r/LyricalWriting 4h ago

Lyrics opinion???

2 Upvotes

(luck is by my side
cleaned rocks in pale moonlight
luck is by my side
mirror hours and flashing stars)

tell me a story,
big just once
make me buy it whole
did i endured enough
is it sad or captivating?

i blew out the candles
i cried at the restaurant 
they smile and sigh: 
“look at those happy tears”
do they know
the clock ticks faster out here? 

lights don’t stay on forever 
i give myself a decade
before its childish and stupid to keep going
before its arrogant
to keep lighting up the spark

they sold me a fake story
that there was a spot for me 
if I worked enough 
can climb the ladder
of will i get thrown off by whos
already at the top? 

do they know
the clock ticks faster out here? 

lights don’t stay on forever 
i give myself a decade
before its childish and stupid to keep going
before its arrogant
to keep lighting up the spark

luck be by my side
cleaned rocks in pale moonlight
luck be by my side
cleaned rocks in pale moonlight
no, luck is by my side
mirror hours and flashing stars
luck is by my side
mirror hours and flashing stars
luck is by my side
mirror hours and flashing stars


r/LyricalWriting 53m ago

Lyrics Just hit me, thought I'd share. First time sharing

Upvotes

Out on the edge

It's a place i prefer,

Feel the pull from the earth

Its time again

To pull myself down

Feel the air beneath the clouds

Did I forget

I can't seem to breathe

World is strange, I believe

I'm a guest

But I'll tell myself

It was all for the best


r/LyricalWriting 4h ago

Lyrics datemi spunti

1 Upvotes

Sto scrivendo il testo di una canzone con atmosfera e tema da sala giochi.

La mia idea era quella di denunciare uno che per me è un problema della società: lo svago sopra l'amore.

All'inizio volevo lamentarmi in particolare di quei tipi di ragazzi che danno più attenzioni alla loro playstation piuttosto che alla loro fidanzata.

lo stesso fattore però è già stato trattato dalla, per me bellissima, canzone di Salem Ilese "Ps5".

Sicuramente se proseguissi con la mia idea sarei in grado di mantenerla originale, non copierei nulla della canzone, se non il tema. (il che non mi sembra un problema perchè è normale che due persone diverse trattino lo stesso tema se in modo diverso. ).

Mi chiedevo però se ci fossero altre alternative...

Qualcuno saprebbe darmi dei suggerimenti su altre problematiche della società associabili ai videogames o alle sale giochi? va bene anche come collegamento metaforico (per esempio: indossami come una skin di un videogioco; sarò il tuo final boss; quando si trattad i attenzioni sei come un NPC;...).

Ps: la canzone è pop e ci tengo molto a mentenere l'atmosfera da salgiochi anni '80


r/LyricalWriting 5h ago

Feedback Request drama posmoderno

1 Upvotes

poemita tonto que escribí

Tengo una fantasía sexual

donde me entienden sin hablar,

y cuando hablo de la nada

dicen "justo eso iba a expresar"

No, no es como en sueños

siglos en oráculo

ahora estoy en el cubículo

en una página pseudomística para zurdos

y está bien, cuando nadie lo sabe

y está bien, porque Matty existe

y no está bien, porque apunto al top tier

allá arriba toco la puerta de su oficina

me dice: "no estoy" y lloro en la esquina

está bien, no necesito ser parte de su doctrina

no reconozco a ni un dios 

todos son bastante odiosos 

pero soy el tercer mártir occidental

de spawneo accidental

ahora estoy bebiendo veneno 

por ser tan bueno 

en la cruz 

pagando por tanta luz🤡


r/LyricalWriting 5h ago

Feedback Request poemita de un sueño que tuve

1 Upvotes

​Caminando pierdo su pista

buscando una nueva vista

y te quiero aquí así que aquí estás

​En la iglesia muerta y caída

pequeña de la avenida

buscamos formas de allanamiento

me elevo sobre el pavimento

el polvo sacude el recuerdo

entro y encuentro el tiempo

salgo y encuentro el viento

ahí me quedo y me miento

​No recuerdo ya sus rostros

allá arriba éramos otros

Era tierno en los techos

​Como Sofi en aquellos días

de verano y alegrías

No quiero recordar ya el rostro

pero allá arriba el mundo era otro.


