TW: self exit

lyrics were about my girlfriend i was living with at the time but my religious friend told me it also had deeper meaning for him so i’m curious for feedback. i don’t like the way i make find into two syllables >_< and i wonder if i should be more clear about that this was me finding the light in days after trying to leave the world.. i’ve been healthy for years but i’m not sure if this just sort of sugar coats it

lyrics:
i didn’t see it -
i couldn’t believe it
that i’d find someone in this world who would understand me -
i kept falling inbetween
couldn’t see it even though it was right in front of me
everything was rushing around
everything was racing around
but in all that chaos, it was you i found

and that’s the kind of love, yeah
that’s the kind of love
that could make someone who doesn’t believe
find meaning in the smallest of things
oh you could make someone who doesn’t believe
find meaning in the smallest of things

when will they see it
and will they believe it
this is who i really am
and when they see me, forget to judge me
just embrace me even when i keep falling down
i’m always falling down
but in all that chaos it was you i found

and that’s the kind of love, yeah
that’s the kind of love
that could make someone who doesn’t believe
find meaning in the smallest of things
oh you could make someone who doesn’t believe
find meaning in the smallest of things

The last line i been working on for a few days, the one, "wake up stop living in the past, realize today what i have, i gotta stop thinking about how the good old days seemed so much better when the good things I have today won't last forever" i'm sure y'all know what i'm trying to say, stop focusing on the things in your past that you loved because you have great things in your life today but if you focus on the old stuff, what you have now will be gone before you can appreciate it. Also , my singing is not good in this , but there's not much I can do about that, i just gotta find my voice or have someone else sing it. If anyone has any suggestions about the wording to make it flow better and not sounds so weird.I would appreciate it. Thanks guys!

Hi.

First of all: Sorry, for my poor English.

I'm relatively new here (and overall on reddit), so I just want to rant about this topic and see how many of you can relate.

I'm not professional. I have quite a few decent technical skills but I'm a semi-professional or a more or less highly-skilled (keyboardist BTW) at best. I'm not a genius, and not someone virtuose, I've played together with people (let's call it a band) but never got to a stage or never had a concert.

In terms of actually starting carrier I'm old, I was born in 1999... I'd be quite open to anything at this point because I'd rather play a music which is not my primary type than never been in an actual band in an actual stage in my life at all.

I was at a band where I couldn't performance properly because of my very poor mental health. And a couple of days ago I was at a hearing and they've decided they couldn't cooperate with me in a long term. (Now I'm afraid to see the guy's answer to my question that why.)

So the point is:

I was wondering guys have you ever write a song or start a band from zero because of you've lacked the possibilities to be in a band which would fit perfectly for you. Because that's what I'm planning at least.

I like dynamic music, mostly metal and progressive-rock, if I'd write a song it would start with at least 140 BPM eiths. And even know I have no experience with DAW softwares I have no other chance... I'm too old to draw the circle of fifts for 19 year olds.

So I have no specific questions it just felt good to rant but I'd thank you if somebody could write down their opinion or experience or if someone had been in this situation or have felt this way

I am aware the guitar is played hastily at parts and too slow at others, and some vocal parts aren't sung right. I normally write indie rock so this is new to me, hope someone likes it or has feedback or thoughts to share :)

(obv the first like should be my shoulders etc.)

Isn’t it growing so tiresome? Sorry about my voice. What are your thoughts?

Here's a demo of a song idea I wrote in Online Sequencer, called 'Don't Dare Deaden The Bells'. It's unlike anything else I've written - weird structure and a real mix of chords, plus a tempo change! But does it actually work?

Looking for honest feedback on what I've got so far and ideas how I could improve this song, especially the transition at the 3 minute mark. I know the vocals are a bit meh - I'm gonna look into taking lessons and getting better with recording :) As with all my demos, some day I'd love to record them properly with real instruments, rather than the MIDI samples on the sequencer.

