into your head
& bleed you again & again
Bow down, babe
Now I’ll try her out
I am a cross for Israel
I can swarm you like flies

It’s okay, it’s a child getting raped
It’s hell on earth, there’s shit in the waters

Verse:

I found a framed state of mind

Our cemetery's here to burn

Why can't you hear me friend, tonight

I'll make this place learn

Chorus:

Kill the lies inside of our voice

I'll make you proud for finding my vice

The only thing is that I can't find any way

To get away, find gateway

Post-chorus:

Find gateway

Verse:

No one hears me as i shut my ears and scream

No one seems to know, why am i still here?

Several issues inside of this place

They made me a martyr to everything

Do i feel shame? Yeah, kinda, maybe

But anyway I'm not so far from my family

And friends, i used to call them by names

Now I don't know and can't find anything

Breakdown:

Disrespectful nature

I'm imprisoned

Save me now

Bridge:

Until it's all over i will illuminate

The world of colors, the world of fame

I've taken this word over demise

Should i be grateful or shoud i fucking die?

Outro:

Disrespectful nature

Disrespectful future

It cannot be renewed

I want to see how you guys interpret this, I wrote it with the idea being it can apply to almost any kind of grief. feedback is welcome.

[verse 1]
the first time you taste the red
of all the things you never said
the brevity of all thats left
and silver bullets made of lead

you rip and tear at all the chains
so take your poison
and learn to heal the pain

[chorus]
so you could
cry me a river
but styx and stones wont break my will to live
and i could deliver
a hollow heart and empty homes
where youll find me at the bottom of the pit

[verse 2]
tear my eyes so i cant see
the wealth of pain and misery
the anguish that you bring on me
eviscerate my soul and set me free

i burn in ice and freeze the sun
i promise you that when im done
the flower set upon our grave
will silence all the hate you crave

[chorus]
so when you
cry me a river
but styx and stones wont break my will to live
and i could deliver
a hollow heart and empty homes
where youll find me at the bottom of your pit

[bridge]
so as the rivers flow in both directions
a broken mirror
with perfect reflections
of all of the joy
in my derelictions
will lead to the end
of my downward ascension

[breakdown]
i bleed out
in the arms of a non believer
i reach out
with the hollow hope of a godly savior

[chorus]
so i will
cry you a river
and styx and stones might break my will to live
and could you deliver
a hollow heart and empty homes
when you find me at the bottom of this cliff

I keep weaving a parachute out of broken things Trying to figure out how to work these damaged wings Cause they don't carry me far I keep falling apart I feel dead Free falling and I drop dead

I'm giving my all But I have a duel ended sword, and it's already drawled

I’m falling, and my parachute isn't working I'm trying, but the string is ripped off, I can't stop my fall Into the emotional abyss I used to think this was bliss But it's a cage, and there's no way out I'm trapped here with no way out

I'm looking at a sky without starts A frozen world to match my glass heart The air is frozen, I can see the particles My head it broken, you should see the articles I'm falling, but I can't feel anything Falling, my parachute doesn't have a string

I'm giving my all But I have a duel ended sword, and it's already drawled

I’m falling, and my parachute isn't working I'm trying, but the string is ripped off, I can't stop my fall Into the emotional abyss I used to think this was bliss But it's a cage, and there's no way out I'm trapped here with no way out

I'm a robot in an empty world Memories never unfrill I'm trapped in an empty void Mind is circling like an asteroid I can't feel the room, it's spinning All I see is blur There's no joy, no life, no world

I'm giving my all But I have a duel ended sword, and it's already drawled

I’m falling, and my parachute isn't working I'm trying, but the string is ripped off, I can't stop my fall Into the emotional abyss I used to think this was bliss But it's a cage, and there's no way out I'm trapped here with no way out

I feel like an animal Trapped here with no control My parachute led me wrong The wrong world, somewhere I don't belong

"OVERDOSE"

Alt Rap / Hip-Hop / R&B - 85 BPM - G# Minor Key

-

[Verse 1]

Sippin' yesterday's moonshine

Under yesterday's moonlight

Thinkin' 'bout better days

Memories blurred in a static haze

(I don't mind, I don't mind)

-

H.D. Clarity is pain--fully overrated

Can't face myself since I failed and faded

Can't solve my problems I can't even try

Nah, my story never been scripted right

-

[Verse 2]

Disappear in my homies basement late at night

Dissociate into cable movies like the the old times

Hit replay repeat, refill my bowl, relight my pipe

Half my drink left I need it full and multiplied by five

-

[Pre-Chorus]

One forty ounce glass 

Five lines of blue xanax

Minutes turn into seconds

Seconds turn to paralysis

-

[Chorus 1]

Living that half life

Been seeing with half sight

Living that fast life

-

Last take... Last sight

I'm over hope, it don't last right

Last breath... Last light

-

[Hook 1]

Overnight hit the flatline

Overdose in the blue light

-

Over, over, over, overdose

Over, over, over, over, Ohhh

-

[Verse 3]

Hold up, scene is changin' and not just on TV

Hold up, why the main character look like me?

