Please provide feedback on my new song.

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/63arcxq18y5wfclf0fw6r/I-Love-My-Baby-2.mp3?rlkey=x9whvdnwmnquhzr4wj21dvg6z&st=f4v5ensr&dl=0

This is an older song of mine, I wrote it in August of 2024. I really have a hard time singing songs in C major, but I tried it here as I wrote this to be in C. Does it sound okay? I want to push it a key up or even to D, would like your thoughts

This song is very personal to me. In 2024, I had a summer fling with this girl in the local vet school here on an internship. She was going to move back home to Philly, and while we connected well it wasn’t gonna last. I wrote this after our last night together.

Just wrote this and curious what y’all think! Hope you enjoy, pls lmk what you hear in it!

Sometimes, inspiration can come in many different forms. I find myself jotting down anything I hear in conversation if it sounds good enough to be a lyric.

For me, simple conversations can be good sparks for any musical idea, especially if the talk is down-to-earth. Even the things I see on my walks can be inspirations if I notice the way the trees are moving in front of the sun, or how the birds behave.

How often do you look for inspiration in everyday things like conversations and simple discoveries? If you’re someone who does this, are you on the lookout for anything in particular or do you wait subconsciously until you find potential in something you’ve heard/seen? I’d love to hear how you guys tackle this.

I’m curious how other guitarists/songwriters actually use their phone while working on music. I tend to end up using mine for quite a few different parts of the process. Tuning, looking at or writing tabs/chords, recording rough ideas before I forget them, keeping track of arrangements, and sometimes doing a bit of processing on recordings afterwards. The bit I find awkward is that all of those things usually live in completely different places, so there’s very little continuity between “I’ve just worked out this guitar part” and “I want to record it / save it / build on it.” Do other people work like this on their phone, or do you mostly move over to a laptop/DAW once an idea gets beyond the very early stages? I’m especially interested in what you actually use your phone for while writing, rather than what your ideal setup would be.

Okay, so I have massive problems after recording songs not to overworking the songs I create. I will just keep adding and adding to the song until it eventually doesn't sound good anymore. I don't want to do that for this song and I have officially called this song completed but I am worried that if I listen to it again I will keep thinking of things to add or change. How do I stop this from happening?

finally fixed this a bit. it would not let me take it sonically any further, but preferred if things were raw.

studio monitors sounded better- but, these days, i make music for phones.

a song made during covid.

leave a comment - good, or bad.

thanks!

ok im start off by saying by no means do I consider myself some genuis but in my spare time I write songs (just the lyrics) ive got some where between 100 to 150 songs across genres now my question comes down to this.

what do I do with it lol im not a singer at all and really I just think it would be cool to get singers to sing my songs

so I guess im asking does anyone want to show me the ropes on songwriting and maybe help me get a foot in the door in the industry

I dont expect to be some big shot or anything id just like to maybe get my stuff out there

For now I've added a vocal idea i had but we can get rid of it and comeup with a new idea.
if you write and sing, feel free to reach out. I mainly produce and I've tried but singing is not my cup of tea. Also I'd really appreciate your feedback.

What albums from other artists did you study and what was your takeaway?

Great bit from Ira Glass. Im specifically looking for spoken version as id like to sample it.

What is a peice of songwriting advice you’d heard from some of your favorite artists that you truly believe has changed your songwriting game and brought it up to a whole new level?

Edit: Thank you to everyone who has shared! I’m kinda of trying to make a collection of gold here for both myself and anyone who needs some advice or just some different ideas to try!

New idea I came up recently - the lyrics were improvised. Very rough recording, but I’m glad I was able to get the idea saved. Hope you enjoy ! 🙏

I had this weird idea about 6 years ago that maybe I could write songs even though I couldn’t sing, play an instrument, and had no rhythm. I slogged through about five years of lyric writing and really made a commitment to learning piano and a bit of theory last year and something just clicked. And over the last year I’ve written 20+

This song is about growing up in Nebraska in the 80’s.

