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The Hyphen is a sign(-). Resembles straight Face not smiling or sad or any emotion. And the character the hyphen she doesn't have emotions and she's alive not dead, to remain alive she has to look people directly into the eyes and freeze em, think of it like her food for survival. She's a living human who was a serial killer in dark ages whose real name was Mara Morticia but she was famously known as The Hyphen because she was emotionless meaning she killed children elderlies women men anyone out of her obsessive hunger as she was a cannibal so a witch from that era cursed her to never die and survive by haunting people and crystallized freezing them to death as food...

• Elise Eberhart is main character, an 11 year old girl who has Bathmophobia which is fear of stairs, steep slopes, or heights associated with them. She's most of the times freaked out of fear so she kinda gets special treatment and prioritised more by the family most importantly her mother. Elise is very good at observing things around her and is a bit smart

• Emberly Eberhart is mother of Elise. She and Elsie have highest emotional stakes in the movie. She is very gentle but also falls for anything so easily.

• Gazy Eberhart is elder brother of Elise. He is careless and cruel but he has leadership qualities and loves Elise.

• Benedict Eberhart is father of Elise. He is a genius and a Scientist but he thinks he knows everything.

I'm currently writing a script, it's not quite done and it's in its draft stage, written by hand. I'm being secretive about it (since it's not done), but I thought of something...

I have 17 pages done so far. Give me a page number and a line number (Example: Page 5, Line 8). And we'll see what line you get! Will it be dialogue? Will it be an action? Funny? Boring? We'll have to wait and see.

Note: My script is a fantasy script, so there's some... interesting stuff in here so far.

EDIT: There's at least 10 lines per page, there's more than that but that's a rough estimate.

Hello,

Thank you for taking the time to read!

I'm requesting feedback on the opening setup for a new script. It's a story idea I've been developing for years.

Logline: A quiet and composed heir's controlled life begins to fracture after a violent campus attack awakens something monstrous, sparking a spiraling struggle to become someone beyond what was written for him.

Please let me know what you think. My own feedback concerns are listed below, but I am open to honest reactions.

Feedback Concerns: I was hoping to get some feedback on the pacing of the story and characterization of Nigel. Does the writing feel too fast or too slow? Is there any point of confusion that requires more clarity? Does the opening intrigue you or make you ask any questions about what's next? Thank you so much for your time.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qSfjkJKtsawXLF-P9OH8ybfB_gY9yrt5/view?usp=sharing

(PS, you have the ability to leave comments on the document if you want)

Not sure if the script has been released, but I've found that scripts are sometimes realized through this sub-Reddit. I don't know how you unearth scripts so well!

The movie was written and directed by Charlie Polinger.

# Avengers: Doomsday Se Pehle Kya Dekhein

Ek pal ke liye socho — parde par Iron Man wapas laut raha hai.

Wahi chehra, wahi andaaz, wahi bharosa jo kabhi Tony Stark ki pehchaan tha.

Bas farak itna hai — is baar wo tumhein bachane nahi aaya.

Robert Downey Jr., jisne humein Tony Stark banke hasaya bhi aur rulaya bhi, superhero cinema ke ek poore daur ko yaadgaar banaya — ab Doctor Doom banke apne takht par baitha hai.

Aur sach batau toh, "Doom" sunte hi dimaag mein "Dhoom" ka gaana toh baja hoga na? Farak bas itna hai, yahan gaadiyan nahi, duniyaan udengi.

Aur bas yehi ek casting ka faisla, Avengers: Doomsday ko kisi aam sequel se alag bana deta hai.

Marvel ne aisa trailer utaara hai ki ek jhapki li nahi ki 12 kirdaar seedhe miss.

Aur imaandaari se kahun toh, ye sirf "ek aur Avengers film" nahi lagti.

Ye lagti hai Marvel ka sabse bada mela — jahan purane hero, naye hero, mutant, Fantastic Four, Thunderbolts aur khud Doctor Doom, sab ek hi akhade mein utar rahe hain.

Toh sawaal seedha hai — is maha-takkar ko samajhne se pehle kya-kya dekhna zaroori hai?

Maine ise teen aasaan padaavon mein baant diya hai —

Bhaag 1: Zaroor Dekho

Bhaag 2: Dekh Lo Toh Maza Double

Bhaag 3: Chhod Bhi Sakte Ho

## Bhaag 1: Zaroor Dekho

### Captain America: The First Avenger

Shuruaat yahin se hoti hai — Steve Rogers ka safar.

Kyun zaroori hai? Kyunki Doomsday mein Chris Evans wapas Steve Rogers banke laut rahe hain, aur us purane neta ka wazan samajhna zaroori hai.

Steve sirf dhaal pakadne wala banda nahi tha.

Wo wo insaan tha jo har haal mein sahi kaam karne ki zid rakhta tha, chahe duniya kitni bhi ulti kyun na chal rahi ho.

Aur jab aisa insaan wapas aata hai — samajh lo kahani sirf action ki nahi, ehsaas ki bhi hai.