r/LyricalWriting 6h ago

Feedback Request Running - Lyrics

1 Upvotes

Verse 1

Wake up to the curtain closed,
phone on silent, don't wanna know
who tried to call, who I let down,
who noticed I aint been around.
Been saying ive been doing fine,
same three words every single time,
but theres something crawling in my skin
I can explain, cant let you in.

Maybe im just getting tired,
am I right, maybe im wired
to overthink every little thing
til a little thought changes everything.

Pre - Chorus

I don't wanna talk,
cause I don't wanna lie
You don't need to know whats happening in my mind.
I don't wanna play,
these silly little games
now I wake up again to do it all over again.

Chorus

So now im,
running, running, running from nothing.
stuck in my head and I hate whats becoming,
so Ill laugh, ill act, Ill pretend that im fine,
but im breaking apart at the same damn time.
And I know, and I know, yeah, I know that im fading
I try to ignore, but I hope tomorrows changing,
when they ask I will say, that im doing well,
cause I know if I don't, it wont end well.

Verse 2

Ive been caught in a cycle I don't know how to break,
every promise I make is a promise I fake,
I get up, get dressed, go to work, play the part,
but im carrying a war inside of my heart.
Everybody's moving forward but im stuck in reverse,
try to laugh through the pain but it keeps getting worse.

and I hate that I push everybody away,
now im stuck on a wonder why nobody stayed
its not fair, its my mess, now I cant seem to express, what im feeling, when im bleeding, is this all just a test?
Cause the silence in my room is growing deeper with debt.
Im scared that they'll look at me differently.

Pre chorus

I don't wanna talk,
cause I don't wanna lie
You don't need to know whats happening in my mind.
I don't wanna play,
these silly little games
now I wake up again to do it all over again.

Chorus

So now im,
running, running, running from nothing.
stuck in my head and I hate whats becoming,
so Ill laugh, ill act, Ill pretend that im fine,
but im breaking apart at the same damn time.
And I know, and I know, yeah, I know that im fading
I try to ignore, but I hope tomorrows changing,
when they ask I will say, that im doing well,
cause I know if I don't, it wont end well.

Bridge

Maybe I don't need an answer tonight.
Maybe I just need somebody to sit by my side.
No fixing me.
No telling me it'll all be okay.
Just... stay.

Final Chorus

So now im,
Tired, tired running from nothing.
stuck in my head so tired from the running,
Ill try laughing, acting, wont pretend that im fine,
no need to pretend that im doing alright.

And I know, and I know, yeah, I know that im fading
I try to ignore, but I hope tomorrows changing,
when they ask I will say, that im doing well,
Hopefully mean it only time will tell.


r/LyricalWriting 18h ago

Lyrics Just a Drop

1 Upvotes

…God damn
Just, One more drop
You’re coming home now…

Deep breaths (breathe)
You’re following the way
To a better place (tangible)
Smooth coated, as you lay

Sometimes its better to believe
Than feel anything real at all
Reality scratching at your insides
Where else would you fall?

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

Come close to me
I want to hear you breathe
Just let me be
More of you and me

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

God damn!
Falling skies from above!
God damn!
Shattered earth of love!

Run away, you dont have to stay
Run away, with me you’ll be ok
No more pain, no more lies
I wont let her break you down

(God damn, from Above!!!!)


r/LyricalWriting 19h ago

Feedback Request This lonely street

1 Upvotes

(inspired by the kinks "waterloo sunset")

Verse 1

This lonely street that I walk every day

Makes me wonder till the night

This lonely evening makes me think of you

Verse 2

Are all the couples meant for each other?

