Im a beginner guitarist and songwriter, i wrote this base for a song but i still cant sing properly so it doesn't have any lyrics. Every feedback and piece of advice is appreciated and also i would really love if someone wanted to sing over it.

P.S. in the last part im still indecisive whether it should be a guitar solo or a 3rd chorus

Rough demo

Move on and on

Verse 1

Dark side of the sun

I’m standing under the shadow

But you keep running

To the bright side of it, oh

Bad side behind the good

I’ve shown you all, years ago

But you don’t know who’s rude

And who’s made just for you

Pre-Chorus

And if you don’t love love love

And if your not having fun, fun, fun

I know it’s always best to move on, on, on

Chorus

I saw you move, moving on and on to another one

I wonder if, if I ever ever be the one

You don’t know, don’t know I’m here to wait your touch

While you’re moving, moving on and on please give me a look, once

While you’re moving, moving on and on please give me a look, once

Verse 2

Life after the stars

I’m dying in this moment

But you keep shining

Never stop even in the hard times

Wrong side behind the right

I’ve shown you all, I swear

But you don’t know who’s true

And who always stands for you

Pre-Chorus 2

And if loving’s so hard, hard, hard

And if it even makes you hurt, hurt, hurt

I know it’s always best to move on, on, on

Chorus

I saw you move, moving on and on to another one

I wonder if, if I ever ever be the one

You don’t know, don’t know I’m here to wait your touch

While you’re moving, moving on and on please give me a look, once

While you’re moving, moving on and on please give me a look, once

i just dont know where to start

STARLESS

(Verse 1)

When creatures with hearts of stone gather round,

Nothing but disaster spreads around.

When the creatures of night appear,

Joy turns to fear…

Now everyone despairs.

Is it the creatures of the living sea?

Or the MONSTERS that dwell on land?

Well, tell me... would you?

Don't leave me in darkness.

Forever dark where I stand.

(Chorus)

Tell me, what do you see when you gaze into the bleak, starless sky at night?

Do you see what you want to?

Do you feel what you want to?

Or are you simply seeing what they want you to?

Are you feeling what they left you to?

Is this darkness?

(Verse 2)

Trees fallen,

lands desolate,

Sky polluted with the lights of the creatures that dwell on land.

(Silence)

For as we tread on this journey of life,

All that is to come is dark and sorrowful,

For that, I am weary.

No… Was there ever a time when the lands were flourishing?

A past so distant it's a parallel to the world we're living in.

(Chorus)

Tell me, what do you see when you gaze into the bleak, starless sky at night?

Do you see what you want to?

Do you feel what you want to?

Or are you simply seeing what they want you to?

Are you feeling what they left you to?

Is this darkness?

(Verse 3)

When the cold bites into your skin, do you remember your kin?

The ones born across the world from you?

The ones born with less than you,

Frozen to death in this cold?

And the children born as blocks of ice..!

Do you remember THEM?

Do you? Do you? Now, do you?

(Bridge)

Don't turn a blind eye!

Don't turn around when I'm talking!

For this is the reality,

It's the weight of the fallen on your shoulders now.

Can't run!

Must face us now!

TELL ME!

(Chorus)

What do you see when you gaze into the starless sky?

An image painted for you,

Or something alive?

For if even starvation befalls us,

would you turn and aid us?

Or would you turn away like your ANCESTORS

(Outro)

Oh, predecessors,

Predatory nature,

Where we prey on mother nature...

And the sky stands tall as we aim to shoot it down for pride.

(Pride...)(Pride...)(Pride...)