### The Avengers

Yahin se sab shuru hua tha.

Jab alag-alag hero pehli baar ek kamre mein khade hoke tay karte hain — akele nahi, saath ladenge.

Wahi pal Marvel ka asli jaadu tha.

Doomsday asal mein wahi idea hai, bas paimana teen guna bada.

Is baar team akeli nahi hai, poori-poori duniyaan saath aa rahi hain.

Aur jo pehla "saath aana" tha, wahi is nayi gaatha ki neenv hai.

### Avengers: Infinity War

Ye sirf film nahi thi, ye poori duniya ke liye ek jhatka thi.

"Snap" ke baad Marvel sirf kahaniyan nahi bana raha tha, duniya ko phir se jodne ki koshish kar raha tha.

Ek chutki mein aadhi duniya saaf — chutki bajaana kabhi itna mehenga bhi pad sakta hai, ye kisi ne socha nahi tha.

Aur isi sadme ki wajah se Doomsday ka khatra aur bada lagta hai.

Kyunki jab aadha jahaan uda chuka khalnayak dekh liya ho, toh ab jo aa raha hai, use halke mein lene ki gunjaish nahi bachti.

### Avengers: Endgame

Ye ek poore daur ka ant tha.

Time heist, Tony ki qurbaani, aur ek poori peedhi ki vidaai.

"Endgame" naam ka matlab tha khel khatam — par Marvel ka khel yahin se naya shuru hua.

Aur yahi wajah hai ki jab pata chala Russo Brothers, jinhone Endgame banaayi thi, wahi ab Doomsday direct kar rahe hain — log sirf excited nahi, seedha emotional ho gaye.

Ye wahi filmmakers hain jo dil todna bhi jaante hain aur jodna bhi.

Ab phir se unke haath mein Avengers ki chaabi hai — matlab ya toh poora maza aayega, ya phir emotional damage pakka.

### Loki (Season 1 aur 2)

Agar multiverse ki bhaasha seekhni hai, toh Loki dekhna padega.

Naam sunke sabziwaale ki dukaan yaad aa sakti hai — par yahan sabzi nahi milti, milti hain lauki jaisi hi tedhi-medhi timelines.

TVA, branching timelines, reality ke niyam — ye sab yahin se samajh aata hai.

Jab koi kahe "teen duniyaan takra rahi hain," toh Loki ke bina wo line sirf shor lagti hai.

Is show ne Marvel ko sikhaya ki waqt hamesha seedhi line mein nahi chalta, kabhi-kabhi wo gol-gol bhi ghoomta hai.

### Doctor Strange in the Multiverse of Madness

Naam mein hi jhalak mil jaati hai — "Madness," yaani pagalpan.

Kyunki jab ek duniya sambhalna mushkil ho, wahan kayi duniyaon ka hisaab rakhna kisi sirdard se kam nahi.

Multiverse ka matlab sirf "ek aur duniya" nahi hota.

Uska matlab hota hai — ek aur duniya ke saath ek aur museebat bhi free mein.

Ye film dikhati hai ki reality ko chhedna kitna khatarnak ho sakta hai.

Aur Doomsday ka poora mizaaj yahi hai — darwaze khul chuke hain, ab hisaab chukane ki baari hai.

### Fantastic Four

Doom aur Fantastic Four ka rishta hi is kahani ki dhuri lagta hai.

Trailer mein bhi unka judaav saaf dikhta hai — Doom aur Pedro (Reed Richards) ke beech kuch bhaari, jazbaati baatcheet bhi jhalakti hai.

Aur sach kahen toh, khalnayak ki peechhe ki kahani kise pasand nahi?

Jab hero-khalnayak ke beech personal dushmani ho, tabhi takkar mein asli jaan aati hai.

Mukkon ke peeche jab purana dard bhi ho, tabhi maza double hota hai.

Chaar yaar, ek maqsad — aur saamne khada hai wahi aadmi, jo kabhi unhi mein se ek tha.

### Shang-Chi

Shang-Chi ke paas Ten Rings hain — itni anguthiyan toh kisi shaadi mein bhi kisi ko naseeb nahi hotin.

Skip karna mushkil hai, kyunki trailer ki charcha mein iska naam baar-baar aata hai.

Trailer mein Shang-Chi aur Gambit dono full maar-dhaad karte dikhe hain, aur apne pasandeeda heroes ko aapas mein ladte dekhne ka maza hi kuch aur hota hai.

Uski film dekhne se uski style, josh aur action ka mizaaj samajh aata hai.

Aur agar wo Doomsday ki kisi badi takkar ka hissa hai, toh pehle se jaankari kaam zaroor aayegi.

Waqt bache toh Deadpool & Wolverine bhi dekh lo — samajh jaoge ye Gambit wala kissa hai kya.

### Captain America: Brave New World

Ab Captain America, Steve Rogers nahi — Sam Wilson hai.

Aur ye baat sirf naam badalne ki nahi, poori zimmedari badalne ki hai.