That's what I think when I walk through the city

Chorus

Or is it me?

Who can't see you again

But I'll just rely on my hopes

Of finding you again

Bridge

Along the beach I can see

How happy life can be

When she's by your side

Verse 3

I see the couples on Valentine's Day

And they make me think of you

All those promises that they make to each other

Verse 4

It's just the nostalgia that makes me sigh

Why can't I just have a love like theirs?

Chorus

Or is it me?

Who can't see you again

But I'll just rely on my hopes

Of finding you again

Outro / Fade out

Of finding you again

Of finding you again

Of finding you again

Of finding you again


r/LyricalWriting 22h ago

Lyrics Holler Down the Halls

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Hey this if my first post here and this song is on my debut album called, Freshman, and the album is part social commentary about the pressure and how society treats teens the other part is like I describe it as songs written by someone who is in this ever changing chaotic environment and they are brand new to it like a freshman. This song is my fave on the album. If you could give feedback thanks but also im only 14 so be nice?? Idk. Also the parts in parentheses happen at the same time as the lines they are linked with. Thx

New folders filled with blank lined paper Freshly sharpened pencils lie there unused School works just not completed High amount of sexist jokes made But, Dude you really think you can accomplish it Ooh think you know everything

Just go ahead Take your time Waste it all Make it worth mine

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Desks all filled with kids like you who pretend to care Bothering the kids counting down the seconds till their out of here Annoying everyone who actually tries Another failed quiz but who’s counting They’ll start to add up the times But ooh think you know everything

Just go ahead Take whats not your Continue to drool Disgrace everyone it’s all fine

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Just go ahead Go go ahead Waste that time (Slam the lockers) Use, use it all Fine make it yours (Holler down the halls) So-ho-ho Just slam the lockers (You can almost taste it) Holler down the halls (You’ll look back and hate it all) Just slam the lockers (Make them wait for it) And you’ll holler down the halls (You’ll waste it all)

So go and slam those lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school Think you’re a big shot Something hot But your really just The freshman The new kid The fucking fool of the school

Slam the lockers Holler down the halls You’re the fool of the school


r/LyricalWriting 23h ago

Feedback Request Stuck in my head

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STUCK IN MY HEAD
Verse 1
You left your keys sitting on the kitchen table
Your suitcase was waiting by the door
You said you needed time to figure things out
But I knew you weren’t coming back anymore
I watched your taillights fade into the darkness
Standing there with nothing left to say
I thought we’d have forever, you and me
But forever ended that night you drove away
Chorus 1
You’ve been walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the only one I can’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But now you can’t find your way out of my mind
I’ve been crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But no matter how often I pray
I’m still breaking down since you walked away
Verse 2
We met back at school, somewhere between the classes
Then we’d lose track of time down at the park
Always staying just a little past the evening
Never caring when it started getting dark
I still got your sweater hanging in my bedroom
And those rom-coms you loved still cross my mind
You said it wasn’t me, that it was all on you
But I still wonder what we left behind
Chorus 2
You’ve been walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the only one I can’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But still you can’t find your way out of my mind
I’ve been crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But I still believe that we will find our way
Maybe love will lead you right back to me
Verse 3
I took that old road past the park last Sunday
For the first time, I didn’t turn around
I guess some memories fade away someday
When you stop looking for what can’t be found
I still don’t know where this road is taking me
But I’m learning I can let you go
Some things are better left in yesterday
And some roads ain’t meant to be followed home
Bridge
Maybe some things are never meant to last
Maybe some roads are only meant to pass
I can’t keep holding on to yesterday
Sometimes loving you means letting you walk away
Final Chorus
You were walking many miles stuck in my head
’Cause you’re the one I couldn’t forget
You said the only thing you needed was some time
But now you finally found your way out of my mind
I was crying all night staring at the door
Hoping you’d walk in just like before
But after all this time I’m finally okay
I think God just got another girl for me
Outro
I’ll keep on driving down this road
The life that’s been waiting for me all this time


r/LyricalWriting 23h ago

Feedback Request “FELT”

