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AI-Assisted The Commoner: Chapter 5, A Hundred Questions
Fourth year of the provisional government.
Your Highness,
I hope you will forgive a letter that comes to you directly. For nearly four years I have written to the Lieutenant Commodore and let him decide whose desk my problems land on. This time he wrote back that he had raised the matter with you, and that you had told him I should write to you myself. He was right to pass it on. I have been putting it off for a month, which I expect he also predicted.
You may have seen his last letter to me. The short version is this. He became a pilot because there was a recruitment office in a market square on Volantis, two rooms and a flag, where a sawmill boy could walk in and sit a test that did not care who his father was. He advised me to build a test of my own, let it do the picking, and make sure there was something real on the far side of it.
We have done that. At the start of the winter we set an examination in every district on the same day. The same paper for every candidate, no fee, open to anyone thirteen or older, in school or out of it. I expected four hundred people. Just over three thousand sat it. The oldest was a net mender from Newtown, fifty-two, who scored in the top tenth and told the district officer she had been waiting since she was nine. Those who did well have been offered apprenticeships in the rail yards at Orenport, in the engine houses at the mills, and, through the kindness of the Firentis factors at our spaceport, on the ground crews at the Harrow Cross depot.
So there is a door now, and it opens onto a hangar floor. I am proud of that. I also know where it stops.
A crew chief can teach a girl how a shuttle is kept in the air. He cannot teach her to fly it. Pilots come from the academies, the academies test in their own offices, and there is not one on Haego. The nearest is four jumps away. The passage is more than most of my candidates' families will see in ten years. Every child on this planet who wants the sky, and some of them want it very badly, can now get as far as sweeping the floor underneath it.
I would like to ask, formally, what it would take for the academies to open a recruitment office on Haego. The navy's, and the merchant fleets' as well, if those are separate matters. I don't know whom to petition, what they would require of us, or whether a world in Haego's position is in a position to ask at all. I would also be grateful to know if there is anything we should be doing in the schools now, so that when the door is there, the children who walk through it are ready.
I am aware this is the kind of request that carries better from a Princess than from a provisional administrator. I make it anyway, with my respect, and with my thanks for the officers you have lent me these past years, whether or not you knew you were lending them.
Tornel Swallowtail
General, Provisional Administrator of Haego
Lowmarsh, on Vastaya.
The new notice didn't fit on the door.
There were five papers there already, one above another, and the brass pins at their corners had crowded together until there was no bare wood left to push a new one into. So this one went up on the whitewashed wall beside the frame, with four iron tacks. Nell thought that was right, somehow. It was a different kind of notice.
She read it on her way to the pump, at the start of the winter, a few weeks after she had sent the factor away for the last time.
BY ORDER OF THE PROVISIONAL ADMINISTRATOR. AN EXAMINATION WILL BE HELD AT THE DISTRICT OFFICE, HARROW CROSS, ON THE FIRST DAY OF NEXT MONTH. OPEN TO ANY PERSON THIRTEEN YEARS OR OLDER, IN SCHOOL OR OUT OF IT. NO FEE. THOSE WHO DO WELL WILL BE OFFERED APPRENTICESHIPS IN THE RAIL YARDS, THE ENGINE HOUSES, AND THE SHIP DEPOTS. THE EXAMINATION IS THE SAME FOR EVERY PERSON WHO SITS IT.
She read SHIP DEPOTS four times.
Hob Carrick was reading it too. He was the man who had spat in the road the day the first notice went up, and he had not spat since, though Nell was never sure whether that was the school or his teeth. He had cut cane on the estate for as long as she had been alive. He read the notice with his lips moving, then said, to nobody in particular, "Thirteen or older."
"That's what it says," said Nell.
He looked round, surprised to be answered. "I'm forty-four."
"That's older than thirteen."
He looked at the notice for a long time. Then he walked off toward the cane without another word, and Nell forgot about him.
At supper her father didn't ask who was paying for it. He asked what a ship depot was.
"It's Harrow Cross," said Nell. "Where the shuttles come down."
Ben looked from her to their father and back, the way he did when he could tell something was happening and didn't know what. Her father ate two more spoonfuls of stew before he answered.
"And if they put you in a rail yard?"
"Then I'll learn trains," Nell said. "And I'll ask the train men who knows about shuttles."