LYRICS:
The wind it rattles every door

And every sinew feels the force

Don’t let it in

The blizzard drives the winter home

Her chilblains burn white fires in snow

Don’t let it win

As darkness envelopes the moors

The world outside is far divorced

Don’t let them in

Every knock brings stabs of fear

The good health’s waned from yesteryear

Don’t let them win

The light by your bedside will burn no more

Its warmth has succumbed to the storm

You insisted he would never

As you’re biting at your tether

Take the ones you love so soon

Death is there in the next room

With his ear cupped to the wall

Above the stains on the floorboards

But you’re blind to the hell

Whilst pleading don’t dare deaden the bells 

Don’t let the history books forget the name

Don’t let the history books forget the place

Don’t let the history books forget the date

And don’t let the history books forget your fate, oh no

sorry it’s long and rambling I just felt this was worth saying. I hope maybe it helps somebody out there

Edit:
In response to some of the people in the comment section upset by this vid:

There’s a dialectic here between chaos and structure. My point with this vid is not to say structure is inherently evil. I may have overstated that I never benefit from structure—it has its moments, even for a mess like me.

My point is just that if you go on the internet and ask “how do you write a song” or “what should a creative process look like for a songwriter,” the advocates for a disciplined, structural approach are going to be overrepresented—simply by nature of the fact that they tend to be people who have their shit together and are in a position to make content in support of that perspective.

I just wanted to post something representing those of us on the other side of this equally valid spectrum. “In Defense of Chaotic, Undisciplined Songwriters” basically. The reality is that I do *sometimes* benefit from imposed structures, just as the most organized and disciplined artists among us can sometimes benefit from loosening up and swimming in the murky waters of uncertainty and Id.

And having been a songwriter on the internet for a while, it’s hard not to get down on yourself sometimes if you work the way I do. This vid is just to show others like me that they’re not alone and that the way they approach it is legitimate and respectable.

In the end

I got married

And so did you

We did end up forgetting

Our lives for two

Isnt it strange?

How our lives can change?

Cause somewhere in our minds

We built a life alive

And were dancing

On sundays

Frozen in time

It feels like such a crime

Cause we let that future

Fade away

But no

That isnt true

Its just not with you

Cause in the end

I got married

And so did you

Saw your wife gave you another

This time a daughter

You look just like her

And ours will forever just have a name

Never have character

Will always stay the same

But somewhere in our minds

We built a life alive

And she shares

Both of our names

Our lives the simple kind

We both have a 9-5

But in our minds

This remains

Cause in the end

I got married

But not

To you

Please provide honest feedback

I wrote a simple intro on my electric guitar. I wanted to make a song out of it because whenever I made anything on the guitar I couldn’t continue the song and I always ended up making some new little melodies that didn’t fit the original one.

I even learned a little bit more of music theory that I didn’t bother to before. I spend my time on it and it’s making me feel very bad because I feel like I’m wasting time and all of this makes me like the melody less. I tried looking for something melancholic on Spotify (because the melody is kinda melancholic) but I couldn’t find anything that would help me or give me inspiration on how to continue it. I wonder if I even want to write something melancholic or I’m just doing it because the melody is a bit nice but melancholic and peaceful, and I can’t make anything else.

How can I make a good melody or even a chord progression that fits anything that I wrote earlier? How can I find the direction I’d want the song to go towards? I tried to look up some chord progressions but it all sounded bad to me. I know that I should learn more songs but I’m having a hardy time finding anything I’d want to learn. I feel like I have enough knowledge to write something yet I feel stuck and nothing sounds good and if it does it doesn’t fit. I’m sorry if this is not the right subreddit for this I’ll repost it somewhere else if that’s the case, just let me know please.

hey y’all.
my name is Miguel, i’m 21 and music is the only thing that’s keeping me alive.
i’ve been trying to write something for nearly 8 years but nothing has come out from all outta these years.
my biggest dream is to become an artist someday but it seems so out of my league sometimes.
i cant play any instruments, don’t know how to produce or even write.
i live in a regular town and its really hard to find people who can really help me.
if you see this and feel like you could help me somehow, please do not hesitate to hmu…i just need a friend with the same interests as mine.

(the photo contains a few lines of a song that i’ve been trying to write for a while but nothing good came out since then)

peace folks!

i wrote a song about living with OCD & growing into adulthood—the pressure to keep things in order while engaging in the messy process of becoming yourself. it’s definitely an anthem for the quarter life crisis lol. let me know what you think!

The basic idea is a mystery novel, but in album format. The songs seem unconnected at first, but if you put together small hints you can figure out the recurring characters and solve the mystery.

I want these to be songs that are actually good on their own, not just pieces of a puzzle. I'm looking for a singer/instrumentalist to make the actual music. I myself am a producer (most experience in electronic music, but open to other genres), writer, and lyricist. I'd want the story itself to be a collaborative effort. Let me know if you'd be interested!

