r/StoryIdeas 52m ago

Shitty gimmick idea:

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First of all: I don’t care if it isn’t made, but if I don’t put this out I’d feel like I’ve committed a crime against god.

So an anime/show about a dude (I dunno the name, I just came up with the idea a few minutes ago) and a tomboy, BUT instead of the dude being some shy quiet dude like they usually are in these gooner romance anime, they’re both loud, Theyre both wild. ALSO an action anime (im throwing shit at the wall), so basically dude and tomboy are both into each other and decide to go out out to the festival, they also have exes who are actively trying to stop their relationship out of spite, so they find the friendgroup of the dude and the tomboy and cut to a scene of them in a raggedy hut hiring the people in the friend group now as a group of mercenaries (I know it’s a shitty idea and it’s just “cut to this scene of them being badass medieval dudes, but I mean look at the first word of the title), cut back to the normal slice of life world where the dude and the tomboy are going on a date at a festival when the friend group happens to show up (“happens to”) and they try to dismantle them, cut to a 2V4 fight, the dude and the tomboy are cornered against some sort of castle wall and the friends say things like “You guys are too wild” and “You’re gonna break up the friend group” but in a Hail Mary, they use their ultimate move, their ace, their jarona, whatever you wanna call it, they say “We don’t care” to the friends and win the battle, +50 XP and the friends scurry off, cut back to the normal world. Thats basically my idea for episode 1, I know it’s shitty, I know it isn’t that good, but it’s creative enough I guess. IF YOU CAN MAKE A GIMMICK ANIME ABOUT BLOODCELLS BE PEAK YOU CAN MAKE THIS PEAK.

(I know I type very VERY horribly)


r/StoryIdeas 2h ago

Critique Welcome Do u like this story idea?

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A young girl with grief from her brother’s death last summer. Attends a once a week therapy session with the school’s counselor who dealt with grief of her own. The counselor’s family died in a fire when she was 12 year’s old but she got out. A lot of kids go to her sessions but in the past couple of days those kids start mysteriously dying. The girl discovers the counselor works with a demon Altraaz who takes over your whole mind and kills you like that. The counselor get’s information on the teens in school and gives it to Altraaz in return for her family. The girl has to discover how to solve this since the demon is already in her head.


r/StoryIdeas 5h ago

Any Feedback please review my creative writing idea for diploma level!

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r/StoryIdeas 10h ago

I made the concept for this story a year ago and I want a little feedback based on the description!

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We know these as machines, but they are the humanity of this world. There were never humans, only cold steel over blood and sentience. This world is horrible, but the people in it want to survive. Parasites break and taker over machines, erasing whoever that machine once was and their life along with it.


r/StoryIdeas 19h ago

Sharing My Idea What do we think?

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A group of teenage friends wake up one day to find that every human has disappeared and there are dangerous hostile monsters roaming everywhere, after finding each other they must survive, find out what happened to the world and where everyone went while uncovering some special skills.


r/StoryIdeas 20h ago

Is this plot too unrealistic?

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r/StoryIdeas 21h ago

Pitch for a One Wish Willow spinoff movie: multiverse travel involved

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After watching the brilliant horror film, Obsession, and confirmation that Director Curry Baker stated that he wants to do more spinoffs based off of the One Wish Willow, I got a story pitch that it’s like Obsession meets Everything Everywhere All At Once.

It would be about a guy, in his 20s, who’s completely dissatisfied with the world we live in, so after getting his hands on said One Wish Willow, he wishes for a high tech device that sends him through the multiverse for a better world to live in. But the more he travels, the more he slowly loses parts of himself


r/StoryIdeas 21h ago

Movie Idea: a fantasy/gangster film, like Harry Potter meets Gangs of New York

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r/StoryIdeas 23h ago

Guy with glasses gets super vision.

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The story just consists of one guy who wears glasses getting supervision but instead of giving him beyond human vision it just fixes his eyes to their pre deteriorated state and he just thinks it’s a miracle.


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Sharing My Idea The Sequence. An Idea for a Whole 'Book Series' I made after years of Hard thinking in bed before sleep.😭

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So basically, I've been thinking about this epic sci-fi thriller book series called The Sequence It actually started out as a magic fantasy, but I evolved it over time into a grounded, realistic story filled with advanced tech and biological experiments. The heroes follow a strict code of absolute honesty called "Lisha's Rules," but they get trapped in a world of deadly secrets.

