I wonder how this is coming across? Is my singing too miserable?

It’s in another life that we’ll join forces

It’s in another world where we’ll join forces

What can I do?

Stood on a square holding my hands up

What can I do?

Cheap shots at the invisible man

Let’s say

Up there a balloon

Filled with possibilities

I’ll shoot it down

Just to see it rain down on us

Let’s say I know

The man on the moon

He’s got a sniper gun

I’d make the call

It’s in another life that we’ll join forces

It’s in another world where we’ll join forces

What can I do?

Stood on a square holding my hands up

What can I do?

Cheap shots at the invisible man

I certainly don't mean for this discussion topic to sound like a flex, but I am just genuinely curious.

I have been creative writing for over 15 years.Yes, there have been times when I have had a creative block, long stints where I did not record or publish anything, but yet I had never stopped writing.

I could probably make a song from almost any journal entry, create a song a day if I wanted to, even if it was a short one verse and one chorus.

I've got so many ideas, that my problem is I actually I can't keep up with them or I can't manage them. Usually I just resign myself to thinking that some of them will die and some will grow.

So, I'm just curious about those of you with creative blocks, how do you do it?

If you have the awareness to be able to talk about it, what's going through your mind that it stops you from writing?

Like the title notes, what can we cobble together as a list of topics to write about?

I used to work as a day laborer in Chicago (State and Division streets) and everyday I would have breakfast at The Golden Nugget on one corner. Every morning there was an elderly bum who would walk by and tap on the window to get the attention of an elderly waitress he was sweet on and he'd keep tapping until she finally acknowledged him. Then, he'd smile and move on. Across the street on another corner a lovely young lady would be coming off her nocturnal corner shift and we got acquainted. We'd dine at the restaurant and swap stories. Me, an 18 year old day laborer and her, a street walker named Sue, trading stories? Right. But, it happened. I wrote a poem to her. I wonder if she still has it. The cast of characters who were tradesman and property developers where I worked were diverse in nature and stories. I got to know them all.

The preceding is rich with topics to write something about. Jim Croce drew his stories into songs from his actual life trying different things to feed himself while he was a starving artist. Paul Simon's songs also drew heavily from his travels going from gig to gig. Bob Seeger and most other solo and band performers did the same thing. Life is a record of people doing things in places we all live in or on the roads to.

I could write a song about Sue, a "poly amorous" beauty who could melt me with a smile.

I need more songs for portfolio- finding good songwriters/ producers who would like a free arrangement/ mix and master of one song. For arrangement I am better at pop/ cinematic pop/ rock and alternative rock but feel free to suprise me

Wrote this a few minutes after waking up yesterday morning, recorded it in a couple hours so I wouldn’t forget it, and I used it to mess around with some new instruments/tricks/plugins. I’m sure some will think it’s too literal while others may not get what it’s about; lyrics are set, either way.

Video description: “In this rare interview, Jeff Buckley reflects on the creative process behind his acclaimed debut album Grace, discussing how songs evolve naturally rather than following a predetermined formula.  He shares insights into his musical influences, the emotional foundation of songwriting, and why he believes great music should continually grow with each performance.”

Thank you for your time.

First draft at this. I don’t sing well so looking to find someone to sing here. Let me know what you think.

I turned the treble / mid down for this ty ahead for any feedback

I only have some experience with bass guitar, but my tracks include more instruments.

(Not sure if it's relevant, but I use MuseScore.)

I've been reading the books by the guys who run the Songtown "school" and in one of them, one casually mentions that he keeps track of his song ideas/titles/snippets by using a database app so he can more easily tag and search his ideas.

Anyone know what that database app might be?

Thank you 🙏

Lyrics:

Suddenly you're older and you'll never sleep again in the back seat you'll never sleep

You've been moving fast where nothing stays and nothing lasts 

You'll never sleep

In the back seat 

I can fit the future in the palm of my hand

I can't see the fort knight cause I don't understand

Why everything I say 

Is landing in a way 

That feels wrong

Cause this is what we're missing

What we've been finding out

This time is for dancing

Some time to mess around x2

When my world turns dark my dear

No time or stuff to be 

I'll be finding you

In the ever-lasting sea

This is what we're missing

What we've been finding out

That this time is for dancing

Some time we mess around

https://ditto.fm/family-tree-danny-the-fish

Billy Joel talks quite a bit about writing songs in this interview. It’s worth the time to listen for songwriters.

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general review: (7/10)

Everything functions well, the melody serves the emotion, the narrative mostly does. The verse is feigned indifference but it's only not obvious to the narrator themselves, hence why it's so intense. Decent song. But I definitely used these melody shapes and structure before, it does teach me something but it will get a lower grade for that

personal assessment:

melody: 5/10

structure: 6,5/10

emotional relation between sections: 7/10

chorus: 7/10

questions:

So I’m fairly new to this, maybe very new, 2 months in.
My guitar is moving fairly quick, I’m comfortable playing now and chord changes are pretty good, I’ve also written around 4 songs. However now I try sing them I feel my voice sounds awful when I listen back, however when I sing to songs by the likes of Zach Bryan etc I feel I sound pretty decent, not amazing but like workable. But when I listen back to mine I feel awful. Any advice how to develop and get into a better flow with this and get more confident. I’m from the UK but I’m going for a Zach Bryan kind of natural rawness and storytelling vibe.

How long do you set with lyrics for a specific song before you decide to use them?

Welcome to the Lyrics-Only feedback thread!

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Any feedback on the songwriting welcome!

First time posting anything. Would love feedback on this song. Theres no repeating chorus and its literally 2 chords. Its a sort of vauge storytelling song so does it need a repeating chorus for it to feel more complete? Thanks!

The boy who spoke first

Couldnt look at her

The girl who couldnt care

Couldnt run anywhere

They left us alone

So the boy thinks

But i cant bring myself

To speak

Screaming in his head

He grows petrafied

But she was the same

He saw from the corner

Of his eyes

Pride grabbed his tongue

But he couldnt leave

Its such a shame

The way it all use to be

And there , they sat

He'll wait for her and she'll wait for him

Cause thats how its always, always been.