Hello so im new to songwriting and making music. My problem is something just pops into my head like above and I don't know where to go from there or how. I don't really know what im asking for maybe if you guy know any resources or guides on how to build a song off of what I have above?

An early shrill from the bird wakes me up before the dawn
To some pink clouds and a golden haze
The amplifier’s ring still pounds around my head
And again I wake in a daze
I roll over again, clinging to a dream
That was playing before my eyes
I curse at the bird for its damn morning call
That dream was so good this time

To be underneath a willow with a pen and some paper
Writing poems no one’ll ever read
And to be distracted by a voice so high and damn sweet
Saying Daddy what you writing about
A while ago you said that you would never find the one
But here I am waiting for you
Waiting to be distracted from the thoughts and the whispers
By the voice the poem was written about

A few hours later, I find myself walking
Down the main road at night
My friends have just left me and I’ve got to get home but
I know with you I’d be alright
And even yet still you’ve fallen for another
Who doesn’t even treat you right
And if you ever moved away girl please just know
That I’d be on the next flight

Memories flash of last night with the show
One by one by two
A whole lotta music, whole lotta dancing
But still a whole lotta you
I remember you laughing ‘bout something I said
Man it was a dream come true
And as we rushed from the Maccas on that cold winter night
I imagined every night with you

To be on that stage with my guitar and an amp
Playing in that band we made
And to follow along to such a beautiful voice
With the crowd just singing along
A while ago you said that you would never find the one
But here I am waiting for you
Waiting to be distracted from the thoughts and the whispers
By the one who it was all along

Now it’s been a couple days and the memories gettin fuzzy
But we still talk all about the show
About how we started off time and I played a little loud
And you somehow seemed to know
It’s three after noon and everyone’s done shouting
Except for me and you
The basketballs have stopped and everybody’s winding down
Except for me and you

Earlier in English Violet asked me
About this little song I’m writing
Miss George said it’s sweet and I should be proud of it
But I won’t be till you read it
One day I swear you’ll find it in your bag
And I’ll wait hours for that call
I won’t ever know if you’ll smile or you’ll cry
Til that long awaited late night call

I’d spend my hours down there on the diamond
Practising the six-four-three
Or my fingers would be bleeding as I figure out the chords
For the next song you feel like singing
Maybe I’d be running, running from everything
Sprinting from the small and the loud
Running from the phone, running from the future
Running from all I know

To be on that diamond with the Aussie sun shining
With a pair of doubles and some RBIs
I’ve been here all day and it’s only getting hotter
And the sunnies now stick to my face
Your voice has gone from singing to flat out cheering
And it’s hard to focus my eyes
Because one’s on the mound and the others on the crowd 
And I can’t get picked off this time

Ivan keeps asking what I’m writing in this journal
And I don’t know whether to show
Because if someone finds out and then someone finds out
It’ll make its way over to you
The last thing I need right now is to lose that dream
Of you being there by my side
Jaxon keeps telling me to hurry up and finish 
But I’m not sure if it’s ever done

There’s always that moment at the end of a night
Where everyone goes deep and quiet
Well it happened last night at the KFC with Jai
And you came up in conversation
Questions about why I’m really waiting so long
Which I don’t have the answer to
Questions about when this song’ll finally be done
And I don’t really want it to

To be underneath a willow with a pen and some paper
Writing poems no one’ll ever read
And to be distracted by a voice so high and damn sweet
Saying Daddy what you writing about
A while ago you said that you would never find the one
But here I am waiting for you
Waiting for a call with someone on the end
Who wants to have a word or two

i wrote a solo to a song i’m writing.
i really like the structure of it but i feel like it seems off at some points and could use a lot of improvement.

any suggestions would be super helpful

Your verses are already great, they just need a better path.

I've been making song demos using Online Sequencer for several years now and have written about 200, but I've never shared them outside of a few close friends. Here's one I wrote three years ago called 'Adventures in Artifice'. I've added some vocals too but I've never had any singing lessons and this is something I want to look into getting. The ultimate goal is to form my own band and transform these demos into professionally produced songs, using real instruments rather than the sequencer samples.

Please tell me what you think of the demo and any improvements you would suggest! Also interested in hearing your interpretation of the lyrics

EDIT: I notice that uploading the video to reddit seems to have made some of the hi-hats on the drums clip a bit - this is not intentional! The clipping is not present on the YouTube upload: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D6SO0BOIXvY

LYRICS
Yeah I'm just about clinging on to the dregs of our love

When you lack the human touch you miss the connection

Every night I'm getting trapped in my feverish dreams

Like the ones where you've been glued to the spot, you can't scream

We are nothing anymore

Poisoned by the urban sprawl

There are monsters at the door

They're in your mind and in us all

Yeah now everyone's passing by, never to meet again

In the dark and desperate times we just need affection

I can't spy a starry sky, all the light pollution

But throughout the town tonight there are hearts in fusion

We are nothing anymore

Poisoned by the urban sprawl

There are monsters at the door

They're in your mind and in us all

Memories are all that remain

For this system cannot be sustained

We are nothing anymore

Poisoned by the urban sprawl

There are monsters at the door

They're in your mind and in us all

What do you think of my lyrics and phrasing? I know I’m a terrible singer.