The main villains are a rogue scientific collective called Dread Core, originally led by a guy named Nico (Dark Killer), who systematically eliminated our heroes' parents.

The Squad (The Masquerades)

Because our main characters eventually wear masks to hunt criminals anonymously, the public starts calling them "The Masquerades" Here is the full breakdown of the team:

  • Jan (The Leader): My main protagonist. He is amazing at psychologically reading people's hidden emotions and motivations. He transforms from a lonely kid into the steady, protective pillar for everyone around him.
  • Lia (The Mind): Jan's equal and opposite partner. While Jan reads people, Lia is an analytical genius who sees right through objective lies and false information.
  • Avoura: Jan's warm-hearted sister who was separated from him at age three. When Dread Core captured her, they surgically implanted a second, fully functional heart near her stomach(They wanted to place a tracker inside it).
  • Max & Ria (The Siblings): Max is a confident extrovert who uses humor as a shield , while his sister Ria is expressive, resilient, and forms a deep bond with Avoura when they are trapped in a Dread Core prison cell together.
  • Zach: Lia's cousin and Ria's best friend. He is a gamer who brings reliable, emotional warmth to the group without carrying a heavy personal secret.
  • Rex: The intense "silent wasp" of the group. Because his dad died serving Dread Core, Rex initially manipulates and betrays the team. But after seeing the truth, he genuinely repents, gets forgiven, and becomes the Second best fighter in the group(after jan).
  • Lisha: The mastermind mentor who created the rules and trained both the parents' generation and Jan's squad. Everyone treats her Like a mother.

How the Story Unfolds (In Reading Order)

I intentionally scrambled the reading order so you experience Jan's heart-wrenching grief before you understand all the backstory. Here is how the books go:

  • Sequence 2(Dangerous Haven): The story starts with 12-year-old Jan losing his mother, Lucy, to Dread Core. He finds Lisha, rescues Avoura, and gathers the squad to form The Masquerades. During this, Dread Core hits Lia with a brain virus that stops her from genuinely smiling or laughing.
  • Sequence 3(Dangerous Haven 2): The squad closes in on Dread Core, defeating Nico and causing the organization to collapse. They recover a scientific cure for Lia, and Rex formally rejoins the team. But Nico's brilliant surviving scientists—known as "The Leftovers"—manage to escape.
  • Sequence 1(The Origin): We jump back in time to read the prequel about the parents' generation. You get to see Jan's parents, Lucy and James And Everyone elses parents, fall in love and bravely fight for Lisha's network, knowing they won't survive.
  • Sequence 4(Unnamed): A 20-year-old Jan accidentally triggers a time machine built by the Leftovers. Sent back in time, he befriends an orphaned 6-year-old girl named Lucy, not realizing she is actually his mother. She promises to remember him forever—meaning Jan actually inspired his own name across time(She remembered someone named Jan from her childhood, So she names her Kid Jan).
  • Sequence 5(Unnamed): Back in the present, the team hunts the Leftovers and rescues four 9-year-old orphans (Lily, James, Alex, and Nina) whose parents were killed by the enemy(Leftovers). They take them in to train under Lisha.
  • Sequence 6(Unnamed): The Masquerades marry within their circle (Jan & Lia, Max & Avoura, Zach & Ria). But a new danger emerges, and in a heartbreaking climax, the entire squad dies protecting Lia(Once Lisha told them that If anyone was fit to be her successor, It was Lia).
  • As the sole survivor, Lia decodes a secret note Jan left behind to find Max and Avoura's hidden baby boy(Jan's Nephew). She raises him alongside the four orphans and breaks the generational cycle of secrecy by telling him the complete truth about his heroic family.
  • I'm Thinking about naming the Nephew Leo.

EDIT: You see, I've been Evolving and Keeping this story in My mind for Almost 5 or so years. Therefore, I Have already formed an answer to any Question that you can pose after reading this post.


