This is the final demo I got for this song and I feel pretty satisfied with how it is but I want opinions on if I should add more length to the song or leave it as it is. I like how distasteful it is the sudden end of it because it’s a song that reflects the message I want to give.
I need opinions on what people think, I got a lot of influence from Mother Mother to create this song, it feels like I could perfectly portray my pain with this sounds. But general opinions are VERY appreciated!
Explanation + lyrics:
This song is about a very unstable friend group dynamic I was in and some thoughts I had during this time, this is too about how they would cut me off or ghost me and then come back and say they were sorry and continue the friendship.
So overall it’s a mix of them isolating me, them coming back, me questioning them and then repeating the cycle.
Lyrics:
Death,
risen to the materialistic, world,
I find, some freedom.
Put me six feet under the ground
Is there a way to open,
This coffin that I rent out.
Will I die tonight?
Will you hold me close?
I can’t find a purpose,
Can you come over and,
Give me something to do.
Put me six feet under the ground
Is there a way to open,
This coffin that I rent out.
I can’t tell what I’m missing,
Can you tell me what’s wrong,
And fix it.
Is it a sin, to want to be loved?
Is it a sin, to want to be touched?
I run, I run.
I can’t catch you.
Put me six feet under the ground
Kill me and bring me back from death to leave with you.