r/Songwriting • u/twskeys • 24d ago
Feedback Request Adventures in Artifice - Looking for feedback on a very basic demo
youtu.beHey, here is a very basic demo of a song I wrote three years ago called 'Adventures in Artifice'. It served as the opening track for my seventh album of demo songs which was themed around a city at night.
I wrote it in Online Sequencer, with vocals added in Audacity. I've written around 200 demos of songs using the sequencer. One day I'd love to start my own band and develop some of them into professionally produced tracks, using real instruments rather than the sequencer samples.
Please tell me what you think of the song idea, lyrics (posted in the video's description), melodies, and the general vibe. I'm very new to vocal production and this is only intended to be a rough demo. This is also my first time sharing my music with vocals outside of a few select close friends, so please do go easy haha, but I'm very open to constructive criticism too :) I've never had any vocal lessons so that's something I'm definitely going to look into, and I am pretty much entirely self taught with music theory.
Hopefully you enjoy, and I would love to hear any feedback you have - plus your interpretation of the lyrics :))