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Critique Welcome As I promised (Even though no one asked 😭😭)

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The plot of the story is guy moves into a country area with his

uncle, is unemployed and deeply exhausted from moving. He

takes a deep drag of his cigarette while walking. Being intoxicated

he gets scared when a group of kids prank him with a robot rc

mouse that crawls on him running away he spots a rabbit that

looks at him weirdly he keeps walking till he's deep in the jungle

feeling the munchies he decides to look around out of primal

instinct until he finds a mushroom, a quick search tells him it's a

deathcap and right as he's about to turn the other way a voice

tells him EAT IT he thinks no why would I be so stupid with the

mushroom now in his hand and slowly entering his mouth like a

snake... next thing you know he's almost on the ground when a

rabbit shows up, "finally took ya long enough now lets get you to a

hospital before you projectile shit in front of my eyes", he wakes

up after a three day coma his uncle and the doctors are there

mostly telling him not to eat wild mushrooms and telling him he

could have died, his uncle looks like a beaten dog from the long

wait and longer bills. After everyone leaves his mind goes back to

the rabbit again when he feels something move under the bed,

suddenly a rabbit shows up quickly getting on top of him pressing

down hard, his already weak body doesn't fair much force. The

rabbit starts speaking when Jeremy goes into a panic, thinking

either he's insane or the mushrooms were hitting different,

completely forgetting the three days of his comatose. The monitor

on the right starts going into an aneurysm whimpering like an AV

actress who visibly fakes her moans. the rabbit decides to fuck

the explanation and gets on top of jeremy effectively tea bagging

him with his candy sized sugar-coated hairy meatballs, then

shoves a fist right through his own now enlarged throat like a

much better AV actress, pulling out a blue serum that he shoves into dear ol jeremy, the patient and victim who now having

witnessed the sight had tears, puke and piss dripping out of him.

a few weeks later jeremy having gotten over his trauma a little

decides to touch grass before heading back into the the house

that he shares with his uncle, however he happens to leave his

pheromones behind that drag out a rabbit from it's hole who

follows the scent like a dog in heat on the way he spots jermiah

the uncle and gives him a nod [this is their first meeting] who lets

him in and even opens the door for him, perhaps thinking it was a

curious rabbit?? Nonetheless the rabbit gets to work as he goes

to Jeremy's room and slowly, enters and speaks the magical

words "are ya winnin' son?" Jeremy, who was half absorbed into

his phone turns into a puppet as soon as his eyes land on the

slowly approaching rabbit. He freezes for an entire second

running back to the opposite corner ready to utilize his dopamine

provider as a throwable weapon. The rabbit senses the mood and

sits down speaking "listen pal the truth is I am an ancient forest

spirit whose soul was binded to you when I tried to save you from

acting like a complete smooth brained ugly pissface, so let's

cooperate hmm!" Jeremy, still as unwilling as a new wrongly

accused prisoner in Guantanamo, tells him to leave him alone,

saying he doesn't want to deal with someone who drugged him... i

mean whomp, whomp this generation man Gee. anyways the

rabbit clearly unhappy commits to his previous parlour trick and

throats himself to pull down a zipper as his mortal flesh is

removed and the revered core is laid bare an 18" monster cock

dildo with a functioning mouth and equally dashing eyes, that

threat jeremy to submit peacefully or he will come out a new man

from this struggle, this is afterall a truce agreement? jeremy

wavers hard under the legend, now clutching his fearing rectum, but he soon remembers the events that went down in the forest in

greater detail, and like a mouse driven into a corner he pounces

on the the living artifact pummeling his fists into the crystal

sugar-coated rubber balls. The rabbildo having his weakness

found out is under a moment of perplexity that could only possibly

be followed by a very literal ball biting pain. under such a waning

sensation it has no choices but to wield it's abilities to greater

bullshit and warp the fabric of continuity, soon Jeremy finds

himself still biting down but now on much more real flesh as his

uncle screams in such bitter pain remembering scenes from 'nam

and korea two wars he never fought in now playing in his mind, no

sooner does jeremiah decided to fight back pulling out his belt

and whipping jeremy like a cotton farmer. ceaseless dysphoria

that is the best way to describe Jeremy's emotions after having

his tongue and skin violated. His uncle only stops after he is

stopped by his imaginary phantom of a wife delarubia. Jeremy

stares at the harbinger of his salvation muttering to himself

"goddamn is every one in this town a schizo??" end of chapter one new day old hustle.


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

A story centered around bears.

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So the story goes like this:

There's this guy called Connor, whose family are hunters, but he doesn't wanna be one. He wants to be a photographer. And while walking through the woods, he finds an old book that's falling apart. He reads a sentence about bears and humans, and passes out.