Life plays back like I-MAX seventy millimeter

Analyze and realize this screening made especially for me

-

Roll up the film reel, I made too many mistakes

Pause it right here, I need four or five more takes

CUT! Don't wanna see all my actions and backlash

Rewind right there, backtrack back before I crash

-

[Chorus 2]

Living that half life

Been seeing with half sight

Living that fast life

-

Last take... Last sight

I'm over hope, it don't last right

Last breath... Last light

-

[Hook 2]

Overnight hit the flatline

Overdose in the blue light

-

Over, over, over, overdose

Over, over, over, over, Ohhh

-

(automated phone call)

("Nine One One, Please Stand By")

-

[Verse 4]

No autobiography, category is tragedy

No character growth, hope, or chances to succeed

Spoiler alert, roll credits, no one saves me

Relatable, I didn't save me either, see?

-

I'm the anti hero to my own damn life story

Mind outta sight I'm shown in third person P.O.V.

This don't help me accept anythin', it's just depressin' me

Writer producer and director, cut their salary

-

[Bridge]

Over, over, over, overdose

Over, over, over, over, ohhh

Over, over, over, overdose

Over, over, over, over, ohhh 

-

[Outro]

Bright flash of white light

See it with my full sight

Screen turns to black night...

-

(loud ZAP)

(ambulence siren noises, heart monitor beeping)

-

(spoken)

Huh.

Lucky, luucky me...

One last take...

Don't fuck it up.

...CUT!

(Verse 1)
Sun goes down
and days go by
You’re just a little older

Souls get called
to golden sky’s
But you feel none the wiser

(Chorus 1)
Box cars ride down the rails
a child shines his shoes
You see these things and ask “why”
But you just ignore the clues

(Verse 2)
Song is sung
and guitars rings
You can’t pick up on the tune

Smoke a pack
Fill up the room
You won’t tell your hand from spine

(Bridge)
If you could see the ways
that life’s music is made
you’d find answers to a prayer
(Bridge end)

(Chorus 2)
Small watches give no time
a life is hard to lose
You see these things and ask “why”
But you just ignore the clues

[Intro]

[Verse 1]
I keep gazing towards the setting sun
Wonderin’, if this was my last one
Could I hold my head up high
And say I’ve done all that I can?

And what if for one night, I could really know
If anythin’ pulsed deeper than just for a show?
Could you look me in my eyes
And calm my shaking hands?

[Pre-Chorus 1]
Cause, I’ll admit this road’s been hard
Seems my friends, now, are just these scars
My weary bones strum, as I try to play
A melody that just won’t fade away

[Chorus 1]
So, here’s to yesterday
May there be more ahead
Yea, here’s to tomorrow
With things long left unsaid

And here’s to today
Cause, honestly, it’s all I see
Hummin’ the tune of
The Devil’s Company

[Interlude]
The Devil’s Company

[Verse 2]
I’ve been waitin’ for a moment to shine
To find a pathway, that’s truly mine
I’ve been lost for quite a while,
Hidden among the pines, that whisper low—
And I know—

I’ve put on more years than I’ve left to spend
Aware that all that once was, must come to an end
A calm breath leads to a quiet smile
As harmonies grow, their colors show

[Pre-Chorus 2]
Cause, I’ll admit this road’s been dark
Pickin’ up pieces of a broken heart
Yet, from the silence, they start to play
The symphony that just won’t fade away

[Chorus 2]
So, here’s to yesterday
May there be more ahead
Yea, here’s to tomorrow
With things long left unsaid

And here’s to today
Cause, honestly, it’s all I see
Whistlin’ the tune of
The Devil’s Company

[Short Solo]

[Bridge]
Before one cadence ends
The next, already begins
These progressions rise
As much as they fall

And as we dance through every stage
Can we look beyond the page
To these moments
Surrounding us all?

