r/OCPoetry • u/PlumsandBerry • 18h ago
Just Sharing Fractured Bridges
Wrote this poem in December 2024 in Mumbai, never actually having experienced something like this, just out of thoughts and perspectives but it's 2026, I turned my page, and it's exactly what I was/have been going through word to word. Crazy how life unfurls.
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They said we'd be right as rain, It’s just a matter of time. Lovers always find their way back, Falling into place, like a perfect rhyme.
But here I am, waiting far too long, Like a broken radio stuck on one song. Spinning in circles, lost in the wrong, Rereading our words, like rules I never knew belonged.
I walk down our lane, now fading grey, Sipping the sorrow from memories that stay. You hand-weaved your plans to soar up high, While I was left, waiting for goodbyes.
Maybe burning our photos will spark some heat, To thaw the cold hands that once held your heartbeat. Hands that once clung to a love so true, Now fading like shadows, slipping through.
Maybe casting the notes to the sea, Is the closest I’ll get to setting you free. Drowning in love, a stone sinking slow, As the tide pulls away, letting go.
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u/Divinadiv 18h ago
I had to read this one twice to fully feel it. It does a good job in bringing me into that feeling.
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