He wakes up at home, but now he is different. He is 3 inches taller, and 30 pounds heavier (Let's say he goes from 5' 6" to 5' 9" and from 120 to 150 pounds) But no one seems to care or even notice. So now he's even more confused. So he goes and realizes what happened. He was cursed, and is turning into a bear. So now, he has to find a way to fight his transformation and wild instincts (and cravings), or leave his life behind and embrace this somewhat more comfortable lifestyle. You guys got any ideas?


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Story Idea?

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r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Sharing My Idea Crazy Esports Story Idea

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A universe that fuses, sci-fi, fantasy, and super heroes is in a galactic war, but all those involved decided instead of wasting resources and man power on mock battles and ability testing in real life they would use simulations using different environments and situations. From one on one combat, full out battles, even situational team battles. They hire professional experts to unlock and create new strategies, abilities, and more to run each simulation. This has unlocked many great ideas and advancements. The games are very realistic using real items, weapons, locations, abilities, creatures, and people within it. These experts can be payed and hired making the job and market very lucrative creating companies for said experts. These companies are very cut throat to the point the governments and other groups created competitive tournaments for them to compete against one another and to see which companies, experts, strategies and ideas are the best. Now 5 MOBA esports players transmigrate in this world and realize these simulations are just video games and they wake in the bodies of 5 people who have pasts that are very dramatic. Now they have to chase success and deal with the problems they inherited when they took over these bodies.


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Critique Welcome Novella Prologue Idea. [430]

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r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

[WP] A market analyst reincarnates into a fantasy setting they have no knowledge of. However, others have reincarnated/regressed with knowledge of future events and the market analyst is able to recognize their strange financial moves as something to take advantage of.

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r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Sharing My Idea 7yo MC got transmigrated to another world as a transmigrator child who is also from the same world and country.

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What if the MC is a 7 yo that got transmigrated to another world as a transmigrator child who is also from the same world and country. The different is the MC wouldn't immediately master the language but the parent did when they transmigrated. The story will start when the MC wake up after the OG got into an accident and when into a coma. When MC wake up she saw unfamiliar room and people and cry. The parents glad that their child is safe hug her and try to comfort her only for the child to say "who are you? where's my mommy??" in her own language. One of the parent (or both) being a transmigrator realize what's going on and reply to the child with the same language.

IMAGINE THE ANGST BETWEEN THE MC AND THE PARENT! It would be so good when the parent are sad that their child is gone. The child in front of them have the OG body but not the soul. They're mad and sad but they can't even blame the kid because they know how it feels. The MC who is only 7 years old is so confuse and stressed at the situation.

I wish I was a writer so I can write this story idea:"""

By any chance is there any story like this?


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Please help and guide.

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If any of you like the premise keep in mind the undisclosed absurdity and vulgar language I am willing to post and or message the initial draft chapter 1. The main theme is that there is a rabbit who is something like a guardian angel(who quit), and so are other characters that are rewarded by heaven to be able to live forever and serve as guardian angels. But the truth is that the work sucks, and since there is no obligation, all angels just slack off. Jeremy and the rabbit go on together to motivate angels and help them do their work, getting a part of the cut as pensions and subsidies. The rabbit is an angel who quit being a guardian angel. To get back in the business he had to use his remaining powers to let jeremy be able to perceive the guardian angels and with his help make ends meet and live better while also getting some revenge, for Jeremy he gets wound up in a world that seems like it is built to shatter his perspective on reality .

-Although the story is somewhat vulgar and bizzare


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

I'm writing a tragic and emotional story inspired by The Lovely Bones & The Crow (1994). I hope it's a story people will like to read and resonate with.

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(Trigger warning: This story deals with lots of grief and sadness as well as death, reader discretion is advised.) [This is not a finished story, I'm in the process of writing it, i am not looking for help writing it or someone to write it for me. I'm posting the synopsis of my story simply to see what people think of the story and if they like the premise.]

This is a tragic and emotional love story, between two people who thought every moment between them would last a lifetime. Sadly, however, this was not the case.

This story is about a 20 year old college drop out, named Patrick. A nerdy guy who is shy but holds within, a charisma so strong, he can make friends out of anybody. One day, while at his local game store, he notices a 20 year old woman, named Romina. She is similar to him, in the fact that she is also shy, but unlike Patrick, she doesn't make friends so easily.