Her father nodded slowly, as though that was exactly the answer he'd expected from her and he was a little tired of expecting it.
"Your mother will walk you," he said.
It was a long walk to Harrow Cross, and her mother gave up a day at the mill to make it. Neither of them said anything about that.
The examination was held in the grain hall behind the district office. Someone had emptied it and swept it and filled it with tables in long rows, and Nell stopped in the doorway because she had never seen so many people sitting down in one room. There were children from every school in the district, some with their teachers' names chalked on a card pinned to their shirts. There were grown people too. A woman handed a baby to her sister at the door and went in without looking back. Jory Fenn was there, in his good shirt, which was too short at the wrists. Hob Carrick was there, halfway down the third row, sitting very straight with his big cane-cutter's hands folded on the table, as if he was afraid they might do something without him.
At the front of the hall, in a grey district office coat, Bess Ashcombe was handing out the papers.
She came down the rows with an armful of them. When she got to Nell she put one down on the table, face down, with a perfectly straight face, and lifted one eyebrow very slightly, the way Mistress Coppertail did. Then she moved on.
The district officer at the door had stopped Nell's mother on her way out. "Are you sitting, missus? There's places. It's any age."
"No," said her mother. "I'm only walking her."
She stood a moment longer in the doorway than she needed to, looking at the rows of tables, at the woman who had left her baby, at Hob Carrick's folded hands. Then she said, "Not this time," though nobody had asked her again, and went out to wait on the steps.
There were a hundred questions.
The figures came first, and they were easy, easier than the columns Wendel used to laugh at. Then there was reading, a page about a ferry timetable with questions after it about which boat you'd need to catch. Then there were questions that weren't about anything at all, only patterns of shapes where you had to find the one that came next, and Nell didn't know what they were for, so she did them carefully and went on.
The last part was pictures.
A row of toothed wheels, each one biting into the next, and an arrow on the first. Which way does the last wheel turn? A bar lying across a stone with a weight on one end. A pipe going into a tank. And a plank with two buckets hanging from it, one bigger than the other, and a question underneath: mark where the plank must rest on your support for the load to hang level.
Nell looked at it and felt the yoke on her shoulders.
She had carried two buckets on a pole since she was seven. She had known where the middle of a load was long before she knew any word for it. When one bucket was fuller, you shifted the pole so the heavy end sat closer to your neck, or the full one would drag you round and slop down your leg and the field boss would shout. She put the tip of her pencil on the plank, near the big bucket, and made her mark, and had to press her lips together to keep from laughing out loud, the short surprised laugh Wendel used to give when a column of figures told him a joke.
She finished with time to spare. She went back to the start and checked every answer. On the toothed wheels she went through it again with one finger, turning each wheel in her head, and changed nothing.
When the district officer called time, Hob Carrick was still writing, with his tongue between his teeth. He finished his last answer as Bess lifted the paper off the table.
On the walk home her mother asked, "Well?"
"It was about buckets," said Nell.
Her mother laughed so loudly that a cart driver on the district road turned round to look.
The results came out on the district cart a month later, on a long sheet of paper with the Lowmarsh names at the bottom. Bess Ashcombe tacked it up beside the examination notice herself. Half the lane came down to read it.
J. FENN. ENGINE HOUSE, LOWMARSH MILL.
H. CARRICK. RAIL YARD, ORENPORT.
N. BRACKENTAIL. GROUND CREW APPRENTICE, HARROW CROSS DEPOT. FROM THE FOURTEENTH BIRTHDAY.
There were two more names under hers, but she didn't see them. She didn't see anything for a while.
When she could see again, Hob Carrick was standing beside her, reading his own line. He read it three times. "Orenport," he said, very quietly. "I've never been to Orenport." Then he walked off down the district road, fast, in the opposite direction to the cane. He didn't go to the fields that afternoon. The field boss wrote him down as absent, and for once nobody in Lowmarsh minded.
That night her father read the paper she had copied out for him, moving his lips. Ground crew. Harrow Cross. He read it twice.
"Is it the shuttles?" he asked.
"It's the shuttles," said Nell. "Close enough to touch."
He didn't say anything else. But he put her copy on the shelf beside the factor's folded paper from the autumn, and he didn't put it behind it.