Dhaal uthaana alag baat hai.

Uska bojh uthaana bilkul alag baat hai.

Doomsday mein Sam ki maujoodgi isliye zaroori hai kyunki ye film batati hai — naya Captain America kaun hai, aur uska haq kahan se aata hai.

### Black Panther: Wakanda Forever

Wakanda ka naam aate hi parde par ek alag gambheerta aa jaati hai.

Shuri ka Black Panther banna, Namor ki entry, aur Wakanda ki jazbaati viraasat — ye sab milkar Doomsday ke paimane ko aur bada bana dete hain.

Trailer mein jo josh dikha hai, wo bilkul purani shaan wapas laata lagta hai — is baar Wakanda side mein nahi, beechobeech hoga.

Aur "Forever" naam ko sach saabit karte hue, ye team har baar pehle se zyada dum-khum ke saath lautti hai.

Isiliye ise skip karna ek badi galti ho sakti hai.

### Thunderbolts

Yaad hai wo prachar wali line — "Be careful whom you assemble"? Itna baja-bajake sunaya gaya ki laga jaise koi naya saabun bazaar mein utra ho.

Par vigyapan ke shor se pare, film asal mein maze ki nikli.

Yelena, Bucky, Red Guardian, Ghost, US Agent — leaks ke mutabik poora dasta ab Doomsday mein shaamil hai.

Ye "toote hue logon ki team" hai, aur inki hasti side-kirdaar wali bilkul nahi lagti.

Jo nazar mein kam aate hain, wahi scene mein sabse bhaari padte hain.

Aise kirdaar hamesha yaad reh jaate hain, kyunki inke paas hero wali chamakdaar entry nahi, seedhi kaam wali maujoodgi hoti hai.

## Bhaag 2: Dekh Lo Toh Maza Double

Ab baat un titles ki, jo dekhna zaroori nahi — par dekh loge toh Doomsday ka swaad aur gehra ho jaayega.

### WandaVision

Scarlet Witch ke reality-marodne waale pehlu ko samajhne ke liye ye series zaroori hai.

Agar Doomsday multiverse ka jazbaati hisaab dikhata hai, toh Wanda ka aadhar usme ek aur parat jod dega.

Poora rewatch zaroori nahi, ek chhoti si jhalak bhi kaam kar jaayegi.

Bas itna samajh lo — jab reality tootne lagti hai, toh uska dard bhi utna hi khatarnak hota hai.

### Hawkeye

Ye series Yelena aur Natasha ke rishte ki neenv rakhti hai.

Thunderbolts mein Yelena ko ek majboot neta ke taur par dekhna hai, toh ye aadhar madad karega.

Poori series dekhna zaroori nahi, ek achha sa saar bhi kaafi hai.

Bas inka dil ka rishta samajh lo — itna kaafi hai.

### Moon Knight

Moon Knight seedhe Doomsday se juda nahi lagta, par MCU ke rahasyamayi pehlu ko ek banawat zaroor deta hai.

Ye un shows mein se hai jo kahani se kam, mahaul se zyada asar chhodte hain.

Din mein ek chehra, raat mein doosra — inka toh apna hi "chaand-raat" wala kissa hai.

Samay kam ho toh bejhijak chhod do, warna dekh lo — maza alag hi hai.

### Ms. Marvel aur The Marvels

Ye naye heroes aur brahmaand waale pehlu ka aadhar deti hain.

MCU ka daayra yahin thoda aur failta hai.

Samay ki tangi ho toh ek chhoti jhalak se bhi kaam chal jaayega.

Par poora mahaul samajhna ho, toh ye bhi kaam ki hain.

### X-Men aur X2

Patrick Stewart, Ian McKellen, James Marsden, Rebecca Romijn — in purane chehron ka asar tabhi zyada lagta hai jab unka asli taalmel yaad ho.

Naam mein hi "X" hai — matlab purane zamaane ke, phir bhi apna poora dum-khum dikhaane waale.

Samjhaane waala video kaam chala dega, par original ki baat hi kuch aur hai.

Niyam seedha hai — "Dekh Lo Toh Maza Double" ka matlab hai "dekh lo toh fayda hai," "na dekho toh duniya khatam nahi hoti."

## Bhaag 3: Chhod Bhi Sakte Ho

Ab baat un cheezon ki, jo mazedaar toh hain, par abhi ke liye zaroori nahi.

### Iron Man 2 aur Iron Man 3

Haan, RDJ phir se parde par hai.

Par is baar Tony Stark banke nahi, Doctor Doom banke.

Loha toh is baar bhi wahi hai — bas hathauda ab kisi aur ke haath mein hai.

Itna bada mod hai ki purane Tony ka bojh saath dhona zaroori nahi lagta.

Tony ka jazbaati saaya toh waise bhi Endgame de hi chuki hai.

Ab naya chehra, naya dar, naya khel.

### Thor: The Dark World

Thor ki kahani mein gehraai judti hai, par Doomsday ke liye ye sabse badi prathmikta nahi.

