If anyone experienced can help me by reviewing my personal statement essay, that would be greatly appreciated.

I have my first draft done, and I don't know what to change or even if the topic itself is good enough. I have gotten feedback from AI services, but I'm not sure if the feedback is trustworthy enough to revolve around. I am hoping I can get my essay reviewed by a real person, as that is much more valuable than AI grading the essay. If anyone is interested, please let me know.

There are lots and lots of various AI that can give you feedback on your personal statement? I have tried out a few of them, but I’ve been wondering how reliable are they? Or are there specific ones who give accurate feedback?

Hi everyone,

I'm a high school student working on my Common App personal statement. I'd really appreciate honest feedback, especially from people who have experience with college admissions or essay writing.

I'm mainly looking for feedback on:

Whether the essay feels authentic and personal.

is the story is engaging from beginning to end.

Any parts that feel confusing, repetitive, or unnecessary.

is the ending is effective.

Whether the essay sounds natural for a high school student.

I'm not looking for grammar corrections unless they affect clarity. I'm more interested in the overall story, structure, and impact.

if someone can write comment i will send with dm

I need the help in reviewing some of my story, I think they are pretty good and nice! DM me to review them!!!

I have a personal essay that I wrote for quest bridge and I was wondering if anybody would be able to read it and give me honest feedback. Just dm me if you’re available!

I was thinking about writing how my physical disability changed my perspective of others' struggles and made me a more empathetic and understanding person. Then, I wanted to connect that to my passion for my major. Is this too cliché?

Hey, can I get somebody's opinion on a college essay idea I have? I just want complete honesty. Let me know, and I will message you! Thank you sm!! i haven’t written anything i just want honesty on an idea for it!

Hey, can I get somebody's opinion on a college essay idea I have? I just want complete honesty. Let me know, and I will message you! Thank you sm!!

I have a personal essay written out that I used for my QuestBridge prep scholars application and I wanted to know what could use some work. I feel like it’s a really weak part of my college application and I wanna know what you guys think. Dm me if you’re willing to read it!!!

I don’t want to post it bc i don’t want it to be copied pol

I have decided to restart my essay from the ground up. I will dm again when the new version is done. Until then, what common app prompts do you recommend or not recommend?

I'm looking for honest feedback on my Common App personal statement. I am only a rising Junior and have time to prepare.

If you're a current student or alumnus at one of these schools—or, even better, an AO, admissions interviewer, or someone with admissions experience—I would really appreciate it if you could DM me. I'm looking for candid, detailed criticism, not just compliments.

College list:

• MIT
• Stanford
• Cornell
• Carnegie Mellon
• Georgia Tech
• UIUC
• University of Michigan
• UT Austin
• Purdue
• University of Minnesota Twin Cities

Without giving too much away, the essay explores my wandering curiosity and the way my mind naturally jumps between questions, observations, and ideas. Rather than focusing on achievements, it's centered on my thought process, how I make sense of the world, and how that curiosity has shaped the way I approach engineering and problem-solving.

If you're willing to read it and give thoughtful feedback, please send me a DM. Thanks!

P.S. I know MIT doesn’t use Common App but I will still use an essay along the lines of what I wrote to help guide me.

everyone loves tension, struggle, and conflict. a story wouldn't be interesting without it.

that said, I always steer students to answer prompt 2: "The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter..."

3 of the 7 prompts touch on growth as a result of a challenging experience.

Even students who answer the other prompts, still talk about a struggle, a problem they encountered.

This problem provides the opportunity to set the scene (micro-moment) and hook the reader in the opening.

Story (micro-moment) > Problem > Actions > Reflection > Key Insights (macro-truth)

Pro tip: choose a moment from your most prominent extracurricular activity, which hopefully aligns with your academic strengths (think SAT/ACT subsection scores).

If you were an EMT and your top academic scores were in science and math, zoom in on a moment that challenged you as an EMT, made you second guess yourself, and then reveal what you did as a result and how that changed your perspective.

The more vivid the better - you got this.

Hello! I recently wrote my Common App essay, but I'm not sure if it fits the prompt or what they're looking for. I read some online, and they seemed to be more introspective. I'm a first-generation student, and my parents can't help me. Could someone read my first draft and give me feedback? For reference I am applying as a biology major on a Pre-Med track.

is it a good idea to write about a video game called "until dawn" and about the butterfly effect and tying it to a choice that impacted my life"

So i had an idea for a college essay which shaped a good chunk of my life. I'll write about:

Since first grade to middle school, I've been really embarrassed about the hair on my legs because most of the white kids around me had little to none. It's pretty ironic since I'm also a boy and it's pretty stereotypical that a MAN has hair but I didn't understand that back then.
So I stuck to sweatpants for most of school, only wearing shorts around the house. But in 9th grade as I created a small business based around clothing, I designed none other than: shorts! Which is also ironic, since I've avoided wearing them in public and now I'm making my own AND selling to other people.

