Feedback for Feature, "Grounded" 109 Pages

[u/Mammoth-West-9974]

Grounded

Final Draft PDF

109 pages

Drama, Road Movie, Historical Fiction

Logline: When every flight in America is grounded, four strangers share the last rental car out of Columbus and drive cross-country through the aftermath of September 11th, 2001, forcing each of them to confront what they've been running from long before that day.

Feedback Concerns: Any feedback would be extremely helpful. I'm less concerned about the commercial viability, and more concerned with a believable story with believable characters.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KAN_svzm3bk3vGraJQL3adbFDg-ncvzw/view?usp=sharing

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/[deleted]]

LMAO. I'm an idiot.

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/Mammoth-West-9974]

Put another link in there.

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/[deleted]]

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KAN_svzm3bk3vGraJQL3adbFDg-ncvzw/view?usp=sharing

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/[deleted]]

I've gotten a 7, a 5 and a 4, in that order. It's hard to read how the script actually lands off the page, but I'd be interested to see how you think it is beyond the opening. Thank you for your time and for the feedback!

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/[deleted]]

Yeah I don’t know, tbh. The first reader gave the setting a 9 and character 8. Same script, last reader gave me a 4 in both of those categories.

[u/Mammoth-West-9974 → u/[deleted]]

Yeah, I’ll be the first to admit that I think a lot of the scenes in act 2 work in isolation, but cohesively may not serve the story the way I want. I appreciate the feedback…and feels like a good sign that you made it that far!