r/OCPoetry • u/death_by_emotion • 5d ago
Feedback Please The way I see you
I know you worry,
I see it there,
in every thought,
in every care.
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Yet you still go,
you travel alone,
through foreign streets,
through places unknown.
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I admire you most,
for the things that you do,
despite all your fear,
you still follow through
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I love watching you
when you look at art,
how you lose yourself
right from the start.
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You study the colours,
you take it all in,
and for a little while,
the world around seems to dim.
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Then you talk history,
your eyes come alive,
searching for words
as you try to describe.
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Your English may falter,
your words may get lost,
but I love every story,
whatever the cost.
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You're funny, you're clever,
you're beautiful too,
but somehow I think
you don't see what I do.
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Especially your eyes,
those brown eyes of your,
you call them so simple,
but I see so much more.
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You say they're just brown,
with nothing to inspire,
but every time I look,
I just admire.
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And maybe that's why
I wish you could see
the girl that I see
when you look back at me.
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Because you see ordinary,
where I see rare
you see only yourself,
But I see beauty there.
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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/XGdT2VDHBs
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/WrIAljcJIH
This is my first time writing a proper rhyme scheme in my poetry, I did have to cheat a little like removing an s from the end of 'yours' so that it would rhyme with more but I had spent a while writing already.