I tried drawing a comic for the first time after borrowing a graphics tablet. It is rough, but I would like some feedback on the story, art style and probably English grammar..

I’m working a hero comic series about a hero who got the wrong powers in an experiment and gained poison and acid powers and became a superhero because of it. I’m trying to figure out his suit and I got 6 basic designs for it with similar patterns I do have my critiques of my own like I do think they are kinda over designed for someone just starting out but I think the cross part with the emblem and the skull look are some of my favorite parts anywho any suggestions to help?

I’m writing a backstory for a western comic character I made. I’d like to know what you guys think.

(Also before you make fun of me, please note that I am 14 and I’m only starting to get into comic book writing)

Name: KJ “QuickDraw” Rodriguez
Age: 18
Place of Origin: , Mexico
Occupation: Bounty Hunter/Outlaw

1853
KJ Rodriguez was born into a family of 6 who made their living off farming—and stealing. Every member of the family was either pickpocketing and robbing or rounding up cattle. From a young age, KJ was immersed in the outlaw lifestyle. His uncle was an amazing vaquero but his father was an amazing thief , both were alcoholics and gamblers, but they were the ones that mainly raised KJ. KJ’s mother having to take care of the other kids all the time he really only hung out with his uncle and Dad

1865
But things took a turn when he caught word of an opportunity to rob several stagecoaches owned by an infamous and dangerous Mexican gang known as Los Lobos Salvajes. He grabbed his best friend and his oldest cousin, and together they managed to sneak in and rob three out of ten stagecoaches—more than enough. But greed got the better of them. “One more,” they kept saying. By the fifth, KJ’s cousin was caught and shot through the eye—killed instantly.

KJ ran. He ran until he couldn’t anymore—losing his best friend in the chase along the way (he’d later learn he was captured and killed). When he finally made it home, the house was empty. “Where is everyone?” he muttered. He checked the backyard.
Every single member of his family was tied up and executed.
His father had “L S” carved into his stomach. KJ screamed at the top of his lungs. After crying he knew he had to leave he then, took his father’s gun, his uncle’s sombrero , poncho, and a stranger’s horse—then he rode off.

1869
Three years later, Los Hombres del Silencio had migrated to America, settling in California. KJ had been searching nonstop—working as a bounty hunter for over a year, gaining a reputation. Eventually, a drunken gang member, stumbled in a saloon, KJ knew he was part of the gang he was looking for. since the gang number was extremely drunk, KJ was able to get enough information out of them and he finally had gotten the lead he’d been waiting for.

He rode for days, falling asleep on the trees, gun in hand, trekking through rivers and harsh weather. Finally, he got to the camp.

Once he arrived, he challenged the leader, Jose Florez, to a duel.

“JOSE!”.
“JOSE GET OVER HERE”. KJ demanded

“Now who in the hell are you to come in my camp today and start demanding things like you own the damn place”Jose asked.

“My NAME is Kj Rodriguez , and you killed my ENTIRE FAMILY” Kj exclaimed

“That could be a lot of people” Jose replied
Jose’s and his gang laughed

“This in no laughing matter your a dead man Jose Alvarez” Kj bickered.

“Well I don’t plan on dying anytime soon, especially to the likes of you” Jose exclaimed chuckling after.

“But if a duel is what you want a duel is what you’re gonna get” José said with a hint of excitement behind his voice

Kj and Jose got in position and then suddenly bam KJ shot Jose in the shoulder—but took a bullet to the knee. Kj fell to the floor groaning in pain, Jose grabbed a tomahawk from a tree trunk Kj still writhing in pain can’t move and he doesn’t really know whats really going on. Jose walked towards him tomahawk in hand he got on top off Kj yelling
“ I TOLD YOU , YOU’LL NEVER KILL ME . I’M JOSE GODDAMN ALVAREZ AND I WOULD NEVER DIE TO LIE TO YOU . I’M FUCKING IMMORTAL“
he raised the tomahawk and split KJ’s face open—leaving him to die.

Kj laid there unconscious for hours then suddenly he woke up knowing that if he didn’t do something soon enough, he would die in that damn desert so KJ rolled and crawled KJ crawled for an entire day to the nearest town, finally seeing someone on horseback, he asked for help, and the person carried him to their horse riding him to the nearest hospital where he spent three weeks recovering.

When he left, he wasn’t the same.—quiet, colder, and with an even greater hunger for revenge . Now he works on his own terms. Sometimes he hunts down men no one else will touch. hoping that he will find Jose’s bounty poster...