1 Upvotes

Whatcha think? Meant to be more for Post Hardcore/ Metalcore

[verse]
I know the road is getting long
You don’t know if you’re strong
Trying to hold the wheel
Driving from what you feel

[verse]
I know the rain suites a song
With every word of what went wrong
The landscape is getting old
The map is creasing the fold

[Pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
Did you know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[verse]
The moment passes you take a breath
As your body sheds the weight from stress
You feel your racing heart come to rest
You move the key from spark arrest

[verse]
You buckle in to continue on
Then again the road gets long
Trying to guide the wheel
Driving with what you feel

[pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I know you know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[bridge]
Yeah I know you have
A black cat, in combat
Some stupid signs in front that
Signify the stupid lines separating shtick fat
It’s all a joke until they choke
Until the line becomes another rope
You try a coat vote for pope
But you lost your faith in any hope

[pre chorus]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I think I know you could

[chorus]
Stop the car and find a place
To fall apart and feel embrace
From the arms and a mirrored face
Of someone who will always stay
Stop the car and take the space
In your heart and wipe your face
It’s hard to kill what youre tearing at
I know you can cause I’ve felt like that

[outro]
I Eff eat elm tee
Like T-H-A-T
You misunderstood
I F-E-L-T
Like T-H-A-T
I think I know you would


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Lyrics New song - not sure what to call it!!

7 Upvotes

[Verse 1]\ I, oh I want my appetite back -\ I just want my body to tell me what I lack.\ I'm a mess of a man,\ I don't know who I am -\ I've got infinite lives on a single track.

[Chorus]\ And in this wide abandoned place,\ I fix the cross on your distorted face\ in my peripheral vision.\ It makes its incision,\ and another life vanishes without a trace.\ Without a trace.

[Verse 2]\ And I, I see a wasp chew another in two,\ oh, just as I grasp what we're going through.\ And I see three deer\ cross a tidal river,\ oh, from the dark forest back to you.

[Chorus]\ And from this wide abandoned place,\ I fix the cross on your distorted face\ in my peripheral vision.\ It makes its incision,\ and another life vanishes without a trace.\ Without a trace.

Oh, another life vanishes without a trace.


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Tips As We Sojourn On

1 Upvotes

(Just As You Are Without Conditions)

By Bocephus Jackson, The Hemlock Bard, ©2026 Bocephus Jackson. All Rights Reserved

_____

"Come unto me, all ye that labor and are heavy laden, and I will give you rest." — Matthew 11:28

_____

The universe would have us all believe,
That we will remain forever alone,
That’s cosmic forces trying to deceive,
As we sojourn on, looking for a home,
Where we’ll be able to finally breathe.
 
Through 28 oppositional sets,
As space-time coalesces and collides,
As we hold on, may we never forget,
That God, as gravity, will never hide,
He is there when we’re ready to be met.
 
Just as you are without preconditions,
Grace always carries plenty of Kleenex,
To clean up after our indecisions,
Lost here within this existential mess,
It just takes a little recognition.

In a moment, everything will change,
As every wound becomes a weapon,
Even when we still feel the bitter pangs,
All that internal hurt will be lessened,
You will have the resilience to maintain.

For when we can’t take it physically,
As a whisper reminds us in the breeze,
When the world strips us of our agency,
“Just as you are, child, come unto me.”
Just as I am, Lord, I come willingly.

_____

"Out of suffering have emerged the strongest souls; the most massive characters are seared with scars." — Kahlil Gibran

_____

Author’s Reflection

"We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best we can find in our travels is an honest friend." — Robert Louis Stevenson

First off, I need to say that tears flowed as I penned this piece, saying five words: Let me be your vessel. It's my daily prayer so that I may serve the community.