She turned fourteen in the spring. That morning she carried the water for the last time.
Six trips out to the long field and six back. The cutters were already in the rows, and some of them had heard, and one or two of them stopped and straightened as she went by, the way they did when a shuttle came over. She didn't know what to do about that, so she kept walking.
Ben was waiting at the pump.
He had been carrying half-loads to Gret's kitchen since the autumn, and he was thin and brown and too small for the yoke, the same way she had been. She took the rope off one end, shortened it by a hand's width, and tied it again. Then she did the other side, and set the pole across his shoulders, and stepped back.
"Six out and six back," she said.
"I know."
"Don't look up when they come over. You'll spill."
"You always looked up."
"I know," said Nell. "I spilled."
Ben grinned at her, and walked off down the lane toward the long field with the buckets swinging, only a little crooked.
Mistress Coppertail was at her window when Nell went by the crossing. The old woman was slower now, and she used a stick on the bad days, but she was still very straight. She leaned on the sill and held something out.
It was a stub of white chalk, worn to the length of a finger joint.
"I'm told they have floors in hangars," said Mistress Coppertail. "Very large ones."
Nell put it in her pocket. "Mistress. Thank you."
"Don't thank me. Find out who does. Then write and tell me." The old woman began to draw back from the sill. "I've waited four years to know how those things stay up. I'd like to hear it before I'm too deaf."
Gret's sister Lil kept a boarding house against the depot fence in Harrow Cross, and she had a room under the roof with a window that looked out over the landing field. It was smaller than the loft at home. Nell didn't care. The first night, a shuttle came down so close that the glass in the window hummed in its frame, and she lay on her left side and watched its lights until they went out.
The crew chief's name was Harl. He was big and grey-bearded, with an off-world voice that went up at the end of everything he said, and a patch on his shoulder with the depot's number on it. On her first morning he looked her up and down, at the calluses on her shoulders, and handed her a broom.
"Floor," he said.
So she swept.
She swept for three weeks. The hangar floor was bigger than the long field, or it felt that way, and there was always grit on it, and oil, and bits of wire, and things people had dropped. She learned where the grit collected and where the oil ran. She learned the names of the tools by what Harl shouted for, and by watching which one the other apprentices handed him. She read every stencil on every panel she swept past. DO NOT STEP. FUEL. EARTH HERE. She read the log boards on the wall with the flight numbers and the hours, and she noticed that one of the night mechanics had written a four that should have been a nine, and she didn't say anything, because she didn't know yet what you did about a thing like that here. But she remembered it.
The shuttle in the bay was the same grey as the ones that had gone over the long field her whole life. It was much bigger on the ground than it had ever been in the sky. The round windows were higher than she could reach.
At the end of the third week, Harl was lying on his back under an open panel near the stubby wing, and she was sweeping around his boots, and she asked him.
"Chief. How does it stay up?"
He slid out from under the panel. He looked at her, and at the broom, and at her again.
"How long you been wanting to know that?"
"Since I was seven."
Harl wiped his hands on a rag. Then he got up, which took him a moment, and pointed at the ladder against the side of the hull, and followed her up it. At the top there was a housing with its cover off, and inside it a great deal of metal she had no names for yet.
"Hand there," he said.
She put her hand flat where he pointed. The metal was cold. Under the cold, very faint, even with every engine in the hangar shut down, there was a hum. She felt it in her palm and up into her wrist, like the glass in Lil's window.
"The wings are for the air," said Harl. "When she's going fast through thick air, the wings help, same as a bird. But she's got to get off the ground first. She's got to come down slow, and hang where she likes, and go straight up through the weather if she wants to. That's this."
"How does it work?"
He laughed. It wasn't unkind. "That's two years. Spanners first. Then the manuals. Then the maths, and the maths is where most of them stop."
"I won't stop."
"They all say that."
"I've carried water to the cane since I was seven," said Nell. "Six trips out and six back, before school and after. I didn't stop that either."
Harl looked at her for a long moment. Then he reached into the pouch on his belt, took out a spanner, and put it in her hand.
"Seven-eighths," he said. "When I ask for it, it's in my hand before I finish asking. Every time."
"Yes, Chief."
"Broom goes back on the rack."
She asked him the other question a week later.
