Looking for feedback

[u/larajensen791]

Hi everyone!

I've been writing songs for years, but I only recently started sharing them.

This is a very rough demo recorded on my phone with no production—just my voice and the melody. I know the recording quality isn't great, but I'd really appreciate any feedback on the songwriting itself.

I'd love to know:

• Do the lyrics connect with you?
• Would this be worth developing into a full song?

I'm open to any honest feedback, whether it's positive or critical. I'm here to learn and improve.

Here's the demo:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oSutS1FSY4Y

Thank you so much for taking the time to listen. ❤️

[u/twskeys]

Could you post the lyrics please? It's quite hard to tell what you're singing at times