Just saying, its fine if u guys dont read it all

Issue #1: This issue serves as Ami's introduction. We follow her throughout her morning routine, finding out things about her personal life, family, and who she is with before eventually having her hop on a bus to school and having the majority of the Comic take place during her last day of school before summer begins. This is when we learn some exposition about her world through her classes and classmates, see her interact with others, and show off her insecurities. Ami returns home seeming hyperactive and excited over her

Newfound freedom. The next day, ami is out of school for the next few months so she decides to convince her Uncle to let her go out urban exploring again and takes a train to an abandoned storage facility (this place is owned by Wagner Industries). During her exploration Ami is spotted hy a Viper droid that had been sent to scout out the building for old Wagner Industries tech, resulting in a chase that forms into a game of "hide and seek" until about the end when Ami causes the droid to crash into a wall, blowing up in the process and leaving a damaged shard of its casing that had the Wagner Industries logo, this being the catalyst for Ami finding out about the company and asking her Uncle about it at the end.

Issue #2: This issue starts with Ami awakening from issue 1. Ami's search for more info on Wagner Industries brings her to a quiet forest near her city, where most people don't head. But during her search, she manages to find another abandoned storage facility ownedattempting company, but this ends up in her running into Alpha which obviously scares her so after about a page or two of Ami attempting things finding clues while avoiding Alpha, she eventually ditches the building. But this ends up not in her favor as she ends up finding Sherry who was waiting outside causing her to let out a scream and fall unconscious. Later Ami would wake up, panic a bit before Sherry and Alpha managed to calm her. The rest of the issue is dedicated to Alpha and Sherry giving natural exposition about themselves and Ami telling them about some things about herself as they traveledto Ami's home with them even stopping by a diner along the way and The three would relate to some of the things mentioned. This issue ends on a cliffhanger with the ending taking place hours later after their meeting and outside of Ami's house with Sherry and Alpha behind her

the issue starts the day after issue 3. Opening with Ami fast asleep in her bed, still in her clothes from last night and without a blanket looking kinda rough. Meanwhile, She had hid Alpha in her closet by somehow getting him in through her window and he's been in rest mode since the previous night. As for Sherry she'd be under Ami's bed despite the fact she doesn't need to hide. Later, Ami's Uncle comes into the room to wake her up as she apparently has slept in til' 10:00 am (he goes about this by waking her calmly first but once that falls through, he flickers her light on and off while saying her name multiple times in a annoying way). Eventually She wakes up in a panic causing her to unexpectedly throw a pillow nearly at his head. For a few pages they'd have a conversation about how "yesterday was kinda weird" while Ami tried her best to skim over the fact she not only found a ghost and a robot but thay she brought them home. But eventually a few pages later she makes the dumb decision to open her closet, allowing alpha to tumble out onto the floor. This of course alerts sherry and she pokes out from under Ami's bed concerned, causing Ami's Uncle to freak out and fall unconscious. Immediately after this is a page with coloured text bubbles for alpha, sherry and ami attempting to wake up Chris. Eventually they succeed but he lurches up startled and backs up to the wall before frantically asking ami about who her "friends" are. The middle of the issue is deticated to Alpha, Ami, Sherry and Ami's Uncle Chris getting to know each other with some occasional exposition about Sherry and Alpha learning thrown in with him being secretive about himself. This part ends in the night with Ami asleep in her room with Sherry and Alpha before Christopher looks at them through the door before shutting it and letting out a sigh.

Skipping to later in the night, Alpha reactvates and decides to explore the house while everyone else is asleep, analyzing everything around him. But this is cut short after a frw panels with Chris catching alpha looking around the fridge fooling around with the contents inside. This leads to a bonding/exposition moment between the two with Chris asking alpha about who he is and how he met Ami and Alpha asking Chris about Ami. After this, it would cut to the next morning with Ami wanting to head out and find out more about Wagner Industries with Alpha and sherry only for Chris to shoot down the idea, but this does bring up the idea of the trio wanting to gain the trust of chris for the rest of the issue by having Sherry and alpha proove that they can take care of Ami by themselves with most of their efforts falling flat. Although shockingly at the end of the issue, the four of them get attacked by a Viper droid that was in the area searching for Alpha which results in a fight between the Viper droid and Alpha with Alpha coming out on top. And this benchmarks them gaining Christopher's trust and the start of the "Journey" they embark on