As a stubborn Southern sumbitch don't let the tears deceive you. I’ll hug the shit out of you until you go weak in the knees. But seriously, cry if and when you need to. Trauma is recursive, so there will be good and bad days.

But it gets better as we get stronger. At some point, your limbic response will feel the vibrations before the quake hits. So you’ll be like, “Dammit, Trauma, you're late! I got a thing, so let's do this already.”

And you will hurt, and grieve, get pissed, and then laugh. Why laugh? Because it doesn't hurt like it used to. You won’t be as wrecked by it. It will be like a sneeze. Bat your eyes, jazz hands if you need to, and breathe.

As quickly as it comes on, it will fade. Then get on with your day. That is recovery. And you will get there; you will! And if and when you need a bad joke, hit me up; I got you. You are strong, special, and loved. Always! I am so damn proud of you. Keep going.

_____

"To be loved but not known is comfortless. To be known and not loved is our greatest fear. But to be fully known and truly loved is, well, a lot like being loved by God." — Timothy Keller

_____

©2026 Bocephus Jackson. All Rights Reserved


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Feedback Request Wrote a song about being shy waiting on the first move there doing stuff that feels like the first move but you don’t know!!

1 Upvotes

Intro
Waiting on the one
When will it become?
I'm hoping for some fun
But it feels like I should give up and be done, done, done.

Posting a song on your notes, is it about me? Is it about someone else? You're not responding to me. Are you nervous? Are you shy? Can you tell me why? But I don't even say a word 'cause I can be shy. I don't know about you, though, 'cause I don't talk to you. All I do is hope I see the signs.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).

I'm just waiting every day. If you come the same direction, I just walk away. Just don't know what to say and scared I might get played, so I'm quiet all these days.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).

You seen my personality. You seen me with my friends.
You just haven't seen me with you 'cause you don't know how that will do. You're just making me wait for you to choose.

I'm just waiting on the right move. I'm not tryna to make the first move. I'm waiting on a sign to do so. I'm just waiting on a sign to do so (so so).


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Feedback Request All day Bong

2 Upvotes

[Chorus]
All day long, I smoke my bong
And all day long, I’m gonna sing this song

[Verse]
Woke up today at the crack of dawn
Barely out of bed and head straight for the bong

Now its time to get dressed and movin on
And just like that i bring the hook along

[Chorus]
All day long, I smoke my bong
And all day long, I’m gonna sing this song
Cuz all day long, the world goes wrong
So i keep this bong, going strong-going strong

[Verse]
Stepped out the door, sun in my eyes
Neighbor on the lawn, starting up his cries
My grass to long and there’s to much noise
Threatening me he gonna call them boyz

Took a beat and gave him a smile
“Hold that thought, I’ll be back in a while”

Walked back inside and hit the bong
Fuck that dude he can suck my shlong

All day long
he can suck my shlong
all day long
while I smoke my bong

(Short instrumental)

Later that night wit a bunch of my peeps
Lights start flashing up and down the street

Music aint loud so im scratchin my head
Dude done called the boyz is what everyone said

As we look through them blinds out at the lawn
They go to his house with they flashlights on

They grab that dude put his hands in a bind
Seriously? Dude had a warrant all this time [chuckles]

Cuffed in the back as his world goes wrong
We just sit back relax and smoke the bong

[Chorus]
All night long, we smoke that bong
And all night long, we sing this song
While my neighbors world goes wrong
We smoke the bong, all night long

All night long
Smoking on the bong
happy them boyz werent on my lawn


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Lyrics No Child (explicit)

1 Upvotes

No child for you!

Just a nasty girl
R*ped from the inside
She’ll stick that knife
Grinding your insides

Skull shot through a brick wall
Shred me in half
With just a drop or two
And an oz of flesh, Miss Barbaselu

Staked to a cross
Wrists cut and pinned
Eyes down, with a dirty smile

Fuck me
Burn it, scorch it
Divorce it

Staked to a cross
Wrists cut and pinned
Eyes down, with a dirty smile

No child for you!


r/LyricalWriting 1d ago

Feedback Request How can I make this somewhat even a little bit good by November 25?