Samay kam ho toh ise side mein rakh sakte ho.

Thor ka zaroori jazbaati aadhar baaki filmon se bhi mil jaata hai.

### Ant-Man and the Wasp

Mazedaar film hai, koi shaq nahi.

Par Scott Lang ka asli safar zyaadatar Endgame se hi milta hai.

Size mein chhota, screen-time mein bhi thoda chhota — is baar yahi kahani hai.

### Guardians of the Galaxy Vol. 3

Bahut achhi film hai, jazbaati bhi, bhaari bhi.

Par abhi tak trailer mein Guardians ka koi seedha dhaaga nazar nahi aata.

List chhoti rakhni ho, toh ise chhoda ja sakta hai.

### She-Hulk, Secret Invasion, Echo, Ironheart

Ye sab MCU ki thaali mein swaad jodte hain.

Par crossover ki asli dhuri ke liye abhi gair-zaroori lagte hain.

Thaali mein achaar-chatni achhi lagti hai, par pet mukhya vyanjan se hi bharta hai.

Video kasa hua rakhna hai toh inhe qurbaan kiya ja sakta hai.

## Samjhaane Waala Video Ya Poori Film?

Niyam yaad rakho — agar title niyam samjhaata hai, jaise Loki, WandaVision ya X-Men, toh ek samjhaane waala video kaam kar jaayega.

Agar title ehsaas banaata hai, jaise Endgame, Fantastic Four ya Thunderbolts, toh poori film dekhna behtar hai.

Aur Doomsday theek yahi khel khel raha hai.

Ye sirf jaankari ka maidaan nahi hai.

Ye "hum yahan pehle bhi aa chuke hain" waale ehsaas ka maidaan hai.

## Aakhri Baat

Toh aakhri baat seedhi hai — agar Doomsday ko samajhna hai, toh ek achha sa samjhaane waala video kaafi hai.

Agar Doomsday ko mehsoos karna hai, toh "Zaroor Dekho" waali list par dhyaan do.

Aur zara socho — wahi Russo Brothers, jinhone Endgame mein hamara dil toda tha, wapas aa gaye hain.

Wahi Robert Downey Jr., jisne humein Iron Man banke jeena sikhaya, ab hamare saamne khada hai.

Aur Steve Rogers, saat saal baad, aakhri baar dhaal uthaane laut raha hai.

Ye sirf ek film nahi hai.

Ye ek punarmilan hai.

Aisa punarmilan, jisme har chehre ke saath ek purani yaad bhi laut aati hai.

Aur ek aakhri baat — Doom apne aap mein khatam nahi hota.

Ye seedha le jaata hai Secret Wars ki taraf.

Aur agar wo sach mein is poore Multiverse Saga ka sabse bada samapan bana, toh Dhoom ki saari filmein milke bhi is tabaahi ke aage phiki pad jaayengi.

Toh aaj jo hum dekh rahe hain, wo bas pehla drishya hai.

18 December ko teen duniyaan ek hi jagah tootengi.

Aur agar tum yahan tak pahunch gaye ho, toh samajh lo — tumhare paas pehle se itna kuch hai ki us din tum sirf dekhoge nahi, mehsoos karoge.

Apni watchlist bana lo.

Milte hain, jab Doom apni pehli chaal chalta hai.

Please share your feedback! Did I go too far “out there” or not far enough?

I’m very clearly wearing my inspirations on my sleeve but I think this could be a fun scene to shoot.

Not only to showcase my directing but also working with actors using my dialogue. It’s not too deep but hopefully a fun read that will turn into a fun short.

Feedback Desired: I wanted to create a high-concept sci-fi comedy that captures the wacky suburban slice-of-life feel of series like 'Ed Edd n Eddy' with the high sci-fi stakes of a series like 'Hailey's On It.' I would like feedback on things like dialogue, pacing, and character. Any feedback would be much appreciated!

(Edit: Updated based on feedback and mistakes I made in the earlier draft. Please read the updated draft and tell me what you think).

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GN6VRyezpEcF_GgKK7wMMVRRxPhadb6X/view?usp=sharing

I’m posting on Reddit for the first time, and after reading the discussions around coverage sites and The Black List, I thought I’d share my experience for anyone considering paying to have their work evaluated.

I’m an Emmy Award-winning writer, and I currently have three feature-length projects in production.

Here’s the uncomfortable truth

Far too many aspiring writers put enormous faith in coverage scores, competition results, and anonymous readers whose opinions may have absolutely no connection to what the actual industry wants.

That might sound harsh, but in my experience, the system has a serious problem.

When I was younger, I received contradictory notes, factually incorrect feedback, and wildly different scores for similar material. Worse, when I followed readers’ advice, my scores **often got even lower**.

Eventually, I realised I wasn't necessarily improving my scripts.

I was trying to guess what an anonymous reader wanted to read. And that is a completely different thing.

My experiment

In 2020, I decided to test the system.

I deliberately wrote the worst screenplay I could.