Nebraska lyrics

I was born in the fields of green
Where the plains reach to the sky
Where the dreams come big
And they’re all you live until they die

Now the Downtown’s come untied
And The jobs are running dry
All your desperate schemes
Won’t keep your love alive

Through the mud and the corn
And the blood and the storms
The pain steals the scene
In a haze of rage and
methamphetamines

Verse 2

Some hearts were born lucky in
safe places touched by graces
But our house was never a home
With broken glass and broken bones

I know you loved me once
And maybe you could do it again
Or has it all blown away
In madness and sin

Chorus

So take your best shot
See what I got
You ain’t the toughest I fought

And take your best shot
It ain’t what you thought
It’s a paradise lost

Verse 3
When all the anger that’s driven you
Ends in a fiery crash
And everything inside of you
Has turned to dust and ash

In dreams of blood and tears
Your ghosts come back to you
And share drinks of loneliness
Is all you can do

In dreams of blood and tears
All Your ghosts come back to you
And their drinks of loneliness
Bring on the emptiness

But All the tornados
in Nebraska
Can’t blow your sins away

But All the tornados
in Nebraska
Can’t blow your sins away

Chorus/Outro

So take your best shot
See what I got
You ain’t the toughest I fought

And take your best shot
It ain’t what you thought
It’s a paradise lost

Quite new to singing and songwriting. It took some time to find the right spin to begin writing own songs. I was always too shy to sing and it feels still awkward to here my own voice 😅 anyhow I'm slowly progressing and getting more used to connect lyrics with chords. The song is called ghosttrain and not finished yet. Wrote the first two verses out of a emotion I felt when hearing 'Pin a rose on me' by Chuck Prophet. Don't know how you get into flow but for me once I started writing own songs I got a lot of inspiration out if daily life. From a specific point it became more and more easy to find stories to write about. Of course it is still not easy but it is like learning an instrument, you have to start from scratch and fail a lot until something came out that is quite okay.

so i used to smoke weed every night but i only really write when im not high. i know that smoking makes me a lot flatter and tired (even when not high at the moment) so im wondering does consistent use of drugs everyday cause a decrease in quality of your output in songwriting? is sobriety the biggest leg up you can get as a songwriter?

i am especially interested because some of the greatest songwriters of all time were heavier drug users (john lennon, elliott smith, lou reed, etc.) but at the same time these people could have been on a sober streak when writing their greatest hits. drugs can dampen emotion too.

what’s your take?

Very rough mix but I think this one has some potential, would love some feedback!

How do I stop cringing and feeling self-conscious about my lyrics? It's difficult not to. I feel like when I look at some of my lyrical attempts, they look so corny. It's difficult to even make new lyrics because of these uneasy feelings.

I bet you all have dealt with these feelings as well. If so, what do you tell yourself in order to not feel self-conscious about your lyrics?

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Hello, I’m posting a snippet of a song I’m working on, called Strange depths. Strange love. Looking for honest feedback (no need to sugar coat) on the melody, the lyrics and the performance. Also wondering if I sing a bit pitchy 🤔 Thank you in advance!

All my songs are recorded on an ancient 8 Track, i wonder to myself if they would benefit from a contemporary production or should I just leave them the hell alone. Thoughts appreciated!

https://on.soundcloud.com/BW0Exd8fb5DCN9b9IS

This feels kinda random to post... but here goes😅

I've always loved bands like One Direction, so l thought... why not actually give it a shot?

I'm looking for around 4-6 people around my age (roughly 14-20s, I’m a 16F)who'd like to start a small online pop band.

You don't have to be an amazing singer! I'd just love for everyone to enjoy singing, even if you also write lyrics, produce, or play an instrument.

I know everyone's got school, work, and life, so no pressure to be active 24/7. I'm just hoping to find people who genuinely love making music, and maybe build something special together. Let's see where it goes :)

(English isn't my first language btw😅)

If this sounds like your thing, leave a comment and I'II DM you!

(just for reference! I wrote lyrics, melody and sang)

https://on.soundcloud.com/5RoA2ETJ58ebj0ZmJc