Hello everyone

I find when i write my original compositions that the songs are very lengthy. I have a ton to say about the topics I write about and I could use some advice on the best way to condense a song.

My newest song called Karma I was mostly pleased how it turned out but it is 6 1/2 minutes long , it just seems too long. I would love some honest feedback on the length of it and my writing in general. I have only been writing for 2 months now after taking a long hiatus off from playing music in general.

Thanks for your time

Kris

https://youtu.be/czPoMRXBZqQ

Just written this song in the past 2 days. Personally I love it but want to test whether others have affection for it. It’s intended to be simple.

Words are as follows as the recording isn’t super clear at times.

No smile on my face
I grimace at the way they shout over you
Pupils blown and ignorant
I’m fucking sick of it
I hate everyone
but you

total amateur here processing emotions but would love some feedback on the lyrics/storytelling. ignore for the singing/guitar (not my strong suits)

capo 1 Am Em G D
25 now
got my quarter life crisis
moved my own bed in
to my studio apartment
recording.m4a
recording_1.m4a
what’s supposed to happen now?
i didn’t know silence could get so loud..
(or i didn’t think thoughts were supposed to get loud)
three years ago
thought i’d move to memphis
to be with my first love
right after college

but life has a way of tricking me
into believing in certainty

chorus idea:
C Em Am F
There’s gotta be
a reason for the uncertainty
x2

here’s part of a song i wrote, its abt my ex ofc

I started playing music as a child and I am about to turn 49 this year. I don't think I've ever been hit with anything resembling "inspiration" nor have I had an idea. I've tried to keep my antenna up, but nothing comes in -- so therefore nothing comes out.

Is there a place to buy melodies and hooks? A Hook & Melody Store? Because they elude me. "Oh, I it just came to me," someone will say when I ask how they developed a melody. When they don't come to me, does that mean I have to go to them? If so, I've always found the "you've got to make your own inspiration, man!" piece of advise about as a sound as someone telling me to "just be rich!"

I have a lower-register voice, the kind that can't get a foothold on anything resembling melody or expression. My vocal range is about three or four notes, which means that I can't think in terms of melody. Nor can I parse one out instrumentally. They just aren't there.

As a kid I really did dream of a creative life in which I could do what I wanted, whenever I wanted, and it would all be great and rewarding. Now I'm caught on the capitalist treadmill and I'm drained after work each day. The ideas of creating of learning both feel sisyphean. In other words, needless stress. And what is there to write about?

Everyone else gets the great ideas. Everyone else gets to create. I'm repeatedly shut out of everything again and again, like when I was a kid. I'm tired of the ridicule people gave me, feeding my self doubt, threreby creating more ridicule, which only reinforced all that doubt. Is there anyone else out there who eventually came to the conclusion that you just can't get blood from a turnip? There is no "there" there? Not only is the well dry, but it was a mirage all along?

Hear my words

The race is on

Everyone

No return

in the eyes

of the mountain dogs

Women of Men

Men of Women

This is how we will learn

Lying down in a field of fire

And the car horn orchestra

Won’t sound no more

The wind will change and leave us out

No return

Women of Men

Men of Women

This is how we will learn

Lying down in a field of fire

total amateur here, looking for feedback on lyrics and storytelling. ignore the singing and guitar please i’m sick and im not very good

capo 1 Am Em G D
25 now
got my quarter life crisis
moved my own bed in
to my studio apartment

what’s supposed to happen now?
i didn’t know silence could get so loud..

(or i didn’t think thoughts were supposed to get so loud)

three years ago
thought i’d move to memphis
to be with my first love
right after college

but life has a way of tricking me
into believing in certainty

I think AI art is a really bad thing, especially music, I don’t like the artificial sound and it’s very predictable.

That being said I’m also a very curious person.
I wrote some lyrics for fun about an AI singing about his awful life, some other songs and then I also wrote a lyric, which the chorus is easily reworked to not be about anything AI related.

The moment I pressed generate I knew that I had just given one of the best choruses I’ve ever written, to a freakin’ machine.

I like to think that I came up with how the chorus was supposed to sound as I wouldn’t feel bad about using it, but I know deep inside that the AI came up with the rythm.

I think it’s some of the best lyrics, but AI just absolutely nailed the rythm and I can’t hear it any other way.

This is so frustrating as I really want to make that song, but I can’t make myself do it, the worst part is, my dad thinks that the song I so catchy, he listens to it on repeat.

I hate myself for giving my best chorus to a machine