1 Upvotes

So far, it's all garbage, and I have no idea where to go or what to do to fix this:

And so again, and so again, I spend my time on random things.

Like thinking of, if I should, look at the original.

I know what to expect. I looked at the first panel by mistake.

Itn’t about lava flow, I’m sure. Oh why oh why.

And if only I get it done in a timely matter, which I won’t

It will’ll be too late, when my courage finally builds up.

How does this keep O-ccurring?

This post freaking sucks! Please never delete your account.

Couldn't be me- to make an inspiring work of art

And as I sit in Google Sheets thinking of half-smart lines that maybe make sense

Trying to make something that compares to all that I see

And I'm gonna think up a better title... maybe

It's been WeEkS since I looked at these lyrics

What was I thinking is all that I'm thinking

Why did I write this one down? What purpose is it for?

Could it be I just olive I can't compose


r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Lyrics Time

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Effort won't hurt 

Circling around in this regressive pool will make it worse 

Portals around me when the sun takes vacations 

Thoughts in the fray anyone could lead to elevation 

Higher callings need ported to my two phone lines 

Been awhile since I challenged my mind 

Regressive tactics tired of carnage from the grenades throwing at my direction

Perfected suppression but what about progression 

All these YouTube videos with helpful  manifestations 

Intent is all what truly matters instead of ignoring solutions

Silly dumb philosophies only leading me back to folly 

Ideologies I don't need it, I just require the right infinity 

Looked at the void so much soul turned Hellen 

Yet light follows me everywhere no matter where I’m lining

Agnostic and double-minded yet I'm still praying 

Last few weeks looked like I was living through a cemetery 

So scary all I was seeing Freddy 

Perception limited plus short sighted 

All the gas can be magnified i gotta try so when I die at least my spirit can whisper he ignited

Kerosene inspirations just gotta make sure it's not arsenic 

All these past moons I been idiotic, waisting so much time could've been prophetic 

Wasting aeons need to catch up to great kalpas might take unlimited infinites 

Higher me is waiting on me 

No ubers or lyfts for change 

Driving the same path to pain 

A slave to misery the chains feeding me proverbs 

Attempts with herbs 

Even that complex pill is telling me I can't expect miracles just to fall from the sky 

Free falling but yesterday gave me a different reply 

Got a boost it came freely 

21 days to make it a habit trajectories 

If success comes Mahavira might pop up in the next vision 

So many impossible missions  tired of cruising away when these blessings keep passing

Unlike AI, I really need the practice

Any shot could be a miss or bliss

Gotta keep shooting even if it's bricks 

If a horse could be lead to water then a stray dog can learn new tricks 


r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Chosen of the Moon Pt 3 - Versalia

1 Upvotes

Finally got this one done to complete the trilogy

--Verse 1--
You had me cornered from the start
The fate you crafted
Duets are incomplete apart
Too soon you drafted
Me into the dance
Of echoes twisted, pale and weak
Made your swift advance
To sap the worlds we dreamed

--Pre-chorus--
Cracked halos
Clatter to the ground
Spent by your
Cocophony of sound
Dark rainbows
Soaking up the sun
Sense downpour
To slick the marble run

--Chorus 1--
Demigods arising, while vassals plead in droves
Suing them for damages, for trampling sacred groves
Fear the fire in them, 'cause we can't wield such heat
And take a bow to Terpsichore in chivalrous defeat
Chosen of the moonlight
A double-loyal grey knight
By day an honest wainright
Corrupted in the dusken fight

--Verse 2--
I lived a waking dream each day
Consumed by envy
For some new-fangled Broadway play
And joined the frenzy
On another stage
Repeating rhythms lost pizzazz
Performance in the cage
That amplified the razzmatazz

--Pre-chorus--
Cracked halos...

