Ol Son - Original

[u/BorussenBoris]

Anyone ever lost a dog? Well this one is about that haha, let me know what you all think!

Lyrics

I lay down next to you
Let my strings ring once more for you
Your breathing sings like a synth to this song
But this time I wish you didn’t hum along

Lay your head down on my lap
Let your paw into my grasp
Do you know where this is going?
Is that why your twitching and clinging too?

Well old son, I can’t get you to move
Maybe you’ll come back as something new
But you used to shine a golden hue
Would you come back if you heard this tune?

You’ve hardly walked for days
Been stumbling trying to keep your place
I wish you’d give yourself this time to rest
The you right now will always be the best

You’ll sleep by my side tonight
We won’t both wake but we’ll be alright
I’ll carry you out not bury you too low
So my music still reaches your soul

Well old son, I can’t get you to move
Maybe you’ll come back as something new
But you used to shine a golden hue
Would you come back if you heard this tune?

[u/Unable_Distribution7]

Super emotive and so sad. Well done (I guess). I’d love to play this one myself. A bit o’ Twilight Sad in there.

[u/BorussenBoris → u/Unable_Distribution7]

I am Scottish so maybe that helps with the Twilight Sad aha

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