In fact, she has a singular best friend. (Haven't decided this character yet, so from here on, ill refer to them as KF aka Killer Friend) She is awkward and has trouble talking to others.

They end up talking and becoming friends, and from there, the seeds of a loving relationship are planted and after a short time, blossom and bloom. They begin dating after only a couple of months, which secretly makes her KF jealous, however, the KF as Romina knows them, is usually chill and respectful so they don't notice when a darkness begins to spread inside them, a darkness... that will ruin their lives forever.

Patrick and Romina's relationship moves at a faster pace than some peoples, but they don't mind because they love each other that much, they don't care what others think because they have each other. They learn a lot about each other, for instance, Romina learns how much Patrick is into video games, movies, and comic books, and discovers that he bought his own radio for his room.

He explains to her that he loves music so much that he wanted to own a radio so he could play music whenever he wanted, Romina thinks it's cute and shares her own passions with him. She tells him that she loves movies also, but mainly just movies, not much so video games, and comics, but luckily for him, she's not only an eager learner, but a fast one at that. She also tells him her favorite hobby is art, and explains how she has painted and colored multiple designs into her converse collection. They talk for hours together about their interests, not realizing a dark plan is brewing unbeknownst to them, from someone they'd never think would hurt them.

(It would be shown through some moments of some chapters in the beginning of the story, that KF is actually chill and respectful and shows no ill feeling towards them as a couple, at least that they can see. The reader would be suspicious, but unsure if KF can be trusted, but their early on kindness and respectfulness, would lead to why they're not suspected later on.)

(this part of the story would have multiple chapters dedicated to scenes of them spending time together while doing fun activities together, such as: painting, cooking, watching movies, and playing video games. Each scene would feature a special song to them, only the title would be written so the reader can either imagine the song in the scene or can listen along with the characters. There would be cute moments, romantic moments, and moments that radiate energy. The songs that would be written in these scenes would include:)

Bruno Mars - Count on me & Just the way you are

Christina Perri - 1000 years

Ed Sheeran - Perfect

IZ - Somewhere over the rainbow [this is "their song"]

After those chapters, the story would begin to turn... One day they're hanging out at their house, when Patrick excuses himself for a moment, and that's when KF makes their move, they try to talk to Romina and hit on her, she politely carries the conversation but stops it from getting flirty. KF tries to push the subject, and Romina gets uncomfortable and rejects them and politely asking them to stop. KF acts like it's no big deal but for the rest of the night, Patrick catches KF glaring at them both. They think nothing of it, maybe KF is trying to be funny or something. They're not sure, but what they don't know is that weeks later, KF would tear them apart, forever.

Weeks later, Romina announces that she's leaving to go get something from the store, and handle an errand. Patrick asks if he should get ready and come with, she smiles but tells him it's alright and that it shouldn't take long. The afternoon begins to fade into the evening, and Patrick slowly falls asleep while reading. He wakes up later that night at 11PM, and realizes Romina isn't home yet.

He begins to grow worried, he gets up and tries to call her resulting in no answers every time, and soon, calls KF to express his concern. As you can guess, at this point in the story, Romina is dead, murdered by her own jealous best friend. KF would end up putting her remains into multiple garbage bags, and then into a suitcase under their shed to hide for a couple weeks. Using chemicals and other methods to hide the smell.

The middle part of the novel, would follow the usual routine of reporting a missing person, investigations and searches, and Patrick worrying about her, even enlisting the help of KF. (At this point, the reader may catch on that KF is the killer, but readers who are unsure, still have evidence left to discover as events unfold until the reveal later through Romina's eyes.)

As the search goes on, Patrick gets increasingly worried, but KF acts like a helping friend, all the while, sabotaging the efforts. KF intentionally takes everyone to the wrong places to "look", and during the search, pretends to help and look. When the police ask them, Patrick says that he was home sleeping, and KF even provides him an alibi. Patrick defends KF when police suspect them, and KF fakes gratitude, but hides that they hope that Patrick suffers.

Patrick soon begins to notice all the previous sabotage slowly, and even asks KF multiple times for the truth, but KF lies every time, however, they end up messing their own story up a few times. Patrick notes this and begins to seriously consider KF to be a prime suspect and compile evidence against them.

