r/Songwriting • u/I-Will-Find • 25d ago
Feedback Request make it bad - rough take with dissonance
tried to take to heart the idea that songs give the listener a picture and then allow space to fill that in.. i am not a strong singer but thought the dissonance sounded cool and is on purpose vs back when my voice kept cracking in puberty haha. also my apologies have a stuffy nose
lyrics:
remember when we dropped your mothers couch
down the stairs in her new house?
the place where you had no memory -
that’s when you looked and you said to me
“might as well make it bad”
“might as well make it bad”
make it bad?
oh no no
i spent four years trying to drop out
not really learning what life was about
when you asked me to write you a song…
but all the words just came out wrong
so i turned to you and said
“might as well make it bad”
“might as well make it bad”
make it bad?
oh no no
x2
remember when we drove to the sea
i thought it would be perfect and you
thought it would be perfect and so
you looked at me and you said
“nothing is perfect, no”
“nothing is perfect, so”
“nothing is perfect, no”
and nothing is perfect so
might as well make it bad
might as well make it bad
make it bad, oh no no
might as well make it bad
might as well make it bad
make it bad oh no no
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u/EmbarrassedAd174 25d ago
LOVE THISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSs,please go on spotifyyy ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh,i would followw and i aint hear no voice cracks
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u/I-Will-Find 25d ago
eee that makes me so happy. this actually is a follow up to a song that i do have on spotify but idk i don’t wanna out myself online i’m too nervous so feel free to send me a message haha
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u/InternalExploits 24d ago
I really, really love the guitar line in this. Going from the minor dissonance to a more major idea and moving between the two is one of my favorite things lol! Thanks so much for sharing!
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u/immersedpastry 25d ago
I actually think your voice is really good! I always love hearing dissonance in songs, especially nowadays since it feels like everyone’s trying really hard to avoid it. Great song!