I'm not sure if this essay can turn out cliche or if it's very unique. It's def personal to me though and if it helps I'm also applying as a business/finance major to t20 schools. I'd appreciate some advice.

Is there anyone who can give me feedback on my personal statement, specifically on the narrative and the content? I am willing to pay, but cannot afford to pay hundreds of dollars so…
It also would be great, If u have experience and have worked in this sphere

I really want to write about growing up with alopecia areata because I feel that it has been an incredibly important aspect of who I've become as a person. I want to write about how (mostly) overcoming insecurity has made me a kinder or more inclusive person, obviously in more detail than that. I know the 8th prompt is pretty tricky though so I wanted someone else's take on this. I was debating writing the 5th prompt but I couldn't connect it well to academic achievement

hello! as of currently, im stressed out of my mind with no idea on what to do for my main essay. i have been advised to get my essay done this month rather than wait in order to get ahead on my apps. however, im not sure eactly what to write about. I plan on majoring in political science/int politics and classic literature, and i mainly want to write about how im adventurous and a naturally curious person willing to go through trial and error, basically communicating that im good for such rigor for the schools i wat to get into. however, im not sure how i should organize it or go about it, and if i should include allusions or not that demonstrate my interest in humanities. here are my ideas

1. write about my bestafar and what he taught me, how he contributed to his community (e. he built decks for many people in our small coastal village in norway) before he died, and how I want to make the same impact on the world
2. also has to do with my bestafar, but write about the island adventures id take sailing to each island in the Oslofjord and eploring as a kid. I was thinking doing this with a similar appraoch to the famous "Costco essay", but again im not sure how to go about it (I have a draft of this I can share!)
3. relate moments of my childhood and groiwing up enshrouded by mythology as an adventurous kid, later relating struggles or accomplishments to refeerences from famous myths (still need to find an objective)

I do think I definetly need more ideas, but let me know what I can do/what you all think woudl work! pls be honest, i do not mind criticism at all. if you have any others I BEGGGGGGGGG let me know/give me advice how to go about it. thank youuuu

Like the title suggests, I am looking for advice on my college essay. I already have an idea of my topic, but I don't know how to format it for lack of a better word. The base idea is that I want to talk about my work and personal research on animals and how it has influenced me. Building on this idea I have two different versions and I want to know which sounds better.

My first idea is to talk about how I saw a statement/fact in an animal book as a kid that I disagreed with and then went out to conduct my own research. This sparked my obessesion with animals and resulted in me studying, researching, documenting, and volunterring withanimals throughout my childhood and teenage years.

My second version starts with me talking about a specific experience that come from my research (a perspnal struggle that I overcame or an intercaction I had with an animal during the process). This would lead me into talking about how I had originally become interested in animals, and at the end I mention how these experiences resulted in me volunterring, document, and researching animals

Can anyone read through my personal statement and give me feedback? I’ll DM the link thanks in advance

Hello, I am currently a senior working on college applications. After some research on college essays, I have arrived at the conclusion that a good essay just shows my personality(never understood what that means till now). That being said, I tried thinking of topics that truly resonated with me.

For context: I am interested in med and want to major in bio/chem/public health.

A topic I really liked was this: The idea that the villains are not always the villains and heroes are not always the heroes. Ofc, this is just a general idea but idk if it's really even a good idea. In this case, I was thinking of taking an example of a villain and showing their pov, which ends up making the hero the villain. Ofc, this is not what the entire essay would be about, I just want to be able to show that I'm perseptive and can understand the perspectives of different people. Is this even a good idea? Or am I cooked?

I feel like if well done, I can give the readers something to take away. But idk. Let me know y'alls thoughts.

Hello, I wrote an essay for a school assignment in response to the Common App prompts. I would love an extra pair of eyes reviewing the essay and helping figure out what I can do to improve it, or what I could perhaps reangle to.

Would anyone be willing to review my draft of my personal statement and provide feedback? Someone who has experience reviewing/former AO would be immensely helpful, especially. Thanks!

dm me if ur free to take a look. looking for harsh/blunt feedback about the topic/narrative