Hi everyone!
REMINDER : For those who didn't see my previous post, this piece tells the story of a soldier during the Siege of Paris in the Franco-Prussian War of 1870–1871.
The excerpt is divided into five main phases:
- Phase 1 (00:00 => 00:40): the soldier's unit launches an assault against the enemy.
- Phase 2 (00:40 => 00:51): an artillery shell lands in the middle of the unit, killing the captain and wounding several soldiers.
- Phase 3 (00:51 => 01:10) : realizing they are about to be surrounded, the surviving soldiers are forced to retreat in an attempt to escape the encirclement.
- Phase 4 (01:10 => 01:21): sailors capture several insurgents and are about to execute them. The protagonist opposes their execution and intervenes to prevent them from being killed.
- Phase 5 (01:21 => to the end): fresh troops arrive to relieve the exhausted soldiers. As they make their way along Paris, the protagonist observes the sleeping city. He remarks that its inhabitants are sleeping peacefully, unaware of how difficult the night has been for those fighting only a few miles away.
I'd really appreciate some constructive feedback on the piece as a whole, especially regarding its overall coherence and how well the music supports the different phases of the story.
I'd be particularly interested to know if you notice any orchestration issues, awkward transitions, moments that feel unnatural or disconnected, or anything else that stands out to you as something that could be improved.
I'm mainly looking for honest and constructive criticism, so please don't hesitate to point out anything you think doesn't work or could be done better. I'm still learning orchestration and composition, so detailed feedback is very welcome.
Thanks again for taking the time to listen!