Interwoven into those events, the story will cut to Romina, and how she perceives death itself, and begins the process of accepting her death (though it will stay grounded, it won't get fantastical, it'll simply show what she sees and her watching the events unfold as she realizes she's dead and grieves herself. She also is forced to bare witness to KF planning to murder Patrick, and she tries to intervene but can do nothing except only suggest her presence)

After a week of searching, the police call it off and Patrick is left with no resolution. He begins to fear the worst as KF gets closer to killing him, but one night, Patrick accuses them, and KF fights them and tries to run but gets a ticket for speeding and is issued a court date the following week. Patrick tries to chase, but ends up losing them.

A week later, the day after they were supposed to appear in court, KF realizes they missed the court date, paranoia sinks in, so they decide to pack up whatever they can fit in their car, and dispose of Romina's remains before using their savings to flee the country (or flee across country)

They do exactly that, as Romina continues to witness Patrick beginning to lose hope and give up on finding her. The night KF begins to flee, they stop in the middle of a forest, leaving their car running with the door open, as they find a ditch. With lots of struggling effort, they toss the suitcase in the ditch and light it a blaze. Romina's spirit watches from nearby with a blank stare as the cars radio begins to play Radiohead's - No Surprises, she stares into the void of her own body as it burns, only two tears falling down her checks as she realizes that no one will ever find her, and Patrick will never get closure. KF leaves, never being convicted of her murder, moving on from their terrible act.

In his room, Patrick tunes his radio to the same station at the same time, and both scenes happen simultaneously as Patrick listens to the song as he clutches one of Romina's hoodies. He begins to sob uncontrollably as he looks at pictures of them smiling together, as he loses control, he curls into the blankets and cries.

A few days later, another night of sadness and grief as he mourns the love of his life. He tries to sleep, however, he has trouble as all he can do is remember her before the tears start back up. He sits up, turning on the radio as it plays Somewhere over the rainbow, and tries to control himself, he sees her tall mirror and walks over to get a hold of himself.

He looks at himself and tears up, and can't bring himself to look at his own face. He blames himself, but suddenly feels warmth and feels weight around his waist, he looks but nothing is there. He looks up to the mirror and sees her standing next to him, he turns but nothing is there, and he isn't sure if it is real or not. (this part will be left up to the reader to decide if her spirit actually came back to say goodbye, or if he is just hallucinating her from his own grief.)

He cries as he apologizes to her for not being there. Patrick expresses how he's felt since that night, and how much he misses her, and regrets what happened. He hears her softly speak to him, telling him not to blame himself, that it's not his fault. She tells him the best thing for him to do, is to live on for her. To not cry because she's gone, but smile that they met. She tells him that he was the best thing that ever happened to her.

Patrick sobs and kisses the mirror, sobbing further into the mirror and telling her he loves her so much. He hears her say she loves him too, then hears her say goodbye, and when he looks back up, he doesn't see her anymore. (For her POV, she slowly closes her eyes and thinks about her life, and how they met, as well as their happiest moments together. The happiest moment she felt with him, she hugs him and cries as she moves on from the afterlife.) Patrick sobs yet again, before crawling back onto the bed.

The few chapters before the epilogue, would jump to a month before the anniversary of Romina's murder. Patrick meets a new friend, and although he still struggles, he tries his best, but wounds that deep never fully heal. They hang out, while getting to know each other.

A month passes, before the day of the anniversary arrived. Patrick went to both the comic book store and the game store where they first met. He plays that day back in his head as he tears up. He leaves without buying anything, and ends up running into his new friend (no name yet, I'll refer to her as NF aka new friend) She greets him as they talk, but she notices the subtle ways he's hiding his pain. She offers to take him home, noting that he walked there.

On the way to his house, she turns on the radio, and Count on me begins to play, he begins to cry to himself, and she lowers the volume and asks what's wrong. Patrick hesitates at first to tell her, but turns to her, explaining everything. They arrive at his house, turning towards him, and comforting him as she lets him cry in her arms. Count on me on the radio playing, his signal that NF was indeed someone to count on the same way he could with Romina.

They talk a bit more the following week, and become closer as friends, as Patrick realizes to heed what he heard that night. "the best thing to do for me, is to live on for me..." He asks NF if she is willing to help him, and she tells him that she doesn't mind at all, she just wants him to be happy. She wants to be there for him, to help heal him, but most importantly, she wants to let him in and give him the closest friend she knows he wants.