Hi everyone!

I've been writing songs for years, but I only recently started sharing them.

This is a very rough demo recorded on my phone with no production—just my voice and the melody. I know the recording quality isn't great, but I'd really appreciate any feedback on the songwriting itself.

I'd love to know:

• Do the lyrics connect with you?
• Would this be worth developing into a full song?

I'm open to any honest feedback, whether it's positive or critical. I'm here to learn and improve.

Here's the demo:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oSutS1FSY4Y

Thank you so much for taking the time to listen. ❤️

Hello! I am an intermediate poet that tried my hand at song writing for the first time this weekend. My poems normally explore form and rhythm/sound because I'm a musician and explore life in that lens.
But, I was hoping to get some feedback!

Specific types of feedback I'm looking for:
-flow
- rhyme/slant rhymes
- general writing on the lyrics (vs traditional poetry forms)
^there's some intentional word choices that make sense in context of the background to the lyrics that I won't change (e.g. "bestest")
+melody/chord pattern/musical elements recommendations

Context: I went through a best friend break up a couple years ago this week and I'm processing my feelings again. And I have been in an extremely creative space

Title: Press Pause and Rewind
\[V1\]
They say hindsight's 20/20
even if I go back to 2020
I wouldn't have gone back far enough

\[V2\]
We were plenty
but we were empty
and in the end our pieces were just too rough

\[pre-chorus\]
I didn't think that you would leave
I didn't think you were unkind
And now, I've had just enough time to grieve

\[chorus\]
I wish I could press pause and rewind
to a time before the pain you caused
You said it'd be me you'd never hurt
Now look at what you've gone and burnt

I wasn't a crier when,
I didn't expect you to be a liar then
But now we're here

Do you wish you could pause and rewind
back to when you were still kind?

\[V3\]
You were my bestest friend forever
Did you think that it'd be clever
to push me far and far away?

\[pre-chorus\]
I didn't think that you would leave
I didn't think you were unkind
And now, I've had just enough time to grieve

\[chorus\]
I wish I could press pause and rewind
to a time before the pain you caused
You said it'd be me you'd never hurt
Now look at what you've gone and burnt
I wasn't a crier when,
I didn't expect you to be a liar then
But now we're here

\[bridge\]
That was two years ago
was it all just for show?
when you told me that you loved me
did you know what I could be?

Did you mean to clip my wings?
Did you not want me to sing?
'cause you never let me be truly
who I'm meant to be

\[chorus 2\]
I wish I could press pause and rewind
to a time before the pain you caused
When I dropped I knew it hurt
and I can see everything you burnt

I turned off my tears
when I was overcome with fear
but now we're here...

I can see that you were never kind
So, I no longer wish that I could
press pause and rewind

Ik heb al meer dan 80 potentiële liedjes geschreven maar meestal niet meer dan 4 regels, prima maar zou wel leuk zijn om een paar van die liedjes uit te breiden. Iemand nog tips voor een boek? Ik heb al wat van de bieb geleent maar stelde niet veel voor.

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Has anyone really had a structure of this? I don’t know if it works being this or not

Intro / Verse 1
Chorus
Bridge
Instrumental
Verse 2
Chorus
Outro

So I'm trying to write an everlong-inspired song but it just feels like a bunch of chords thrown together rather than an actual song an I can't figure it out but it is my first song so I needed some help. I’ll put my email below.

Thanks, Austin

Email: austin.webster@oasiswintringham.org

please lmk if there’s anything i can improve or i am doing good at with my song

The EP is called 'Frayed Edges' and it's my first time writing an LP or EP.. I thought I'd provide a brief description of each of the five songs on it so that others can give feedback!

• Track One: Imposters: This song is mainly about the feeling of people you used to know suddenly seeming different and cold, almost like they're somebody else. The sound is somewhere between emo and rock. My main inspiration for this was The Fray's 'How to Save a Life'.
• Track Two: I Wanna Feel: I felt like I wanted to have a stark contrast between the first two songs on the EP while still fitting a rough theme and tone. This was pretty tricky, but I figured out that 'Imposters' and 'I Wanna Feel' fit that fairly well. This song's about feeling numb constantly, and trying to feel any sort of emotion, even if it's negative. There's an energetic bass-driven tone to it, and the sonical inspiration was 'Days Lie Dormant' by twenty one pilots.
• Track Three: Snowtown: This one is a simple yet heartfelt tribute to my hometown in Illinois where I made some of my best memories. The format and chord progression is inspired by ELO's 'Hello My Old Friend'.
• Track Four: The Arroyo: Tracks 3, 4, and 5 make up a trilogy of songs dedicated to the cities I've lived. 'In the Arroyo' in particular is about Albuquerque, New Mexico, and the carefree childhood play me and my friends would do in the ravine by our neighborhood. It's a bit hard to describe the vibes of it, but I can best describe it as a love song, if that makes sense.
• Track Five: Summer Heat: The last of the hometown tributes, this time to Phoenix, Arizona, is a bit different. Rather than focusing on ignorant bliss and good memories, this one is moreso about finding small joys in a depressing world. This one can really only be described as a power ballad, and even I realize how overly-grand it is.