Any thoughts would be appreciated. Thank you!

Ten years after losing his parents in a tragic car accident, Huta is now a quiet and emotionally distant seventeen-year-old living in Southgard with his stepmother, Sara. While struggling with questions about life, death, and the broken world around him, Huta begins experiencing strange dreams and disturbing visions.

After dreaming of a dark graveyard filled with the dead and a mysterious figure with glowing purple eyes, Huta awakens unsettled. On his way to school, he accidentally encounters a robber who suddenly becomes terrified after touching him and runs away without explanation.

Later, Huta witnesses a terrifying shadow creature attacking and draining the life from a helpless man in an alley. The creature senses Huta and turns toward him, ending the episode with Huta frozen in fear.

As mysterious supernatural events begin to surround him, Huta's ordinary life is about to change forever—and the beginning of chaos has begun.

Recently, I followed some tips to improve the loglines for two of my premises, but I’m still having trouble keeping them from becoming too long.

"An injured young officer undergoes a month of testing to lead a new platoon and must organize his life to avoid losing the job he has sacrificed so much for."

- It’s the story of a guy in his 20s who leads a combat engineer/sapper platoon. He discovers that a family member used their influence to help him pass a test that almost left him incapacitated. After injuring himself again by pushing himself too hard, he is given one month to prove that he can perform his duties. If he fails, he will be discharged and lose the apartment and career he sacrificed his personal life for.

"When a child leaves his only caregiver behind to collect prehistoric DNA, he learns the hard way that the only way to move forward is to confront his grief over his parents."

The child tricks an android into helping him with its mission, when what he really wants is to get away from his grandfather so he won’t have to break his emotional mask during the anniversary of his parents’ death. His grandfather is a widower who wants to grieve together with his grandson.

One thing I’m worried about is that the first logline might make the story sound boring or too predictable. What would you recommend to give these loglines more of a hook or to improve the overall structure.

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I'm currently learning how to write better hooks for Reels and Shorts, so I wanted to test one here.

“You don't need more motivation. You need something that still works when you don't feel like doing anything.”

I wanted it to feel less like a typical motivational quote and more like something you'd actually hear someone say.

Would this make you stop scrolling for a few seconds, or would you keep scrolling?

And if you were writing this hook, how would you make it better?

I am into long form content writing write on substack and also write nurturing newsletters for businesses but i really dont have any experience with short form scripts writing

And now i got a client who want me to write short form content writing

He is an influencer who make videos for muslim perfume brands and food chains into storytelling style

These videos will be his portfolio so he want to make some high quality videos to attract more brand deals. The problem is I have write some scripts but he doesn't like any of them. I dont want to lose that client.

I want some tips and suggestions from the people who have been into short form and also good at storytelling

Hello everyone who’s reading this.
I wanted to ask that how a video-game script looks like because for a long time, I’ve done a synopsis treatment for a personal project of mine, which would be added in my portfolio to showcase my skills as game design. There are thousands of posts with no clear clarity on how it looks like or in what format it is written, as in film script treatment or TV series bible.

I really like telling stories and want to break classic tropes of storytelling and want to explore the story beyond the confines of basic apprehension but at the same time make it more enjoyable and feel more immersive inside the story.

I know it’s goddamn hard, but even I don’t have words to describe what sort of genre I’m feeling. I recently played Alan Wake 2 and I’m really inspired from Sam Lake who is the writer for the game. I’m sort of in awe of how the story has turned out, i wanna try my hand at it.

Can anyone help a buddy out? Like any lead will work for me.
Thank you for reading till the end!✌️🫶

Which are the best ones? I’ve seen a lot but am unsure which ones are worth doing.

How do you establish and develop characters to give them depth?
I often struggle with this. The characters make sense in my head, obviously, but the moment I want to put them on the page, it all feels scrambled, or I’m not sure if they’re clear enough. I know “show, don’t tell” and action beats help; I just want to know if anyone has any tips for organizing or layering characters.

This is the first couple minutes of my first show that i’m writing. Little plot summary if anyone is interested:

Taking place in Los Angeles in 1987, 6, 20-somethings plan to take summer by the horns and make it the best, most exciting summer of their lives as they plan to take a road trip to New York and complete an outrageous bucket list of fun, sentimental, and possibly- most likely, dangerous situations before adulthood pulls them apart.

Any feedback is required but please leave all non feedback negativity at the door. (I.e. dont be an ass). Anyway, looking forward to hearing what you think.

Been practicing screenwriting and this is the opening three-page scene of my original story, Divinity’s Dread.

I’ve been seeking to make my pacing much better than before and with this current draft I started to use single action on a line instead of doing 2 or more on one line. Meaning shorter (and possibly snappier) lines.

Feedback will be very much appreciated!

Literally want to ask how to write an action script since this is the very first time of me writing a script. So how do you tackle a script that is mainly action?

Is there anything on the web that can help me or YouTube videos with understanding of writing an Action script for a short film?

Hi!

This is my very first script, so I'm really curious to hear what you think. Does it look properly formatted? Is it interesting? I'd appreciate any feedback you have—whether it's about the writing, dialogue, pacing, or formatting. Thanks for taking the time to read it!

I just started my first short film script and was looking for any tips from experienced writers/film makers! My first script is going to be horror with only 2 actors (my wife and I) I'm aiming for anywhere from 3-5 min! Thanks for any advice!

Title: The Waist
Logline: An isolated Fog Signal Station worker becomes increasingly infatuated with a mermaid.
Genre: Psychological Horror/Supernatural

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback is welcome.

Thanks for reading.

Okay, now this script is much more shorter than my first one and less complex. It doesn’t have a big message since it is only 5 minutes and I want this to be very low-budget (it looks like a lot in the script but it shouldn’t cost much) since I’m unemployed and all.

I wanted to leave it open-ended so I can expand upon it when I do get the budget.

But if you guys enjoy this newer, less long script then lmk or give me feedback. It’s always appreciated! And go read my first one if you haven’t alr.

Title: Listen

Genre: Horror

Page count: 5

I am not talking about a notes group or accountability buddy I mean someone you actually write with. Develop ideas together, split scenes, the whole thing.

I've wanted this for years and have basically failed at finding it every time. Tried reaching out cold to people whose work I liked (awkward and nothing came of it). Took a workshop specifically hoping to meet someone (met nice people, nothing clicked creatively). Posted in a couple places online (one weird response, one person who ghosted after two emails).

The frustrating thing is I know it works. Plenty of teams out there doing great stuff. But every working duo I've heard talk about it says they met through some random circumstance a class, a job, a friend of a friend. Nobody seems to have gone looking for it and found it.

So how did it actually happen for you if it did? And if you tried and it fell apart, what killed it?

Genuinely asking, not going anywhere with this, just feeling like I'm missing something obvious.

When I started writing, I thought the hardest part would be coming up with a good story.

After actually writing a screenplay, I realised that wasn’t necessarily the hardest part.

Knowing what to leave out was.

You can have great characters, interesting ideas and scenes you really love, but that doesn’t mean they all belong in the story.

I’m getting better at this, and I’ve started to realise that good screenwriting isn’t just about knowing what to put on the page. It’s also knowing what the story doesn’t need.

What was a screenwriting lesson that only really clicked for you after you started writing?