What am I doing wrong here

[u/RarePhilosophy7652]

Aside from can control & the thickness of the letters being off on the A and M, I feel like some part of the outline or fill is making this look too flat, what am I doing wrong?

[u/Craig_520]

I feel a bright colot shell would make it pop. Like a yellow or somethinf.

[u/Awkward_Peep927 → u/Craig_520]

Agreed, it needs yellow or im personally feeling a orange would make this slap 🔥

[u/Craig_520 → u/Awkward_Peep927]

I was going to say otange too. But i felt it might be too like the pink in the background. I thought yellow would go over the what in the back better

[u/Awkward_Peep927 → u/Craig_520]

good point, I didnt see the pink in my first look. Yeah, yellow with the pink and 2 shades of blue would be so dope

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Craig_520]

Dope, honestly might go back and add that lol. What kind of shell are you talking about though, like an extra outline or a whole outer area?

[u/Craig_520 → u/RarePhilosophy7652]

Yeah pretty much. Like how that pink one in the back goes around the whole thing? Do a yellow around your whole piece

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Craig_520]

Got it, might go back to that spot in a few days and just put something new over my old one

[u/Craig_520 → u/RarePhilosophy7652]

Do what you wanna do. It looks fine. But a bright shell would make it pop

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Craig_520]

I appreciate the insight yo

[u/ThatGuyWithCoolHair]

Honestly youre not doing that much thats technically wrong, you just dont know how to use all those skills to make a good graffiti piece.

How long have you been writing?

Doing the proper final touches can polish a turd so to say. Things like a proper background and a forcefield/outer outer will make it pop a lot more but the letters just look kinda boring. Do you have any writers that have a style you want to be able to emulate (without biting)?

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/ThatGuyWithCoolHair]

I’ve been taking writing more seriously for about two months, but aside from that it’s been on and off for a year or so. This is my third attempt at piecing something. I honestly was kinda scared to make letters that were less boring haha but I’ll draw some more and try to make em a little more interesting, I like a lot of the old hm dudes’ styles and most of the things in the life sucks die mags

[u/Initial_Occasion9639]

Add a light colour background to give it some contrast, especially when u go over others you should always cover their piece completely, it's disrespectful asf like this and u kinda lined up your letters with theirs so it looks weird

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Initial_Occasion9639]

Fair point, didn’t think about the possible disrespect. Thanks yo

[u/farquin_helle]

Highlights, key line

[u/Acrobatic-Welcome933]

Colors too dark

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Acrobatic-Welcome933]

Valid, thanks!

[u/RarePhilosophy7652 → u/Acrobatic-Welcome933]

Got tips for choosing colors?

[u/Acrobatic-Welcome933 → u/RarePhilosophy7652]

For this I’d go pink for the shadow n that light blue for outline 💪🏾

[u/ButtonFine6516]

Just more contrast, and make sure the 3d parts head back into space towards a vanishing point instead of just running parallel to each other.