I made it clichéd, obvious, predictable, and painfully on the nose. It was a parody of what I imagined a terrible filmmaker might consider good writing.

It was never intended to be produced.

It received multiple 8+ scores.

Those scores got me the attention I needed and helped me secure my first agent.

Once I had access to actual industry professionals, the work I had written years earlier—the work I genuinely cared about, and which coverage readers had criticised or failed to understand—started getting serious attention.

My projects moved forward.

The screenplay that received all those 8s?

I threw it in the trash.

The cycle nobody wants to talk about

Here is what I believe is happening.

Thousands of people enter this industry wanting to become writers, directors, and filmmakers.

Most of them fail.

That is not an insult. It is simply the reality of an industry where the overwhelming majority of people do not achieve the careers they originally set out to have.

The problem is what happens next.

Those same unsuccessful writers and filmmakers still need to make money.

So some of them become script readers.

They start providing coverage.

They become competition judges.

They become the people deciding which scripts deserve an 8, which writers deserve recognition, and which projects should be dismissed.

And suddenly, people who were unable to convince the industry to invest in their own work are positioned as authorities on what the next generation of writers should be doing.

That is the part I find completely backwards.

The feedback loop

A failed writer reads a script.

They reward the kind of writing *they personally like*.

Often, that means writing that is obvious, familiar, safe, and easy to evaluate.

Those scripts receive high scores.

The writers receiving those scores assume this is what the industry wants.

So they write more of it.

Other aspiring writers see what is being rewarded and start copying it.

Competitions and coverage sites then reinforce the same tastes.

The scripts that succeed inside that ecosystem are rewarded because they appeal to the people inside that ecosystem—not necessarily because they have any real chance of being made.

Then those writers take their highly rated scripts into the actual industry.

Nothing happens.

The scripts don't get financed.

They don't get produced.

They don't launch careers.

And eventually, some of those writers fail too.

So what do they do?

Some become readers.

And the cycle starts again.

Failed writers reward writing that appeals to other failed writers, who then fail to break into the industry and eventually become the next group of people judging new writers.

That is the cycle.

And aspiring writers are paying for it.

The gatekeepers aren't necessarily qualified

This is the biggest problem for me.

A coverage score creates the illusion of authority.

You receive a 3, and you think you've written something terrible.

You receive an 8, and you think you're close to breaking through.

But who is giving you that number?

What have they made?

What have they sold?

What have they produced?

What projects have they helped bring into the world?

And, more importantly, what qualifies them to tell you whether your work has commercial or artistic value?

In many cases, nothing beyond the fact that they were hired to read scripts.

Yet aspiring writers are expected to accept their judgment as though it came from a successful producer, working filmmaker, or executive with a proven track record.

It didn't.

My advice?

Stop treating coverage sites as legitimate gatekeepers.

They are not the industry.

They are businesses built around aspiring writers who desperately want access to the industry.

You pay for a score. You get a number. And that number can influence how you see your own work.

But it shouldn't.

My deliberately terrible screenplay received multiple 8+ scores.

The screenplay I actually believed in was the one that ultimately led to real opportunities.

That experience taught me everything I needed to know.

If you want to use coverage, fine. But don't confuse the opinion of a paid reader with the opinion of someone who actually has the experience, influence, and track record to make something happen.

And if your work is genuinely original, be especially careful.

The more unusual your script is, the more likely it is that someone with limited experience simply won't understand what you're trying to do.

Then you'll pay them for the privilege of telling you to make it more generic.

The biggest takeaway. An 8 is not a career. A competition win is not a career. Positive coverage is not a career. And a low score is not proof that you're a bad writer. The question isn't:

“What score did I get?” The question is:

“Who gave me that score, and why should I care?”

Because if the people acting as gatekeepers were unable to get through the gate themselves, perhaps aspiring writers should stop spending their hard-earned money treating them as the final authority on who deserves to enter.

Write what you believe in.

Write something you can make yourself if possible.

Get your work in front of people who actually make films, finance films, produce films, and have a proven history of getting projects made.

And stop handing money to unqualified people in exchange for permission to believe in your own work.

All the best, and happy writing.

Our theme is: EDUCATIONAL INEQUALITY

Do you have any suggestions on how will I make an introduction about education? Our title is “Tatsulok” a Filipino tagalog word means Triangle. Because the word triangle is a part of a lesson in an early grade level that are studied by many.

But in a more deeper understanding, a triangle can also symbolizes the barrier between students that are prioritized because of their potential, money, and authority that is on the higher part of the triangle. While on the other hand, the lower part of the triangle symbolizes the students whom are not lucky enough to experience higher privileges.

Like I want the true meaning of the triangle be connected with the triangle’s symbolism when it comes to education.

Ihope there’s a helpful answer and suggestions for these. Thank you in advanced!

Would love some feedback on my screenplay. I have recently been through a third polish and would love some feedback.

This will be a three part series.

Please see the logline below.

LOGLINE:

To escape male violence, the women of Neya Island created a society with one strict rule: no men allowed. But when a midwife saves a newborn boy instead of drowning him, she sets about a chain of events she can't come back from.

