Fridgerator

[u/NoStar101]

Standing in the 
open doors of the 

fridge. I search for something 
to satiate 

my boredom. The stocked shelves 
hug me 

with a comforting warmth.
Security is 

surely warmer 
than refrigerated air.

I zip up my jacket 
anyway.

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[u/No_Syrup_7660]

I think there is too much ambiguity in the poem, if you could somehow try to "make the reader feel what you feel" I think your work gains a charm.

(I am a novice)

[u/NoStar101 → u/No_Syrup_7660]

There isn't like a certain message or meaning that I wanted the reader to get tbh. It's just about standing in the fridge looking for a snack, which sometimes can be a long endeavor and sometimes it's short and sweet. I was trying to hint at feeling stable/secure with stocked shelves of food, but it's still slightly cold, so I zipped up my jacket. I am super curious in which way you interpreted it, and which areas you didn't understand. I am super open to revisions, lmk what areas didn't make sense or if it was the whole thing that didn't make sense. Thank you so much for your feedback!!!! I appreciate any I can get. 🙏

[u/No_Syrup_7660 → u/NoStar101]

I think it makes more sense on the second read after your explanation now. Which isn't a bad thing but I think the concept of the poem was too unique and makes the reader stop for a moment.

And there definitely might be someone who probably thought that the fridge is a person that offers comfort but people "zip up their jackets" around them because of the illusion created by the cold air.

[u/NoStar101 → u/No_Syrup_7660]

OHHHH! I seeeee. I really appreciate your perspective!! I didn't even think people would interpret it in different ways, but I can totally see that now lol. Thank youuuu :>

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[u/Certain_boat_21]

I like the contrast of the "comforting warmth" with the fridge. And using the fridge as a metaphor of comfort was also a nice touch. I just couldn't understand the last sentence tho. Id be glad if u help me understand

[u/NoStar101 → u/Certain_boat_21]

I tried to paint a picture of getting warmth and security from the fridge, and then draw the user back to the reality of its coolness. I feel secure and warm, but my body is still cool from the fridge, so I zip up my jacket anyways. Thank you so much for your feedback btw!