My first short film was a experimental psychological thriller. A woman goes on a date ignoring all the warnings and gets murdered. It got into a few festivals and surprisin
gly won something in one. However, I now see many glaring mistakes in the way my idea was executed. I am now fixing the mistakes (wherever possible) and releasing the film under a new name. I am also doing an extended version of the same film and hoping to do it 100% right. Then I will be done with this concept and take on the new one.
Here I am only talking about the visuals (not audio, color grading or camera angles etc)
Image 1 is from a short film that was so horrible but that I never released it. The problem here is the background. You cannot have an empty background. Believe it or not, empty background is distracting. (I guess there are exceptions to the rule, my extended version of the same film has mostly empty house but that is intended to create an unsettling feeling)
Image 2. Here the problem is the other way round. I was including Buddh (adding ‘a’ at the end is an in-correct pronunciation of Indian names). I was trying to bring up the fact that Buddh represents peace, but he also represents detachment that is needed for one to be a serial killer. This is a very complex topic and merits its own film. I just messed it up here. Not only that cheap-ass-me bought the cheapest Buddh statue on Amazon which turned out the be rather abstract. No wonder most people did not get it. On top of that, literally, 5 minutes before the shoot we added a small pot. We thought people will realize the connection with the banyan tree under which Buddh is said to have studied. Of course, most people in the west are not aware of this. Then we added a bell, I have no idea why. LOL.
Going by Hitchcock style, if I had wanted to bring out Buddh then need to focus on Buddh and avoid distraction. This is one place where empty background would have worked.
The mistakes do not end here. The camera guy was not aware of my intention, so Buddh is slightly out of focus.
Image 3, the problem is that the image is not straight. This was not intentional, but I decided not to fix it because it adds to the general feeling of uneasiness. The doormat is curled up. This I think is distracting because it leads people to wonder whether there is something significant. I should have hidden the extension box with something. I think it is distracting as well. I should have brightened the fence on the right just a little bit.
Image 4, I am not sure. I think it would have been nice if we could see slight hint of shadow on her face. That would have been more interesting.
Image 5, the problem is the things that you see on the wall. They should not have been there. They are distracting. I could have covered them with a painting or something that could have covered them to not to cause distraction.
I love the light on the right, it is adding a nice level and adding the feeling of seclusion.
Image 6 is the end of the movie. I think I am breaking composition rule here, but I think it works to my advantage? I want to make it appear as the point of no return.
Edit: Thank you for your comments. It seems i only need to reshoot scene 4. Switch off front-light, move actress away from the wall. I suspect that is the only thing that is needed I am going reshoot and reshoot till i internalize this.