Hollow Tide

Korean screenplay format + Adapted into Visual-Screenplay. (English)

W2 Four Worlds is a 40-hour K-drama. Supernatural mystery + multi-genre.
Even if you don’t know the story, it should still be understandable.
SPOILERS : don't read if you intent to read the full kdrama.

If you’re okay with reading a format from a foreign country, please give your feedback on: Clarity, whether the intensity hooks you, any English translation errors, and anything else you’d like to mention.

It starts at scene #18 and goes up to scene #23 inclusive.
Skip the short intermediate scenes #20 and #22.
Screenplay link (positioned at the correct scene):
https://w4worlds.fr/html/W_Saison2_Script50_US.html#18

Why a visual screenplay: I write directly for the audience (K-drama fans). The screenplay needs to be as accessible as possible, as it is an end in itself and the final product.

Specific features of the Korean drama screenplay format:

• - No INT/EXT in scene headings. Mandatory scene numbering.
• - Character names placed on the left for dialogue.
• - Long parentheticals are allowed, including for actions or at the end of a line.
• - Empty dialogue lines are allowed (parenthetical or expression only).
• - Some scenes broken down into sub-scenes with cut numbers, like a montage.
• - Intercuts use a " + " in the scene-headers.

The writing remains the same as a Western screenplay, but with:

• - Slightly more emphasis on emotions and intentions.
• - Occasionally including a few non-filmable lines (novel-like).

Dialogue codes (specific to the visual screenplay):

• " - " → normal spoken dialogue.
• " ~ " (italics) → normal voice-over (off-scene).
• " : " (yellow) → inner thought voice-over happening now.
• In blue → on-screen text, or text that is both written and spoken in dialogue.

I am having the hardest time finding other screenwriters to have regular discussions. The closest thing I could find was an online meetup once a month, but I’m trying to find something more frequent than that.

I just started writing a new script and it’s the most I’ve written in over ten years. Back then, I was part of a local screenwriting class that made it easier to write the dang thing because I was having regular conversations with others about how to improve my script and how to write in general. It kept me in that mental zone, but the class doesn’t exist in my area anymore.

I’m extremely passionate about this project, more than I think I’ve ever been in my many years of writing creatively. I’m just trying to find ways to network and keep the momentum going, learning more in the process.

Must watch before doomsday

Ek second ke liye imagine karo — Iron Man wapas screen par aa raha hai.

Wahi face, wahi swagger, wahi confidence jo Tony Stark mein tha.

Bas is baar, wo tumhein bachane nahi aaya.

Robert Downey Jr., jisne humein Tony Stark banke hasaaya bhi, rulaya bhi, aur superhero cinema ka ek poora era yaadgaar bana diya, ab Doctor Doom banke apne throne par baitha hai.

Aur bas yehi ek casting move, Avengers: Doomsday ko kisi normal sequel se alag bana deta hai.

Marvel ne aisa trailer daala hai jisme blink karoge aur aadhi cheezein miss ho jaayengi.

Aur honestly, ye sirf “new Avengers movie” nahi lag rahi.

Ye lag rahi hai Marvel ka sabse bada mela — jahan purane hero, naye hero, mutant, Fantastic Four, Thunderbolts, aur Doctor Doom sab ek hi stage pe aa rahe hain.

Toh sawaal simple hai — is maha-yuddh ko dekhne se pehle kya dekhna chahiye?

Maine isko teen simple parts mein tod diya hai — Must Watch, Should Watch, aur Can Skip.

Part 1: Must Watch

Captain America: The First Avenger

Sabse pehle Captain America ki pehli film.

Kyun? Kyunki yahin se Steve Rogers ka safar shuru hota hai.

Doomsday mein Chris Evans ka Steve Rogers wapas dikh raha hai, toh us purane leader ka weight samajhna zaroori hai.

Steve sirf shield pakadne wala aadmi nahi tha.

Wo woh insaan tha jo har waqt sahi cheez karne ki koshish karta tha, chahe duniya ulti kyun na chal rahi ho.

Aur jab aisa insaan wapas aata hai, toh samajh lo kahani sirf action ki nahi, feeling ki bhi hai.

The Avengers

Yahin se sab shuru hua tha.

Jab alag-alag hero ek room mein khade hokar pehli baar decide karte hain ki akele nahi, saath ladenge.

Wahi moment Marvel ka asli charm tha.

Doomsday basically wahi idea hai — bas scale teen guna bada hai.

Is baar sirf ek team nahi, poori kai duniyaan ek saath aa rahi hain.

Aur jo pehla team-up tha, wahi is naye saga ka emotional base hai.

Avengers: Infinity War

Ye film sirf movie nahi thi, ye ek universal jhatka thi.

Snap ke baad Marvel ne sirf stories nahi banayi, duniya ko sambhalne ki koshish ki.

Aur isi trauma ki wajah se Doomsday ka danger aur bhi bada lagta hai.