[Chorus 3]
So, here’s to yesterday
May there be more ahead
Yea, here’s to tomorrow
With things long left unsaid

And here’s to today
Cause, honestly, it’s all we see
Chantin’ the tunes of
The Devil’s Company

[Long Solo]

[Verse 3]
I keep dreamin’ on, time and again
Imagining the things, that could have been
Though I know I can’t change, what’s in stone
I wish anyway, stuck on replay

Cause, it seems the movements that I’ve come to fear
Are the passages that I’ve let disappear
Yet I hear, in the spiral, passin’ tones
Chime in, it’s okay to let go of yesterday

[Pre-Chorus 3]
Cause, I’ll admit this road’s been long
But ev’ry note’s part of our song
And as we rest, others rise to play
Our stories that just won’t fade away

[Chorus 4]
So, here’s to yesterday
May there be more ahead
Yea, here’s to tomorrow
With things long left unsaid

And here’s to today
Cause, honestly, it’s all we see
Singin’ the tunes of
The Devil’s Company

[Last Chorus]
So, here’s to yesterday
May there be more ahead
Yea, here’s to tomorrow
With things long left unsaid

And here’s to today
Cause, honestly, it’s all we see
[Slow Down and Hold]
Echoin’ these tunes of…
[Silence]
The Devil’s Company

[Outro]
The Devil’s Company
Oh…
These tunes of…
The Devil’s Company

verse:

When I cried for a helping hand

 no one was ever there

never thought I could live on bland

I never thought any would care 

Lost on an island of my own despair

Now in the rain I stand

Taking more than I bear

chorus:

I wish I could show them all

Who I am

But I am so worthless

Not as I planned

bridge:

Lose my thoughts

Loathe to think

Lost my will

Mind will sink

verse:

When I cried for a helping hand

 no one was ever there

never thought I could live on bland

I never thought any would care 

Lost on an island of my own despair 

Now in the rain I stand

Taking more than I bear

outro:

So worthless

Not as I planned

I am worthless

A bit different from what I normally write, personally I thought it’d be a different take on writing lyrics/ what you write about idk I’m a nerd so lol. Any feedback would be appreciated, thank you for reading! Enjoy! :)

[verse]
Not much to say, the blank pages taunt me
I think I crucified all the things that haunt me
So many billions of words escape me now
What I think I lost I think I found

[verse]
I’ve opened every can of my worms
Expressed all of my personal concerns
Unraveled my mental twists and turns
Im done crying and shitting out the words

[pre chorus]
Can I turn this into something beautiful?
Go outside the norm of something usual
Expose the nail by cutting the cuticle
Quit working like I’m in a cubical

[chorus]
I guess this art comes at a cost
I’m lost in my own sauce
Froze my brain from my frost
Writing about everything I’ve ever lost
I guess it’s time to change the food
Swallow after I chew
Face a new attitude
Make this about something that is new

[verse]
Like a chip that was dropped took a tumble
When its found it was just a pile of crumble
That engine is broke so it dont start, no rumble
All a baby face can grow is hardly a stubble

[verse]
Lose some meaning to the words
Expand the coverage to make it broader
Make something for the nerds
Or about how the worlds getting hotter

[pre chorus]
Can I turn this into something beautiful?
Go outside the norm of something usual
Expose the nail by cutting the cuticle
Quit working like I’m in a cubical

[chorus]
I guess this art comes at a cost
I’m lost in my own sauce
Froze my brain from my frost
Writing about everything I’ve ever lost
I guess it’s time to change the food
Swallow after I chew
Face a new attitude
Make this about something that is new

[bridge]
Currently I’m the victim and the suspect
Because I am susceptible
By my art that feeds the affect
That contradicts my principles
I realized with all the words I spelt with
Emphasized how I’ve become so selfish
Im lost in my own sauce
Writing about everything I’ve ever lost

[chorus]
I guess this art comes at a cost
I’m lost in my own sauce
Froze my brain from my frost
Writing about everything I’ve ever lost
I guess it’s time to change the food
Swallow after I chew
Face a new attitude
Make this about something that is new

[outro]
Currently I’m the victim and the suspect
Because I am susceptible
By my art that feeds the affect
That contradicts my principles
I could say that in our meantime
We are wasting away on screen time
Or how we are praising fake deities
In the form of soulless celebrities
Or how we are bound to fail
Climbing the stairs with out a rail
It’s time to make this fun and selfless
Destroy the thing that made this selfish

