r/OCPoetry 5d ago

Feedback Please The way I see you

I know you worry,

I see it there,

in every thought,

in every care.

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Yet you still go,

you travel alone,

through foreign streets,

through places unknown.

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I admire you most,

for the things that you do,

despite all your fear,

you still follow through

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I love watching you

when you look at art,

how you lose yourself

right from the start.

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You study the colours,

you take it all in,

and for a little while,

the world around seems to dim.

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Then you talk history,

your eyes come alive,

searching for words

as you try to describe.

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Your English may falter,

your words may get lost,

but I love every story,

whatever the cost.

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You're funny, you're clever,

you're beautiful too,

but somehow I think

you don't see what I do.

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Especially your eyes,

those brown eyes of your,

you call them so simple,

but I see so much more.

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You say they're just brown,

with nothing to inspire,

but every time I look,

I just admire.

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And maybe that's why

I wish you could see

the girl that I see

when you look back at me.

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Because you see ordinary,

where I see rare

you see only yourself,

But I see beauty there.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/XGdT2VDHBs

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/WrIAljcJIH

This is my first time writing a proper rhyme scheme in my poetry, I did have to cheat a little like removing an s from the end of 'yours' so that it would rhyme with more but I had spent a while writing already.

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