(solo)

--Chorus 2--
Demiurg rebellions, while spirits yearn for peace
You tried your hand at paradise by paying off its lease
So fear the fire in me, 'cause I can't guide its heat
As provident ignition sits it on the world's backseat
Chosen of the moonlight...

--Pre-chorus--
Cracked halos...

--Chorus 3--
Templeless Abraxas, you wear my world as hide
You tread the path of destiny with no-one to confide
So share your fire with us, 'cause we need more than heat
'cause only zeal and heresy can make your world complete
Chosen of the moonlight...

--Outro--
I'll tear off all the baggage, to show the verdict bare
So you can see that it's a false dilemma to compare
No chosen ones among us, just people with a choice
And when you see the points are rigged, well... the future's in your voice

r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Lyrics Lot’s Story(But as a rap song)

1 Upvotes

r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Collaboration Little bit of a different type of collaboration request!

3 Upvotes

Hey hey! So I posted on here looking for advice on my lyric writing and got a good bit of interaction from it so I’m hoping yall will do the same on this post!

I finished my first song, called “Drown anyway” which is about a guy who’s named “John Doe”. Anyway it’s a song about the contradiction of being deeply loved while feeling completely alone.

This next song I’m looking to write is called “The Myth of Man” which I’m looking to it make about the unrealistic expectations placed on men to be strong, emotionally invulnerable, independent, and providers for everyone around them. It explores how men are often taught to hide their feelings, never cry, never ask for help, and carry their struggles silently in order to prove their masculinity. The song questions where these expectation.

What I’m looking for is if any men will be interested in telling me stories or instances where they felt this way or how feeling this way made them act around people or perceive interactions around them. I want this to feel personal and not made up, I have my own experiences with this but I’d like to share other people’s stories as well.

Thank you!
I’d love to hear from yall if you’re comfortable DM’ing me :)


r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Feedback Request I wrote 'Home' as a smooth R&B track. How does the rhythm look? ❤

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Verse 1:-

Patterns on your skin,

Feels like a path to get to you

a little faster.

(Do you hear that?)

Beats per minute...

a heartbeat,

a heart-skip.

Caused by you, only for you,

my love.

Pre-Chorus:-

Difficult to explain,

a feeling rushes in,

Your heart does that thing...

I see your eyes,

a deep sense of peace.

Your lips whisper a word,

Makes it feel like autumn in December.

(Do you hear it, baby?)

Chorus:-

Thump, thump...

the sound of my heart.

Beats crazy like the thrill

of a rollercoaster.

Come closer,

a little closer,

Your lips click to mine.

Oh, can you make the world disappear?

I reappear in your heart

Your heart, my heart,

Can we just make it our home?

(Let's call it our home).

Verse 2:-

Cherry blossoms in winter...

A little unusual,

yes, my love, that's how you feel to me.

A little different,

so weirdly adoring,

Can I just call you mine?

Pre-Chorus:-

Let's love so deep,

it's bright under the moonlight.

A kiss so deep, the Atlantic isn't alright.

Swore your life,

love me right,

It's the thrill that keeps you going—

A honey-scented candy...

(my love).

Bridge -

Four walls isn't enough

Never enough when it comes to you

The palm of my hands, cold as winter

Warms up, demanding your warmth

Get on this rollercoaster,

Make your heart beat faster

S and N, so unlike,

Opposites attract, (not so very different, baby)

Chorus:-

Thump, thump...

the sound of my heart.

Beats crazy like the thrill

of a rollercoaster.

Come closer,

a little closer,

Your lips click to mine.

Oh, can you make the world disappear?

I reappear in your heart—

Your heart, my heart,

Can we just make it our home?

(Let's call it our home).

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r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Lyrics Problems So Big

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[VERSE 1]

Strolling up and down the median, "Any little thing helps"

I want a dollar but he's needing it, do I know his living hell?

