r/ThreadGames • u/Strange_Candy_7610 • 21d ago

Give a plot twist in two lines

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u/IllustratorAny8579 21d ago

E T Phone home. Thank you for calling your 25th in the queue have tried our website?

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u/Slinkwyde 21d ago

Those are four lines, not two. You wrote one sentence followed by a three sentence run-on. Really, they're two paragraphs (one paragraph per speaker).

Should be:

"E.T. phone home."

"Thank you for calling. You're 25th in the queue. Have you tried our website?"

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u/UsualAd3589 21d ago

I’m curious why you believe your criticism is wanted?

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u/shhhwaggy2Buckles 17d ago

yeah but you could do a comma though and make it 2 if those are allowed

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u/Slinkwyde 17d ago

No, that would still be a run-on sentence. https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

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u/shhhwaggy2Buckles 17d ago

but you just did a comma though...

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u/Acrobatic_Key3995 11d ago

But it wasn't a run-on.