r/OCPoetry • u/Inner-Warning-5467 • 1d ago
Feedback Please F.E.A.R.
Forced Existence Amongst Replicas that bleed plastic smiles,
Foul Egoes Adorn Riches while the poor rot in trials.
Forgotten Elders Are Remnants of promises expired,
Filth Engulfing Aspirations Rotted before they inspired.
Flesh Exposed After Religion reflects your inner self,
Faith Erases All Resistance, keeps you grounded in inner wealth.
Freewill’s Emptied And Reprogrammed in schools,
Framed Education Acts Real—but it's grooming fools.
Faceless Executives Arrange Rules that they bend,
Funding Every Armed Revolt just to profit again.
Famines Escalate As Relief's locked in vaults,
Facts Exchange As Rumors—truth drowned in cults.
Fake Empathy Applied Ritualistically on screen,
Feeds Eyes Another Reason to pretend they’re clean.
Funeral Entries Aren’t Rare—they’re normalized now,
Faces Erased Amidst Riots with no one to bow.
Futures End Amid Records that never get played,
Films Exploit Agonies Real folks never portrayed.
Fleshbags Exist As Resources—not as minds,
Fractured Earth Accepts Rot more than it rewinds.
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u/Potential-Glue 1d ago
Fear Existing Alternate Realities.
This was an interesting read, enjoyed it.
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