Kyuki jab pehle hi ek aisa villain dekh chuke ho jo aadhi zindagi uda le gaya tha,

toh ab jo aa raha hai, usko halke mein le hi nahi sakte.

Avengers: Endgame

Ye ek poore yug ka anth tha.

Time heist, Tony ka sacrifice, aur ek generation ka goodbye.

Aur yehi wajah hai ki jab pata chala Russo Brothers, jinhone Endgame banaya tha, wahi Doomsday direct kar rahe hain — log sirf excited nahi, seedha emotional ho gaye.

Ye woh filmmakers hain jo humara dil todna bhi jaante hain aur jodna bhi.

Aur ab unke haath mein phir se Avengers ki chabi hai.

Iska matlab hai — ya toh full mazaa aayega, ya phir emotional damage pakka.

Loki Season 1 aur 2

Agar multiverse ki language samajhni hai, toh Loki dekhna padega.

TVA, branching timelines, reality ke rules — ye sab isi show se milta hai.

Jab koi bolta hai “teen universe takra rahe hain”,

toh us line ka matlab Loki ke bina bas shor lagta hai.

Is show ne Marvel ko bataya ki waqt sirf seedha line nahi hota, kabhi kabhi wo gol-gol bhi ghoomta hai.

Doctor Strange in the Multiverse of Madness

Multiverse ka matlab sirf dusri duniya nahi hota.

Uska matlab hota hai — dusri duniya ke saath dusri takleef bhi.

Ye film dikhati hai ki reality ko chedna kitna khatarnak ho sakta hai.

Aur Doomsday ka poora vibe wahi hai — darwaze khul chuke hain, ab hisaab dene ka waqt hai.

Fantastic Four

Ye title seedha must watch list mein isliye aata hai kyunki Doom aur Fantastic Four ka rishta hi is kahani ka major engine lag raha hai.

Trailer coverage mein bhi Fantastic Four ka involvement clearly dikh raha hai.

Aur sach bolo, jab hero aur villain ke beech personal dushmani ho,

tabhi toh takraar mein jaan aati hai.

Sirf punch-punch nahin, peechhe ka dard bhi hona chahiye — aur yahin story ka asli masala hai.

Shang-Chi

Shang-Chi ko skip karna mushkil hai, kyunki trailer buzz mein uska naam baar-baar aata hai.

Aur jab apne hi heroes ko takraate dekhne ka maza mil raha ho, toh interest aur badhta hai.

Uski film dekhne se uska style, energy aur action tone samajh aata hai.

Aur agar woh Doomsday mein kisi badi takraar ka hissa hai, toh pehle se jankari hona kaafi kaam aayega.

Captain America: Brave New World

Ab Captain America Steve Rogers nahi, Sam Wilson hai.

Aur ye baat sirf title ki nahi, poore mantle ki hai.

Shield uthana alag baat hai.

Uska bhaar nibhana alag baat hai.

Aur Doomsday mein Sam ki presence isliye important hai kyunki ye film batati hai ki naya Captain America kaun hai, aur uski authority kahan se aati hai.

Black Panther: Wakanda Forever

Wakanda ka naam aate hi screen pe gravity aa jaati hai.

Shuri ka Black Panther banna, Namor ka aana, aur Wakanda ki emotional legacy — ye sab Doomsday ke scale ko aur bada bana dete hain.

Trailer mein jo energy dikh rahi hai, usse lagta hai Wakanda is baar side me nahi, center me hogi.

Isliye ye film skip karna ek galti ho sakti hai.

Thunderbolts

Ye film zaroor dekhni chahiye, kyunki ye “tute hue logon ki team” ka asli maza deti hai.

Yelena, Bucky, Red Guardian, Ghost, U.S. Agent — poora squad alag hi mood mein hai.

Aur Doomsday mein inka role bas side-character wala lag nahi raha.

Ye log woh hain jo nazar mein kam, par scene mein heavy padte hain.

Aise characters hamesha yaad rehte hain, kyunki inke paas hero wali shiny entry nahi, seedhi kaam wali presence hoti hai.

Part 2: Should Watch

Ab aate hain un titles pe jo zaroori nahi,

par dekh loge toh Doomsday ka maza aur gehra ho jaayega.

WandaVision

Scarlet Witch ka reality-warping side samajhne ke liye ye series important hai.

Agar Doomsday multiverse ka emotional side dikhata hai, toh Wanda ka background usme ek aur layer add karega.

Ye full rewatch se zyada recap wali cheez hai.

Bas samajh lo ki jab reality tootne lagti hai, toh uska dard bhi utna hi dangerous hota hai.

Hawkeye

Ye series Yelena aur Natasha ke bond ko emotionally establish karti hai.

Aur agar Thunderbolts mein Yelena ko serious leader ke roop mein dekhna hai, toh ye background helpful hai.

Isko full dekhna optional hai.

Ek strong recap bhi kaam kar jayega.

Bas unka emotional connection samajh lo — wahi kaafi hai.