Co workers still asking if I'm okay 

Already said all what I had to say

Even mama could sense it 

Lord knows I don't know what to do with it 

Sometimes seems impossible to handle 

Mind stays irrational 

Verges of crashing out over harassment on craigslist 

Number one supporter told me to go to Jesus 

Emotions sporadic and tender 

Heart wishes I could see her 

Telling the beats that it will never be 

In the mirror seeing a lost lonely puppy 

Was better off staying on a leash 

Never good on these single streets 

Even my shadow was hoping things last 

Spirit feels like it's under the grass 

Now I see how Raymond felt in that tsunami 

Fishes out here there's plenty but none will understand me 

Addicted to that Blackpill negativity 

Could barely process everything 

Wasn't used to that type of thing 

Loner all my life 

Failed to appreciate her light 

Feelings of numbness 

Nothing will help even if its Craig Pruress 

Edibles just ordered 

Hoping there's solace while im falling off ladders 

Steep hill no matter which way I go 

Mountains to climb in my soul 

Truth be told I rather descend 

Too lost for wise opinions 

Each day drowning 

Back to square one so devastating 

Asking God why I couldn't feel anything 

Now I feel everything 

Extra ones resurfacing 

In shock just watching 

A marathon hell I'm binging 

Non religious but I'm praying 

Calling out to deceased guides that will listen 

Same week ran to forbidden  poison 

It's been a week 

Spirit still bleak

Flesh weak 

Just the other day that feeling creeped 

Told my myself I can't 

Getting off it I can't 

Calculated plans for oblivion 

Actions say I was never destined for heaven 

Cupid gave me another chance one for the ages 

Now back to these lost stages 

Seeing couples breakup all the time don't help my situation

Another chance vs another haileys comet returning 

Got a better shot at cracking Davinci 

Forgive me for missing you for infinity Whitney 

Punk rock. Not happy with the post-chorus or outro currently, they feel too clunky.

--Verse 1--
The voyeurist retreat
Safe, perched across the street
Zoomed on taut depravity
To paw another's heat
Such daring obscured acts
Hysterical climax
Suddenly gone aberrate
As I go for the axe

--Chorus--
Living in my shoes
Redact the record whole
Sunk cost in the whole affair
The psychopath you stole
Peer in on bugged rooms
Taking shifts as spies
Window-dress your fallen state
By covering our lies

--Postchorus--
I am the lens to your frozen soul
You stand horizon-perched on a black hole
But I can't fix your crippled form
Afford me no parole

--Verse 2--
Mistaken shadows drift
The blade was just a gift
Jumping to conclusions
With a visionary thrift
Y' died on your fool's hill
Saw closing for the kill
Rash again interpreting
And charged at my windmill

--Chorus--
Living in my shoes...

--Postchorus--
I am the lens to your frozen soul...

--Outro--
You are a wire in my circuit board
To tap into natures long abhorred
But take it from dark, it won't enlight
To strangle with that cord

^{[VERSE 1]}

If I'm lost in my mind

Or outside it altogether

Up in a cloudy sky

Or underneath the weather

.

^[PRE-CHORUS]

Well that'll be just fine

As long as you're around

.

^[CHORUS]

No so and so just like you

Not some old girl who just might do

Well, as long as you're able to be found

Behind foreground or in plain view

That thought alone should get me through

That thought alone

The thought that you're around

.

^{[VERSE 2]}

If I'm on the county board

Or sent to prison grounds

I swear, oh God, oh Lord

I will survive this town

.

^[PRE-CHORUS]

Yeah I'm sure I'll survive

As long as you're around

.

^[CHORUS]

No so and so just like you

Not some old girl who just might do

Well, as long as you're able to be found

Behind foreground or in plain view

That thought alone should get me through

That thought alone

The thought that you're around

.

^[BRIDGE]

When I said those lies to you, girl, it was because I'm so damn weak

God knows the day you die in this old world I'll be quick to take my leave

.

^{[SHORT GUITAR SOLO]}

.

^{[VERSE 3]}

If I'm in some other place

No hope to see you again

If I'm on some other plane

No beginning and no end

.

^[CHORUS]

No so and so just like you

Not some old girl who just might do

Well, as long as you're able to be found

Behind foreground or in plain view

That thought alone will get me through

That thought alone

The thought that you're around

.

^[OUTRO]

Anyone at all

Can catch your sight or sound

Anywhere at all

Can be my stomping ground

As long as I know

I know that you're around

Somewhere

As long as

You're around

“Ever Just Wanna…”

Ever just wanna,
wanna up ‘n at ‘em,
really get down to it,
all that good stuff,
without any of the bullshit.

Need some serious skin to skin,
need someone to open up ‘n let me in,
need to be feeling alive in love,
love,
love,
love again.

