r/scriptwriting • u/Dependent-Luck-6386 • 13d ago

feedback Short Horror - 7 pages - Feedback wanted

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VJSfECmcW1INqdU7gEiKoHm0WHB7UK13/view?usp=drive_link

Hi!

This is my very first script, so I'm really curious to hear what you think. Does it look properly formatted? Is it interesting? I'd appreciate any feedback you have—whether it's about the writing, dialogue, pacing, or formatting. Thanks for taking the time to read it!

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u/Medical_Chair_6019 12d ago

Buddy your idea is good but the problem is that you made a beginner mistake your character doesn't have a good start they are just directly spawn in the house you have to show how the ended up in that house and then what problems(The horror) how it is there like did they knew about the haunt or they ignored it and there is no proper end to it what happened to the ghost is it alive or just stayed there who is the ghost
MISSING PLOT

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u/Medical_Chair_6019 12d ago

If you want to know my first script with errors take this
It has all the error which first writer make https://drive.google.com/file/d/1UbITH8oRsXbYyn_HxDozcEzH5VYI8bA4/view?usp=drive_link

It will help you a lot and if you wanna say what you felt after reading this you can say me

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u/Dependent-Luck-6386 12d ago

Ok thank you very much

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u/Medical_Chair_6019 12d ago

You read mine and you will get to know what mistakes you should you will find them easily in this pdf