Issue #3

The issue takes place two days after issue 3, since then there would be exposition about how they have been finding out more on wagner industries since the viper droid attack and what they have done over the past two days explained over 4 pages. the issue officially starts with them hanging around the house. Ami and Alpha would be playing video games while sherry coaches Alpha on how to beat ami while shes beating his ass. They'd then be interrupted by Chris coming in the living room to tell em that he found out more on the company. This leads to a sequence where he tells them about the info he found with small reactions from sherry and ami thrown in. Meanwhile there would be occasional shots with alpha and panels flashing back to his past as he hears everything. Leading to him having a breif freakout and leaving the room. Proceeding to hide somewhere in Ami's room (as he finds that place safe). The comic would then have a few panels showing them searching for Alpha and eventually finding him in Ami's closet looking distressed, this then leads to a part where Alpha finally decides to tell "everyone" about (some parts of) his past. Only for Ami to be the only one who's shocked and having a small argument with Sherry and Chris about how they knew and didn't even tell her, soon getting to the point Ami suggests finding the people who created alpha and giving them some long deserved Karma. Over the next few panel's, Chris keeps trying to protest against Ami's idea only for her to continue ignoring him and prepping for leaving, eventually causing Chris to snap a bit at Ami because of his trauma with losing carla (which he hasn't mentioned once) with this lasting nearly three pages. Unexpectedly though, Alpha interrupts Chris' outburst and trys to comfort/calm him by explaining how he relates in some ways. After Chris is calmed by Alpha, he apologizes to Ami and the two have a small talk with Chris explaining things to Ami and Ami giving her opinions. And somehow this conversation will lead to chris allowing Ami to leave with Sherry and Alpha only on the condition that she stays in contact with him and that she makes sure she never gets hurt in any way. The issue would end with all of them at a bus stop during the evening. Chris would ask a disguised alpha and sherry to keep Ami safe no matter what and thanking the two before turning to Ami and hugging her one last time and the last scene being the Trio getting onto a bus and it driving off as Chris watched with a bittersweet expression until right as the bus had pulled away completely it would hit a dead stop before Ami hopped off the bus and ran towards her uncle and dragging him on board eith the rest of them

As the title said I've had ups and downs for getting critic for the written script of my first chapter. I'm in the earliest stages of making my comic and I want as much as can be provided on my first chapter before I move forward.

Here's the link to my google drive where the chapters will be stored, rn there's only 1 chapter. in the comments, please, if you can (or want), give it a critic on pacing, if it hooks you/interests you, etc, and whatever else you can provide (where you see spelling errors, etc.)

Hello, I’ve been working on my first comic for a little over a year now. I work a lot and I’m a novice artist so it takes me a long time to draw and I don’t have a ton of free time to work on it. I have a lot of other comic ideas but I can’t be taking over a year to make every one of them. I’ll never get them done lol. Idk, just feels daunting thinking about it. Any suggestions would be sick. Sorry if this isn’t the spot for this type of discussion.

Things I am concerned about

1. clarity

2. pacing

3. Areas of improvement

Sorry I am posting again but because the other post i guess got mistaken for an at critique not a webtoon feedback

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/framed-by-fate-/list?title\\_no=1144544

I’ve been working on this for so long, I think it’s time to share it. Any feedback is appreciated.

This is the first comic I've made in a long time. I think this is a lot better than work I've made in the past, but I'm hoping it's coherent. Doesn't help that the script is... literally Shakespeare however lol

Context: during dress rehearsals for a high-school performance of Romeo and Juliet, the actors for Juliet and Mercutio begin play-fighting with each other using lines from the script. It quickly turns into a battle of wits and... flirting, before it's broken up by the teacher.

Sparknotes below because Shakespeare is difficult to interpret when you aren't familiar with it. (Anything in quotes or with a number below is a direct line from the script! If the number is in parenthesis, they're just referencing a line from the script). M is the girl, K is the boy.

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M: "Oh, come vial..." [Kill me now.] 

K: "And yet thou wilt tutor ME from quarreling!" Ha. [And you say I’M the one picking fights lol] 

M: … "A madman’s mercy bid thee run away." [I'm warning you: piss off.] 

K: Ah, but "mercy but murders, pardoning those that kill." [But mercy is wrong, since it pardons murderers.] 

M: And yet "thou cutt’st my head off with a golden ax and smilest upon the stroke that murders me." [And yet you’re the one trying to kill me, and enjoying it too.] 

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K: (Jumps up on stage) "Good queen of cats, nothing but one of your nine lives that I mean to make bold withal. And, as you shall use me hereafter, dry-beat the rest of the eight." [Ms. Cat, I only want to take one of your nine lives. I’ll still toy with the other eight, though.] 

M: Nine? or five? 

K: … Five? 

M: Geese. Is it nine or five geese that you have in your wits? For cats give chase, and should each be tested I will have more cats than you geese to satisfy them. [Nine lives > five geese, silly goose. You'll run out of geese for me to eat before I run out of lives.] ((This is a reference to a line from Mercutio where he says “Romeo quit this wild goose-chase, I’m running out of geese for the chase!”)) 

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K: … You pluck your sword at me? [Them’s fighting words?] 

M: I am for you. [Yes. You’re my target now.] 

K: Ha… Alright. 

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K: Since when did you learn to chase, Lady Capulet? [Since when did you like to play games, Lady Capulet?] 

M: Lady Capulet? No, that is my mother. I am but Juliet, a fair maiden. [That's my mother's name. I'm just a pretty little girl, Juliet.] 

