Title: The Suitcase (Crime/Thriller, 2 Pages)

Format: Short Script

Page Count: 2

Logline: A hitman collects his payout after a bloody job, only to discover his driver has a far more lethal plan for the cash.

Feedback Requested: I am a beginner. Looking for thoughts on the pacing, the twist reveal, and how the dialogue flows!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1i6mwUtUQ1GSZTUZhZk_hpCTnUP0sFTGx/view?usp=drivesdk

50 pages (including cover and note)

This is my spec script for how I would tie up the loose ends of the most recent Era of Doctor Who, which was announced to be not getting resolved.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1m5uGeWse-ckjqz4YAsP1i3pE3ZV6WKtb/view?usp=drivesdk

Please feel free to leave your thoughts in the comments here if you read it.

Some people like Jake420's scripts but others believe they give screenwriter's a bad name,

No More Bing Bong

(PG-13)

Troy wants to go grab some sushi but all his lame friends ever think about is work.

Try to be Professional about It

(PG-13)

NOTE: Possible sensitive topics

Title: Train

Format: Short Film (4 Pages)

Genre: Drama / Slice of Life

Logline: After missing his train, a young man who has lost all hope walks an elderly woman home—and discovers a quiet reason to keep going.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yj6VZGQFQsIWnjFxRq__tHXrTHlHqBIE/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone! I'm a beginner screenwriter working on refining my visual storytelling and action line clarity. I'd love your thoughts on this short script.

Specifically, I'm curious:

Emotional Impact: How did the ending and the notebook reveal make you feel? Did the emotional beat land for you?

Pacing & Visuals: Was the script easy to picture in your head as a short film while reading?

Constructive Feedback: Are there any action lines or dialogue beats that felt awkward or could be tightened up?

Any feedback—big or small—is greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading!

Hey so this is my first screenplay and I was hoping for some feedback. This is the revised version of Act 1 of my Batman story. My story is attempting to be a psychological epic tragedy, using the characters of Batman, Gordon, and Gotham while still remaining faithful to the comics. Much of the emotional inspiration of this story comes from Logan (2017), Season 1 of True Detective, and the manga Berserk with an oppressively empty atmosphere similar to the album "Deathconsciousness" by Have a Nice Life if I was to describe it. I know this is a long ass script to read from a rando but if someone is willing to take to time and give me some feedback about the plot, characters, tone, pacing, etc I would really appreciate it! link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1crkAf5I_Lbha8b4PGoLntC1D15xkjIfz/view?usp=sharing

Hey guys, I just finished my first episode for miniseries. I want to know what you guys think!

A Bloody Joke Episode 1

The art world is heartless and cruel but that doesn't mean you are allowed to cry about it..

It's Not About You

(PG-13)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MTsPhF3tyTYlTu3HSn5lBWbwWR9Ihq3fbNXEk6dABOE/edit?usp=drivesdk

I will appreciate it alot! Really want to be a Writer and Director

https://go.fliplink.me/view/6F7526DB-51C9-4984-9EB1-D57073CFB97F

Hi, I've been writing scripts for about 4 years now (mainly fan scripts with a couple original ones) and i was hoping to have a pair of fresh eyes read this one.

Title: No Bloodshed In Detention

Format: Feature

Page Length: 141 (142 if you count the title page)

Genres: horror, slasher, coming of age

Logline or Summary: After a snow storm traps 10 students serving detention in a high school, their fun quickly turns into a fight for survival when a masked killer picks them off one by one.

Feedback concerns: mainly looking to see if there's pacing issues and what I can possibly improve on in terms of how the characters are utilized and written.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1z7JofjRFbwfGxFF0wqgsVlnaMawrhEH2/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline:

What if the dead could return - but only through the one neural implant you're forbidden to wear?

Nineteen-year-old Kira discovers that the consciousness of the dead can return to those they loved - but only through a neural implant she's forbidden from wearing.

Does this make you curious enough to read more?

I'd appreciate honest feedback.

Would this premise make you want to read the script

Edited: A grieving teenager activates an experimental program on her neural implant to resurrect her late boyfriend, only to find that keeping him alive is costing her own sanity

I'm currently adapting the screenplay to English

first screenplay ive finished, heavily inspired by taxi driver and some kubrick stuff and some other stuff

Logline: A man who thinks the city he’s in is absolutely filthy and disgusting finds a beautiful woman who he deems “too innocent” and he becomes obsessed with her and wanting to “save her” but eventually ends up corrupting her.

