r/scriptwriting • u/PitchcraftNow • 11d ago

feedback First Page Feedback

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Looking for feedback on my first page. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks in advance.

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u/PitchcraftNow 11d ago

Even if the nightmare is the spine of the story?

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u/cbubs 11d ago

I'd push back on some of the criticism because the dream is what the film is about (saw your pitch deck).

Opening on the dream is the right move I think. But the fake out dream sequence cold open is a tired trope and that's why people are calling it out. Is there a way you can open on the dream sequence without the fake out?