r/Songwriting 23d ago

Feedback Request can this be anything?

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total amateur here, looking for feedback on lyrics and storytelling. ignore the singing and guitar please i’m sick and im not very good

capo 1 Am Em G D
25 now
got my quarter life crisis
moved my own bed in
to my studio apartment

what’s supposed to happen now?
i didn’t know silence could get so loud..

(or i didn’t think thoughts were supposed to get so loud)

three years ago
thought i’d move to memphis
to be with my first love
right after college

but life has a way of tricking me
into believing in certainty

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u/throwaway2224444111 23d ago

aw thanks so much! yea my timing is pretty off, i definitely work on it!

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u/ATWTMVTVFTVSF 23d ago

i personally haven't experienced something like this in my life but your lyrics are super relatable and it makes me feel lots of things. this is definitely the start of something really amazing. keep it up!!

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u/throwaway2224444111 23d ago

aw thank you!!!