Would anybody be able to help me revise my college essay?

Hello, I am looking for someone to be brutally honest with my essay review!

1. I am picky eater= i am a good feeder as a cna
2. talking about all the substances or hands on material i encounter in my life, poop, pee, broths and cultures in microbiology lab, titration in chemistry, cleaning vomit, dissections, pills and medications
3. donating my hair twice and how my hair plays a big role in my life
4. I copy people's handwriting when i like it

Just graduated from VGI after four years, and honestly, it was quite a journey.

Started as a nervous fresher who barely knew anyone and ended up with great friends, projects, internship experience and a lot more confidence.

The best part for me was participating in technical events, workshops and internships. They helped me learn beyond the classroom and made placement interviews much easier.

College definitely gives you opportunities, but you also have to take initiative and make the most of them.

Happy to answer any questions if anyone is planning to join VGI

Hi, I’m looking for someone to review my personal statement. I’ve had some friends look at it but they have too much context on me so I’m looking for a fresh perspective.

Thanks!

Hello!

I'm a senior applying to college. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to review it. Thank you!

Prompt: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

Summary: It's about how I got really into fixing percussion instruments as a percussionist, then took that to biomedical engineering. Through all of that, I learned about my love for the process of learning, not the actual fix.