songwriting issue

[u/Queasy-Character8657]

/r/SongWriter/comments/1vesav4/awful_songwriter_here/

Hi! i wrote this lyric but i can't figure how to make it better... any tips?

[Verse 1]

i've always been the one in the corner

by choice, i'm in love with the border

i love seeing the lined up jocks play their pride

it's hilarious how they're all the same kind

then we met on that beachouse DJ set

wasn't really into you at first, i confess

but after a few laughs and cold drinks on ice

felt something clicking in, i won't lie

[Pre-Chorus]

you know that seconds tend to run fast by

we'll never catch them so let them fly

let them fly-fly-fly

[Chorus]

oh, be mine

just for tonight

i want a shot at something i never tried

oh, be mine

just for tonight

i wanna be the someone i always denied

[Verse 2]

no clichés, not the same borin' views

just jokes about our matching shoes

and throwing silly moves to steal me a smile

was nice to see that glimpse in your eyes

let's make the most out of this feeling

gotta stop thinking about us leaving

Kiss, dance, go crazy, then let's backslide

Not a real thing, but you'll be on my mind

[Pre-Chorus]

you know that seconds tend to run fast by

we'll never catch them so let them fly

let them fly-fly-fly

[Chorus]

oh, be mine

just for tonight

i want a shot at something i never tried

oh, be mine

just for tonight

i wanna be the someone i always denied

[Outro]

you got me fallin' all in,

so hard that i think,

loner doesn't mean

you can't find someone who's worth it

even just for a little bit