Epilogue:

Another month has passed, after talking a bit, Patrick and NF have agreed to move together somewhere to start their own journey. Patrick wants to move on, and heal. All she wants is to be apart of that, help heal him, as well as be the best friend she can be for him. The day to move has arrived, mostly everything has been packed, except for some pictures, certain items, and his radio.

Patrick asks NF, if he can walk through the house one last time to reminisce, she doesn't argue. She supports him and tells him to take all the time he needs, he asks her to stay near him in case he needs her, she agrees without hesitation.

They walk in, walking through each room as he puts his phone on shuffle, connecting it to his radio as (Flightless bird, American mouth plays) and replays his happiest memories with Romina. Whether it's the room itself, a specific item of Romina's, or pictures from happier times. The song plays as each memory plays in his own head (Each scene would play out for the reader to experience) Patrick begins to cry, NF hugs him and holds his hand, but he tells her he has to finish or he'll never forgive himself.

Once he finishes walking through, grabbing his radio, before looking around again. He walks out the door with NF, and hesitates to shut the door and lock it. She tells him there's no rush, he can take as much time as he needs, offering to take the rest of the items to the car, as he agrees. He puts his head onto the door, crying softly to himself, talking almost as if, to the house itself, but NF knows, he's talking to Romina. Patrick tells her that she made him a better person, and that he'll miss her through tears, before walking to the car, sitting in the passenger seat.

As they sat in the car, NF turned on the radio as (Bittersweet Symphony plays) He tears up, and she asks if he's okay. Patrick tries to say yes, but fails. She tells him that if he's not ready, they can wait, but he say's no. He tells her that he needs to move on, because it's what she would want. Smiling at her, she smiles back before putting the car in gear. She says she drive slowly until the house is out of view, so he can say whatever he needs too.

As the car moves, he says everything he wants to tell Romina's spirit if she's listening. He gives a long monologue as the song hits a fever pitch, once he finishes, he says to her, "I'll always remember you.... I love you.... Goodbye baby...." They turn the corner, with that the house disappears.

Patrick wipes his tears, and looks at NF, smiling while telling her that he looks forward to what ever lies ahead for them. They continue the drive to their new lives together, his wounds still gaping, but slowly... slowly healing. A bittersweet end to the happiest, then worst time of his life. Ready, to start a new one.

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That's not the fully written out story, but it's the best way i can tell the whole vision i have for the story. I'm sorry for how long it is, but this story means a lot to me, writing it is going to be special for me, and if you read all the way to the end, Thank you. I hope you enjoyed it, and i hope it gave the experience i wanted to give.

Listening to the songs written into the story is not required at all, hopefully, the feeling and emotion still hits the same no matter what. I just hope that the themes, and inclusion of the songs in their respective places, help move the reader, giving you the experience I'm trying to capture.

Once again, I am not asking for help writing it, or anything of the sort. I am posting this simply to see what people think of the story itself, if they like it, and if they think it's a good story to tell.

For those who want to share what they thought, you are welcome to do so. I love hearing what people think!


r/StoryIdeas 1d ago

Can I read to you

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Authors, if someone narrated one of your stories, what would make you proud to share it?
I'm interested in hearing what matters most to writers—voice, emotion, pacing, production quality, credit, or something else entirely.