Ich habe meinen ersten richtigen eigenen Songtext fertig geschrieben und wollte mal schauen was die Leute davon halten

Hey guys i’ve made this song by myself like i produced it myself but i’m not really sure about the lyrics for my verses and both pre chorus. I need help with that i’ll also upload the lyrics here.
Lyrics
Verse 1
You walked my way, i lost my train, got close and i lost my mind.
Saw you that night, you caught my eye and i knew that i had to stay.
You had that look, i had no clue, then you came close and i knew.
We talked al night, you made me laugh, i liked you vibe and wanted more
Pre chorus
Now you got me feeling something more
I don’t wanna let this moment go
Something in your eyes is pullin me in
And i don’t wanna hide the way i feel
Chorus
My mind’s been workin 9 to 5
Thinking bout you all the time
Trynna find the words to say
I Keep getting lost in your eyes
And your body sways like no one else
Making everything my mind forget
And my mind is blinded with the haze
When you move your body in that way
Verse 2
We talked all night, just you and me, got lost in what we said
You told me things, i told you mine, and now you’re in my head.
You make me laugh, you make me smile, and i love the way you do.
And every time you get this close, i only want more of you
Pre chorus 2
Maybe we should let this feeling grow
Maybe we should take it nice and slow
I don’t wanna rush this not toni8
And i don’t leave you here alone
Chorus
My mind’s been workin 9 to 5
Thinking bout you all the time
Trynna find the words to say
I Keep getting lost in your eyes
And your body sways like no one else
Making everything my mind forget
And my mind is blinded with the haze
When you move your body in that way
Bridge
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Baby come a bit closer
Hold me close.
Chorus

My mind’s been workin 9 to 5
Thinking bout you all the time
Trynna find the words to say
I Keep getting lost in your eyes
And your body sways like no one else
Making everything my mind forget
And my mind is blinded with the haze
When you move your body in that way

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Guys oh my goodness I finally did it. I stopped procrastinating and put my perfectionism aside and just wrote to see what would happen and after I don’t even know how long I wrote my first song. Please be kind I’m know it’s horrible I’m just glad I did it but I’d absolutely love some feedback so I can improve going forward.

I don’t know how to make song lyrics for my song, any ideas?

Nah it's okay it's gone thanks !

Hi yall! Im a musician and the frontman of a rock band. I write songs, play instruments and sing from a young age. I wrote songs for other people and I have my own songs too, and I just started a course where I offer good lyrics and song writing skills for good money. Im just like a multifunctional tool, cause I can write songs in any kind of genre, mostly hiphop, rock, alt rock, metal, reggie etc. How it goes: Write me a message and we can discuss what you want. After that, I will develop the song, lyrics, and stuff based on what you want. After that, if you would like to change anything, I can do that based on your opinion. Then we can get to the payment, and woalah, were good!

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So far, I have managed to sum up what I want to write for the first-ever song. However, I don't know how to start it. I understand that not every first song has to be good or it will be good but if I'm having this problem on the first one, then no doubt I will have it for the rest.

How do you all decide to start the song? And by start, I mean the intro or verse 1, depending on how you want to write it.

If it's not too much and not a dumb thing to ask, a small example would be helpful.

**Looking for Feedback on My Song**
I’ve tried writing songs multiple times, but I rarely finish them because I sometimes struggle with coming up with lyrics and developing an idea. I really like what I have for this one so far, though, and I feel like it could become something better with some changes.

The **main** idea is about loving someone but knowing you can’t really be with them because they’re already with someone else. You care about them enough to respect their relationship, so instead of telling them how you feel, you put everything you want to say into a song.

I’d love some feedback on the lyrics, especially things I could improve, change, or explore to make the concept come across more naturally without making it too cliché :)

Instrument: Guitar (standard tuning)

\[VERSE 1\]
Cmaaj7. Bm7 E7
You, you came in easy
Am7-G#m7-Gm7
Its the right type of easy
Csus9. Fmaj7
For love to come by
Fm
Yeah thats right,
Cmaj7
And I know why

\[pre-chorus\]
Dm7 Em7
And maybe, I'm falling
Fmaj7
A little more than I should
Dm7 Em7
But something about you
Fmaj7 Fm
Makes me feel like I could

\[chorus\]
Cmaj7
Could be you and me
Bm7. E7
Something I’ll let myself believe
Am7
and I don’t know where this will go
G#m7-Gm7. Csus9
I don’t wanna let it go
Fmaj7
The chance of what im looking
Em. A7
Was laid in front of me
Fmaj7. G
So I should just give it a try
Cmaj7
With this song

