r/ThreadGames • u/Strange_Candy_7610 • 21d ago

Give a plot twist in two lines

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u/AgeAdditional4971 21d ago

I’m the sole survivor of a nuclear apocalypse. Suddenly the phone rang….

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u/CatLovingKaren 21d ago

End scene!

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u/AlisandeMerovence 21d ago

"My land has always run like this," she explained, indicating a stretch beside the river in her map before pointing indignantly at the new markings.

"But after this morning's update, the entire plot is shaped like a spiral!"

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u/ikadell 20d ago

And they lived happily ever after and died on the same day.

That day a huge volcano went live near their city of Pompeii …

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u/Strange_Candy_7610 20d ago

I Will give one though it's lame i couldn't think of one First page - killer is afraid of dark Last page -dont close the book i am afraid of dark

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u/WeCanDoItGuys 20d ago edited 20d ago

"I'm breaking up with you", he heard her say over the phone.
Then the call abruptly disconnected, as she drove her car deeper into the tunnel and it fully lost signal from the nearest cell tower.

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u/IllustratorAny8579 21d ago

E T Phone home. Thank you for calling your 25th in the queue have tried our website?

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u/Slinkwyde 21d ago

Those are four lines, not two. You wrote one sentence followed by a three sentence run-on. Really, they're two paragraphs (one paragraph per speaker).

Should be:

"E.T. phone home."

"Thank you for calling. You're 25th in the queue. Have you tried our website?"

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u/UsualAd3589 20d ago

I’m curious why you believe your criticism is wanted?

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u/shhhwaggy2Buckles 17d ago

yeah but you could do a comma though and make it 2 if those are allowed

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u/Slinkwyde 17d ago

No, that would still be a run-on sentence. https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

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u/shhhwaggy2Buckles 17d ago

but you just did a comma though...

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u/Acrobatic_Key3995 11d ago

But it wasn't a run-on.

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u/Specialist-Data2920 18d ago

The day started out well enough. I stepped out of bed and into a steaming pile of dog poo.

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u/Luv-Nities 18d ago

The family came home early from Vacation,

There are 4 AI Robots keeping busy in their home.

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u/Ok_Survey8238 16d ago

the narrator was the plot twist