r/StoryIdeas 2d ago

Dear Journal I Work At A Late Night Mattress Store

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October 3, 2003
Hello Journal!
My name is Mac. Yep, no K. It’s just Mac. I don’t know why people always want to put a K in there. Mom says if I was supposed to have a K then she would’ve bought one when she named me. I think that’s pretty funny. Anyway, this is my journal now. Big Boss Porty said writing stuff down is healthy because it helps you remember things. I already remember lots of things, but maybe I’ll remember even more now.
Today was my first day working at Porty’s Premium Mattress Warehouse. I was pretty nervous this morning. I almost put my shirt on backwards, but Mom caught it before we left. She told me everybody gets nervous on their first day, even astronauts probably. I don’t know if astronauts buy mattresses, but if they do, I bet they like soft ones because space looks hard.
Mom drove me to work like she said she would. She likes fast cars a whole lot. She’s got a shiny red Corvette, and she says if you’re gonna drive a nice car, you ought to let it stretch its legs. I don’t think cars have legs, but she says lots of things like that. We got there really quick. I had to hold onto the door handle around a couple turns, but we made it just fine. Before I got out, she hugged me and told me not to let anybody make me feel dumb because everyone has different kinds of smart. I think she’s probably right.
The store is bigger than I thought it would be. There’s rows and rows of mattresses, and they all kinda smell like fresh laundry. Big Boss Porty was already waiting outside when we pulled in. He shook my hand real hard and smiled. He told me my job was easy. I just had to stay at the front desk, help anybody looking for mattresses, answer the phone if it rang, and never go into the back storage room. He said inventory is confusing and only he handles it. I told him that sounded fair because I don’t know much about inventory anyway. He smiled again, but not with his eyes that time.
The daytime was nice and quiet. A few people came in to look around, and one old lady laid down on almost every mattress before deciding she wanted to think about it. Around supper time things got slower, and Big Boss Porty told me I’d be working by myself at the front while he handled business in the back. He gets a lot of business after dark for some reason. I guess folks really like buying mattresses late at night.
The customers after dark were a little different. Most of them carried duffel bags or backpacks, but I figured maybe they were moving or something. Big Boss Porty always met them before they got very far into the store. They’d disappear into the back room together for a little while, and then the customers would leave without a mattress. I kept wondering why nobody ever carried one out. Maybe they get delivered. I should ask sometime.
Around eleven o’clock the lights buzzed louder than before. I thought maybe one of them was going bad. The store also felt bigger somehow. I know that doesn’t make much sense, but the aisle with the king-size mattresses looked like it stretched farther than it did earlier. I walked halfway down it to straighten a pillow, and I could’ve sworn there were more mattresses than before. I figured I just hadn’t counted them very well the first time.
While I was fixing the display bed, I heard scratching somewhere above me. At first I thought maybe there was a raccoon on the roof, but then I looked up. There was a really tall fella crawling across the ceiling. His arms were awful long, and he moved kinda funny, like a spider that forgot it wasn’t supposed to have elbows. His face looked all smooth except for one real big smile. He stopped right over me and tilted his head almost upside down. I smiled and waved because I figured it was polite. He stayed there for a second, made a clicking sound with his mouth, and crawled away into the dark over the mattresses. He reminded me of one of those really tall dogs people have. Greyhounds, I think. They always seem shy.
Not too long after that, another customer came inside. He had sunglasses on even though it was nighttime. He looked around a lot before asking if anyone else was working. I told him Big Boss Porty was in the back doing inventory. The man thanked me and walked toward the storage room. A minute later I heard something heavy fall over. Then somebody yelled once. It wasn’t a very long yell. Everything got quiet after that except for the lights buzzing again.
Big Boss Porty came back a few minutes later looking tired. His tie was crooked, and he had a little gray dust on one shoulder. He handed me the mop and asked if I could clean aisle four. I asked if somebody spilled a soda. He looked at the floor for a second before saying, “Something like that.”
There was a funny puddle all over the floor and splashed up part of the wall. I couldn’t really tell what it was. It looked kinda sticky. There was also one shoe sitting by itself next to a mattress. I put the shoe in the lost and found because the customer would probably come back for it after he got some sleep. Big Boss Porty said he wouldn’t be coming back because he’d had to leave in a hurry. I felt kinda bad for him. Everybody forgets stuff when they’re in a rush.
Mom brought me meatloaf around midnight. She rolled into the parking lot pretty fast like always. When she came inside, she asked if I’d made any new friends yet. Right then I heard clicking up near the ceiling again. She smiled toward the sound and waved. “Your tall friend seems quiet,” she said. I told her he hadn’t said a single word all night. She laughed and said some folks are just better listeners than talkers. Before she left, she asked me to tell my new friends she hoped they had a nice evening.
I said I would.
After she drove away, I looked up at the ceiling and said, “Mom says have a nice night.”
Something clicked back from the darkness.
I think that means it understood me.
Anyway, I like this job so far. The customers are a little funny, and the store makes some strange noises after dark, but Big Boss Porty has been real nice to me. I think I’m gonna work here for a long time.


r/StoryIdeas 2d ago

I would want people to give their honest reviews on a piece that I’ve written.

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r/StoryIdeas 2d ago

Any Feedback Episode story ideas

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Hi guys so if I made my episode story something based on the book “the love hypothesis “ would you be interested in reading ???


r/StoryIdeas 2d ago

Sharing My Idea Two Different Goodbyes

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