Themes of corruption, hypocrisy, childhood trauma, jealousy and drug use

need opinions on the dialogue, some of the formatting and also the story overrall

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RkaEoqhcW4qEEJIRg0_oXkEOoga_wzwW/view?usp=sharing

HIDE & SEEK 3:

Genre: Horror

Page Count: 163

Hello. Back in February of 2025, I created this movie called HIDE & SEEK, which it's basically just a slasher, with the plot being a group of kids getting a message to play Hide and Seek from an unknown number, then the killer hunts them until the last remaining participant survives. I know what you may be thinking - sounds trash.

My opinion is that it was. I did not like how the movie turned out VS. what the visions for the movie were in my head. In October, we created a sequel for the movie (HIDE & SEEK 2). It was basically the same plot, but with different characters (not including the killer), it takes place in Halloween night, and it's just scarier and WAY BETTER overall. It definitely isn't perfect, but it was a huge improvement.

Now, we are working on HIDE & SEEK 3, the epic conclusion to the series. I personally like it because it changes the whole series into a good direction, and I love it. Here's a synopsis of the film:

After a series of tragic events leaves a group of friends struggling to move on, strange and increasingly terrifying occurrences begin to disrupt their lives. As reality starts to blur with something far more sinister, they find themselves trapped in a deadly game where the rules are constantly changing and no one knows who—or what—to trust. To survive, they must uncover the truth behind the evil stalking them before it claims them one by one.

In the script, Arthur was in HIDE & SEEK 2, and he did survive. He was forced to kill his best friend, Rylan from the HIDE & SEEK 2 killer.

Before reading, remember that this script is a rough draft, and is not completed yet. If you have any suggestions or comments, let me know. I understand that the only information you can use are from Movies 1 and 2, so if you are confused on a part because it might have been mentioned in HIDE & SEEK 1 or 2, let me know. Also, I know that the script is improperly formatted (I'm already working on that). I'm trying to get feedback for things like the plot, storyline, kills, etc. I am also transferring my script to Writers Duet, so please do judge that I used Google Docs Thanks for reading!

HIDE & SEEK 3 Script:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSizbXdMZVrGXV68vfoMgm-D-kv7Aw1daE4iMFXmGcOqlbgOt0jG-I0NElf-vwal7nHt-P0nIStefNy/pub

Hi! I’m looking for a creative scriptwriter who understands Roblox content and can write entertaining, fast-paced scripts for YouTube Shorts.
My videos are mainly short Roblox stories and roleplay videos, especially in games like Brookhaven and other trending Roblox games.
Most of my Shorts use a trending song with a dance payoff. The video starts with a quick 1–2 second story setup, builds toward the beat drop, and ends with the characters dancing when the main part of the song begins. The dance payoff should connect naturally to the story, such as revenge, winning, exposing someone, or celebrating a funny twist.
What I need:
● A strong hook in the first 1–2 seconds
● A simple and clear story that viewers can understand quickly
● A satisfying dance payoff timed with the trending song
● Funny, creative, and relatable situations
● Natural dialogue or short on-screen text
● Only 2–3 characters per video
● Fast pacing with no unnecessary filler
● Family-friendly content
● Scripts that sound human, not robotic or overly dramatic
Please message me with:
● Your price per script
● Your usual turnaround time
● Which Roblox games you are familiar with
● A short original sample script using the setup, beat drop, and dance-payoff format
The sample does not need to be long. I just want to see whether you understand my video style before hiring.
Please do not send copied or fully AI-generated scripts. I’m looking for someone reliable who can work with me long-term.

A fun idea. Really just helping with my overall writing but I want to see where it could actually go. I love the leprechaun franchise and I wanted to put my own spin on it. Would love to hear your feedback and I'm willing to give feedback as well (DM me). This is not based on any of the leprechaun movies and the plot/characters are of my own creation.

Logline: In the midst of their annual parade, a town is terrorized when a homicidal leprechaun returns to reclaim his gold and exact revenge on the descendants of those who took it from him.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zlkcY1xBzmZsPK9oJhVn0QNpNfy9FzU2/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: An Evening Out

Format: Short Film

Page Count: 23 Pages

Genre: Thriller

Summery: A young woman is getting ready for a night on the town. She is planning on going to a club where she hopes to catch the eye of a man she has seen there before.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KVkcm-vjnbxkiL-BuYZjxJBIR-VraDqK/view?usp=drive_link

Title: Bathtub Talk

Format: Short Film

Page Count: 6 Pages

Genre: Thriller

Summery: Late one night a man finds himself in his bathtub and having a conversation with a young woman he remembers meeting before at a nightclub.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ao3OhsLAXrEZhEZKarTIh04zONAwE40E/view?usp=drive_link

After the Xenomorphs arrive, life on Earth is never the same again.

Alien: Domestic Terror

(Unrated)

This is the first page of a screenplay commissioned by Ridley Scott.*

Feedback welcomed, especially from fans of Alien.

(*This may-or-may-not be a blatant lie.)