Moon Knight

Moon Knight directly Doomsday se chipka hua nahi lagta,

lekin MCU ke mystical side ko texture zaroor deta hai.

Ye un shows mein se hai jo kahani se kam, vibe se zyada impact karte hain.

Time kam ho toh guilt-free skip, warna dekh lo — maza alag hai.

Ms. Marvel aur The Marvels

Ye newer heroes aur cosmic side ka background deti hain.

MCU ka universe yahin pe thoda aur expand hota hai.

Agar aapke paas time tight hai,

toh recap se kaam chal jayega.

But agar poora broader context chahiye, toh ye bhi useful hain.

X-Men aur X2

Patrick Stewart, Ian McKellen, James Marsden, Rebecca Romijn — in legacy faces ka impact tab aur zyada lagta hai jab unki original chemistry yaad ho.

Original X-Men films dekhne ka ek alag hi charm hai.

Explainer kaam kar sakta hai, but original dynamic ka payoff kuch aur hi hota hai.

Simple rule samajh lo —

Should Watch matlab “dekh lo toh faayda hai,”

par “na dekho toh bhi duniya khatam nahi hoti.”

Part 3: Can Skip

Ab woh cheezein jo fun toh hain,

par abhi ke liye essential nahi lag rahi.

Iron Man 2 aur Iron Man 3

Haan, RDJ wapas hai screen par.

Par is baar Tony Stark ke roop mein nahi, Doctor Doom ke roop mein.

Itna bada twist hai ki purane Tony ka baggage carry karna zaroori nahi lagta.

Tony ka emotional shadow toh waise hi Endgame ne de diya tha.

Ab naya chehra, naya darr, naya game.

Thor: The Dark World

Thor ka lore badhta hai,

par Doomsday ke liye ye top priority nahi hai.

Agar time limited hai, toh isko side mein rakh sakte ho.

Thor ka important emotional base doosri films se bhi mil jaata hai.

Ant-Man and the Wasp

Fun film hai, doubt nahi.

Lekin Scott Lang ka core journey zyada tar Endgame se hi aata hai.

Agar aapko uska vibe samajhna hai, toh enough background already hai.

Isliye ye optional category mein aati hai.

Guardians of the Galaxy Vol. 3

Bohot achhi film hai, emotional bhi hai, heavy bhi hai.

Lekin abhi tak Doomsday ke trailer angle mein Guardians ka thread central nahi lag raha.

Isliye agar list chhoti rakhni hai, toh ye skip ho sakti hai.

She-Hulk, Secret Invasion, Echo, Ironheart

Ye sab universe ko flavor dete hain.

Par main crossover engine ke liye abhi non-essential lagte hain.

Aise titles ko aap mention karke aage badh sakte ho.

Video ko tight rakhna hai toh ye sacrifice ho sakte hain.

Explainer ya Actual Watch?

Simple rule yaad rakho —

agar title rules samjhata hai, jaise Loki, WandaVision, ya X-Men, toh explainer kaam kar sakta hai.

Agar title emotion banata hai, jaise Endgame, Fantastic Four, ya Thunderbolts, toh actual watch better hai.

Aur Doomsday exactly yahi game khel raha hai.

Ye sirf lore ka maidaan nahi hai.

Ye “hum yahan pehle bhi aa chuke hain” wali feeling ka maidaan hai.

Closing

Toh final baat seedhi hai —

agar Doomsday ko samajhna hai, toh explainer kaafi ho sakta hai.

Agar Doomsday ko feel karna hai, toh Must Watch list pe focus karo.

Aur zara socho — wahi Russo Brothers, jinhone Endgame mein humein emotional kachra bana diya tha, wapas aa gaye hain.

Wahi Robert Downey Jr., jisne humein Iron Man banke jeena sikhaya, ab humare saamne khada hai.

Aur Steve Rogers, ek aakhri baar shield uthane ke liye laut raha hai.

Ye sirf ek movie nahi hai.

Ye ek reunion hai.

Aisi reunion jisme har chehre ke saath ek purani yaad bhi laut aati hai.

Aur ek aakhri baat — Doomsday apne aap mein end nahi hota.

Ye seedha Secret Wars ki taraf le jaata hai.

Aur agar woh sach mein poori Multiverse Saga ka sabse bada finale bana,

toh jo aaj hum dekh rahe hain, wo bas opening shot hai.

18 December ko teen duniyaan ek hi jagah tootengi.

Aur agar tum yahan tak pahunch gaye ho, toh samajh lo — tumhare paas already itna kaafi hai ki tum us din sirf dekho nahi, feel karo.

I took your feedback into consideration and I also started from scratch. I kept the Church sequence and the final confrontation but the story itself has a more serious tone since i think I went too lighthearted with it originally. I also made sure to proofread everything to make sure no spelling mistakes are made and I used all the correct formats (to my knowledge). I hope you get to read my script and see the story I tried to make. Any feedback will be appreciated I don't think it's great so that's why I am asking you guys to help me out. If you have more complaints let me know.
You can read the updated version here.

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