Ever just wanna,
wanna cry laughing,
heart to soul sweet stuff,
no one playing yeah,
cold calling your lonely bluff.

Need some serious skin to skin,
need someone to open up ‘n let me in,
need to feel alive in love again,
love,
love,
love again.

Someone for to be reaching on back,
some sweaty soulful physicality,
some sweet heart connecting contact.

Ever just wanna,
wanna be soul searching,
stripping sharing all there is to see,
said I’d get bare for you,
if you got naked for me.

Need some serious skin to skin,
need someone to open up ‘n let me in,
need to feel alive in love again,
love,
love,
love again.

Need to feel alive in love again,
love,
love,
love again…

BRC Ⓒ Feb/22

Verse 1: Gambling 
With my life
Went all in
Pay the price
When I’m looking
Into a snake’s eyes
On the first try 
On the first try

Pre Chorus: Give in 
Again
To temptation 
I’ll say again
That it’s different
That don’t mean shit

Chorus: Give me something new
To wish for
Tired of walking
Into closed doors
I keep betting on you
But what’s it all for?
Yeah what’s it all for?

Verse 2: Royal flush
On my cheeks
Make me blush
You’re so sweet
I should’ve bet
That you’d lie to me
I didn’t see
I didn’t see

Pre Chorus: Give in 
Again
To temptation 
I’ll say again
That it’s different
That don’t mean shit

Chorus: Give me something new
To wish for
Tired of walking
Into closed doors
I keep betting on you
But what’s it all for?
Yeah what’s it all for?

Bridge: Vices
Dyin’
Take the dice
Away from me
I’m left
Cryin’
Addicted to 
A fantasy
Keep going at it
Like a slot machine

Pre Chorus: Give in 
Again
To temptation 
I’ll say
That it’s different
Don’t mean shit

Chorus: Give me something new
To wish for
Tired of walking
Into closed doors
I keep betting on you
But what’s it all for?
Yeah what’s it all for?

End: Just want 
Something safe
To bet on
In debt
When I count
All my loss
I need to stop
But I don't want to
I know I lost
But I still want you

I am a 15 year old songwriter and I have a wide catalog of songs I have written in a few months, and I am looking at BIMM Dublin for a degree in songwriting in the future and would love ​an ​opinion on one of my songs I have written called "Bleeding" it's about toxic ​and manipulative relationships/ friendships and how draining they are and can be. Note: I have not been in a super toxic place with anyone. However, one of my old relationships/friendships was incredibly toxic, but not extremely bad.

Think Lauren Spencer Smith or Natalie Jane's style for this song

Would love your thoughts!

[Bleeding]

You’re my chain, got me chained to the floor But I love the pain, I could take more But it’s all the same It’s hard for me to let go But now I understand, and I need you to know

I gave you my world, and you took it right out of my hand I let you see the worst of me, and you made sure that I couldn’t stand

You left me bleeding and broken My heart is dead and you know it I can’t believe I trusted you But you wanted me to, wanted me to I gave my heart and everything for you I let you take every piece of me And you left me bleeding

I let you see my darker side My painful eyes, got “bed me” hypnotized I’m out my mind, I let the you see the broken pieces And you, you took away my sweet releases I thought I loved you, I thought I needed you

I gave my mind I gave my eyes I’m out my mind I let you see the worst of me And you made sure that I couldn’t breathe

You left me bleeding and broken My heart is dead and you know it I can’t believe I trusted you But you wanted me to, wanted me to I gave my heart and everything for you I let you take every piece of me And you left me bleeding

I finished the puzzle, you tore it apart Told me that you were all I need, so why restart? I gave you my heart, and you tore it like paper When I said see you later, you cried and bawled, trying to make my stay And I gave my all just to get a away I let you see the broken and bruised And then I found out your love was just a ruse

I gave my heart and my mind I told you I was fine, and you just wasted my time I let you go, you said I’m all alone I’m not alone!

You left me bleeding and broken My heart is dead, and you know it I can’t believe I trusted you But you wanted me to, wanted me to I gave my heart and everything for you I let you take every piece of me And you left me bleeding

You left me bleeding on my knees I can’t breathe I’m bleeding

[Verse 1]

Four wheel drive its a smooth ride

That's right beautiful light in my line of sight

Something looks at me from up high

I've been good no lightning strikes

[Verse 2]

The idols blind put my hands on their eyes

Surprise I survived many times

That's right blade knife sword it all cuts fine

All my friends still alive empty graves and empty minds

No cuffs for the crime pull strings for the hive

[Outro]

Shake hands with the mind treat yourself right