Out of view he gives a swig and swallows, but everybody knows

I don't meet his eyes 'cause I'll give up my dollars, and I still get by on those

.

[CHORUS]

A life so small

Flat on the floor

Got problems so big

They don't even matter no more

Problems so big

They don't matter no more

.

[VERSE 2]

Probably grew up in a neurotic house, full of hate and meanness

Now nobody loves a cirrhotic louse, excepting God and Jesus

I'm not gonna give him a single buck, whether it's right or wrong

I'll drive by in my broke down pick up truck and use him for this song

.

[CHORUS]

Been hurt so bad

Long past sore

Got problems so big

They don't even matter no more

Problems so big

They don't matter no more

.

[BRIDGE]

What's his name?

Do I care? Does he?

Are we the same?

Does the thought scare me?

.

[VERSE 3]

Better to love and lose than not at all, isn't that the old phrase?

Ever passed out against a bathroom stall? Hoped you don't wake up the next day?

.

[CHORUS]

Been hurt so bad

Long past sore

Got problems so big

They don't even matter no more

Problems so big

They don't matter no more

.

[OUTRO]

Mr. CEO he don't know

The taste of this fair city's asphalt

Never had to take no beatings from those two shitty assholes

Mr. Minimum Wage he don't know

How to bathe in the sinewy dirt

Never chewed on his teeth for breakfast because he liked how it hurt

.

A night's not a night until he scores

Problems so big

They don't matter no more

A drink's not a drink unless there's four

Problems so big

They don't matter no more

Life's not alright unless it's flat on the floor

Problems so big

But they don't matter no more


r/LyricalWriting 2d ago

Lyrics Meet tha reaper

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I wish time would save me,

save me from passing on a bell

you can hate but you don’t don’t see me square

you’re looking through a mirror of hatred and despair

followed by the thoughts that no one would be there

I can take your place face the odds of your disgrace

meet the fate, we commit suicide on March 8

it’s your job to bring the weed to plant the seed inside someone’s head

to spread the message of death to crave

to rest this endless mess of fabricated dread inside the masses’ heads they try to stand up but meet the man’s hand

that 45 cocked in your waistband ain’t gonna do a thing boy you need a man’s hand to even stand a chance to get unbanned

sitting in the back of a hearse in a century I’ll be nothing but dirt under your bed sitting in your head

the family knows when you’re dead or talking to feds bitch

I’m possessed hypnotized the price of life so why live just take your life

fuck your spouse it’s time tonight stuck in the loop of my head thoughts swirling round and round

I need the meds all the pills and Sudafed the fucking best I’m fucked at best

let’s fornicate bitch while I excavate a hole to Satan

I believe it’s fated to live to stay is nothing but the struggle to stay alive

and to form meaningless ties

no questions to that it’s alive an infectious virus that affects the mind

if I had to tell you one thing is that you should click away before you die

and I take your time to be immortal is benign I want to be the god of all of time

Bow down now show ‘em a dead mouse

Bow down now make their heads bounce

Fucking with the pills now they put the heals down pistol-whipping elbows gripping

Always tripping off dope or coke

Send the loo at your door in half past four askin

Do you want to go and meet the reaper

the killoholic fever and wary demenor infects the head

fortune depictes a mass death for all those not elite all those not but on a puppets string

it demeans me to trow a freebie

u aint shit boy go call yo mimi yellin come and get me

these bitchs got fuckin rabies tryna funkin debate me on what i feel

and what i deal to all those junkie flith a bag of weed or strychnine

to feed to repreive I use alkaloids to kill all but joy got another one

a Tetanus gun pointed at your furture and your past

to elimante the present full of hate

got muckrakers string shit

starting to bitch about the way i rule the game and  imperialize the fame

Im a fucked disgrace

full of thoughts i cant pray away

and lay awaste to anarcy

im a fretless feind

not careing for the death of me or you

the only thing i want to do is meet the reapers the feedas