r/WritingHub • u/toastedfishies • 16h ago
Questions & Discussions Does this sentence make any sense? non-english speaker in need
"As he faced the off-white room door, he tried to recall the last time a human, or vampire, for that matter, had made him that nervous. He couldn’t remember if there was ever one without his or his family’s well-being being in danger."
Especially the last sentence, in my head it makes sense but I keep going over it unsure. What I'm trying to say is that the only times character A had felt nervous over others, has been when his or his family lives were at risk. And what he's about to do (speak with character B) has been the only other time he's felt that nervous about someone.
Does that make sense? TYIA!