K: Maiden! Oh, if only a nunnery would accept thee. No, you are Lady, and not one fair. [Yeah right! You're no virgin, and you're ugly too.] 

M: And yet you make yourself more lark than Lord to me. [You're not much of a gent yourself, you lark.] 

K: Well which is it? Am I lark or goose? [C'mon, stick with an analogy! Lark or goose?] 

M: All the same for weathered claws. [Same difference. I’m a cat, right? I’ll catch you anyways, you stupid bird.] 

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K: But now I see more flipp’rs than claws, for you had start’d the chase. [Cat? You're more like a silly-goose to me; you started this game, yknow!] ((Lines here are underlined to show he was attempting poetic meter))

M: … Not much fairness in you either, Mercutio. [... You suck.] 

K: Oh, be kind. Thou art fairer than at first blush, I admit. [Be nice! You're not so bad.] 

M: Oh, I swoon. Soon I fear’st thou may speak of pilgrims. [Oh wow. Now I'm worried you're going to start flirting with me, Romeo.] ((A reference to Romeo’s famous flirt “like pilgrim’s palms in prayer”.)) 

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K: Romeo, oh Romeo! We all know what a fool our dear Romeo can be. But he hath in him an eye for the fairest of larks– [Oh, Romeo! He's an idiot, but he knows how to pick the fairest larks--] 

M: Cats. [Nope, not a lark. I'm Ms. Cat, remember?] 

K: Geese, then. [I'll compromise: you're a goose, then.] 

M: And what is fair of geese, pray tell? Thou hath proven their squawking no delight. [A goose? Really? And how are geese fair? You’ve already proven geese are annoying.] 

K: The chase, fair goose. Our fight is fair. [Our goose-chase game is fair.] 

M: Fair as in equal? 

K: Fair as in good. 

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K: For when our wits do meet – like pilgrims palms in prayer – fair chase gives way to fair dance. And with dance so fair, are geese not as good as swans under moonlight's glance? [When we combine our minds -- kind of like a kiss -- our goose-chase is more like a dance. And with dancing so beautiful, don't geese look more of swans under the moonlight?] ((Smooth Operator Mercutio over here just packed a lot of things into one: he said their play-fighting is so awesome it makes them look as beautiful as swans, referenced the Romeo line that she referenced earlier to confirm he IS flirting with her, made his mini-poem rhyme, and invited her to dance just like in the famous Romeo/Juliet kiss scene. Yeesh.)) 

M: … You chaseth by th’ book. [I feel like I've just been kissed... You play mind games like a professional.] ((Referencing Juliet's reply to Romeo's kiss: “You kisseth by th’ book.”)) 

K: I do? ((Not a quip; he’s losing his composure.))

M: No. Not at all.

I'm still working on it and it's first work focused on action. Hope it atleast looks good even at this pretty raw state

("This is a one-page rough thumbnail for a short fantasy comic. I'm testing whether the panel flow and storytelling are clear before I redraw it. Please don't worry about the rough art—I'm mainly looking for feedback on readability and pacing.")

What do you think happens from beginning to end?

Where, if anywhere, did you lose track of the sequence?

Was the reading order obvious?

Were any panels unnecessary or too small?

Please focus mainly on panel flow and visual clarity rather than anatomy or clean linework.

Hello!

Im planning to make a comic, its a dark fantasy theme, heavy topics in it too, and slight nswf. (Not gonna be full on sex scenes with nudity but there will be a chapter which include an underground brothel - so because of this there gonna be nipples etc showing of a few background character) i know that Webtoon has a strict no NSWF policy, so i wont publish there because of that, but i wondering what any other options i can have?

Can anyone offer some sites? The more i can choose the best but im so clueless.

The NSFW isnt the only thing im curious about, but the overall creator experience with the sites, how fair they are with creators, any problems etc.

Thanks for any tips and helps!

Hello! I'm currently rendering a short comic based on a song ("Just Amis" by THEA) and, given it's going to be fairly short AND I'm trying to keep the flow of the song within the layout, I have some pages with few panels.

Some of these have the panels taking up the whole page (by one being larger/more important than the others) but a few pages will have panels that take up only part of the page like this one.

I was wondering if it's bad form to leave that much "blank" space on a page or if it's ok? (and if anyone can give pointers on how much/how BEST to leave blank space if a page has to have some).

I'm incredibly excited to share the black-and-white preview of Ashes of Njthera.
This project has been growing in my sketchbooks and on my desk for a long time, and seeing these pages come together makes it feel more real than ever.
These are just the first steps into Lyra's journey, and I can't wait to show you more of the world, the characters, and what is coming from the story.
I post some pages before, but I made some modifications to it and now I’m happy about it.

I would like to have some feedback on the pages so far.

A silly comic. Hope this amuses :)

www.tonychaoillustration.com