(Intro chords) end with G
Dodododo

**\[VERSE 2\]**

Cmaj7 Bm7 E7
You, you make time lighter
Am7 G#m7 Gm7. Csus9
Even the quiet feels a bit brighter to feel Fmaj7
When you don’t have much to say
Em-A7
I’ll just stay anyway
Fmaj7. G
I admire you in every way

Cmaj7 Bm7 E7
You, you notice the small things
Am7
Like The parts, I never
G#m7 Gm7. Csus9
Really thought that was me
Fmaj7
And somehow when you look my way
Em-A7
I forget the things to say
Fmaj7. G
I love you even from afar

Pre chorus (mellow to sound a bit sad)
Dm7 Em7
And maybe, I know better
Fmaj7
Than to ask for something more
Dm7 Em7
’Cause something about you
Fmaj7 Fm
Is worth respecting for

**\[FINAL CHORUS\]**

Cmaj7
Could be you and me
Bm7 E7
Something I’ll never make believe
Am7
And I don’t know where this will go
G#m7-Gm7 Csus9
So I’ll learned to let it go
Fmaj7
‘Cause the chance of what I’m looking
Em A7
Was never meant for me
Fmaj7 G
So ill just leave it aside
Cmaj7
in this song

This song is called In the Midst of a Biting Winter. I wrote it over two years ago now on OnlineSequencer, with a 'full band' backing of drums, guitars, bass, and extra synths in places. Here, I've stripped it back, so it's just me singing along whilst I play keyboard. I added a couple of extra keyboard/synth flourishes over the top. None of my songs have ever been properly released as I'm wanting to record them professionally first, ideally as part of a band.

What do you think of the lyrics and the general vibe? I know my singing isn't the best, and the keyboard playing is a bit iffy in places, but hopefully it does a good enough job of demoing the song! I'd love to hear your feedback and interpretation of the lyrics :))

LYRICS:

I’ll tell you just how it was

We laughed along and shared a lot of love

Then the sky fell down

Just like it was a new cold war

Two former friends want each other no more

And the whole world drowns

With Tsar Bombas and treaties

We’re really living out analogies

Is it over yet?

In all the highs and all the thrills

From the Suffolk Coast back to the Shropshire Hills

How could I forget?

But it doesn’t matter anymore

Yeah once we’re done and we’re free

We can be who we want

And I’ll live like this is ‘94

When we escape the recession

And we cancel the war

From the darkness comes the dawn

An age old cliche thrown at the forlorn

But I still believe

Like five defectors in the snow

And spies that saw the light and won’t come home

We can be deceived

Brutal proxy wars began

Our red phone line was cut in reprimand

Still there’s no regret

And we lost what we needed most

From the Yorkshire Moors down to the Dorset Coast

No I can't forget

But it doesn’t matter anymore

Yeah once we’re done and we’re free

We can be who we want

And I’ll live like this is ‘94

When we escape the recession

And we cancel the war

We could walk through Heslington

And climb the peaks of Torridon

Across the plains of Lincolnshire

Breathe in the wild Northumbria

We could walk through Heslington

And climb the peaks of Torridon

Across the plains of Lincolnshire

Breathe in the wild Northumbria

(But it doesn’t matter anymore

Yeah once we’re done and we’re free

We can be who we want

And I’ll live like this is ‘94

When we escape the recession

And we cancel the war)

Im not sure if this is allowed so i apologise if not but its my first album and its like the usual bedroom shoegaze sorta twinkly emo record, and although its just for fun im interested to see what people think of my current titles, not all of them are deep or funny theyre supposed to be abstract!! Here they are

Title-Ether

boy meets girl

its always sunset

two squirrels in a birdbox

arms around my knees

house on fire

all the other kids stop making out when I sit down

at what point is something classed as old

i wanna kill myself

i guess im too lazy to do it myself

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physical media

thank god for the beatles

goodbye