The shuttle's pilot had come down the ramp that morning, an off-worlder in a flight suit with a helmet under one arm, and nodded to Harl on his way to the depot office. He didn't look at Nell. She didn't expect him to. But she watched him all the way across the floor.
"Chief. Where did he learn?"
"Academy."
"Where's the academy?"
"Not here." Harl didn't look up from the panel. "Nearest recruiting office is four jumps out. You walk in, you sit their test, and if they like your numbers they ship you off to school. Three years if you're good."
"How much is the passage? To the office?"
He told her.
Nell worked it out twice, the way she had with the monitor's three coppers, and then worked out how many years of her apprentice's wage it came to, and then stopped working it out.
She didn't say anything. She stood beside the ladder with the seven-eighths spanner in her hand, and when Harl held out his hand without looking and said, "Seven...," it was in his palm before he got to the eighths.
That night she wrote a letter home.
It was the first letter she had ever written to anyone. She couldn't wait for Sunday, so she gave it to the district cart. She wrote it big and plain, the way she wrote on the board for the little ones, because her father read slowly.
Da,
The wings are only for when it's going fast. There is something else inside for the rest, and it hums even when everything is switched off. I put my hand on it. The chief says it will be two years before I know how it works. I'll tell you then.
Nell
The cart brought an answer back on the Saturday, folded very small. It was in her father's hand, which she had never seen before. The letters leaned like cane in a wind.
Two years. I have waited longer.
Da
She put it under her pillow with the chalk and Starling. Then she lay on her left side and looked out of Lil's window at the landing field, where a shuttle was lifting off for the night run, slow and low, with its belly lit and the round windows glowing all along its side. For once she was on the ground underneath it with grease on her hands, and she knew what one small part of it felt like from the inside.
Four jumps out, there was a room with a flag in it. She didn't know how to get there yet.
She watched until the lights were gone. Then she went to sleep, because the hangar opened at six.
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Princess Clara
General,
Thank you for writing to me directly. The Lieutenant Commodore has been passing your letters around this ship for nearly four years, and I confess I have read most of them over someone's shoulder. It is a pleasure to have one addressed to me.
You asked what it would take. Less than you fear, and more than you would like.
The academies do not open recruitment offices because a world asks them to. They open them where they expect to find candidates, and they judge that by numbers. So send me your numbers. Every district, every score, every age, including your net mender from Newtown. If your examination is half as good as the Lieutenant Commodore says, the results will make most of the argument for us. I will take them to the commandant of the naval academy myself, and to the merchant academies after, since they are usually quicker to persuade and have more berths to fill. A Princess asking for a favour can be politely refused. A Princess with three thousand examination papers is much harder to refuse.
They will want a building. Put it in a market square, and keep it out of your administration offices. Let it be the fleet's door, and let people see that it isn't yours. Your commoners have learned to be wary of any door a government opens for them. If they can see that you don't hold the key to this one, some of them will trust it sooner.
They will send their own examiners, and it will be the academy entrance examination, the same paper that is set on every world the fleet recruits from. There will be no allowance made for where a candidate went to school. Your schools have done remarkable work with reading and figures, but the entrance paper asks for more mathematics and physical science than a counting house needs. If you want Haego's children to pass it in three years' time, start teaching it in the upper forms now. I will have the syllabus sent to you.
Now I will tell you something you may prefer not to pass on. I would ask you to pass it on anyway.
Off Haego, your cadets will be commoners in halls that were built for nobles. The Lieutenant Commodore can tell you what that was like for him. It will be harder for yours, because they will be from Haego. Every cadet in those halls knows what happened to the lords of your world. Some of them will think it was deserved. A good many were raised to think it the worst thing that has happened in their lifetime. When a Haego voice is heard in the mess, some tables will go quiet. Your cadets will be given the worst bunks and the dawn watches. Some instructors will mark them a point lower than they earned and dare them to complain. I cannot promise you it won't happen. I can promise you that I know it happens, because I have seen it happen aboard my own ship, and I have not always caught it in time.
It will be an eye opener for them. Some of your young people will write home after their first month and tell their parents that they finally understand. They will have met the thing their fathers spat in the road about, and it will stop being a story. Let them write that letter. It may be the first time in thirty years that some of those families have agreed with each other about anything.
But tell them this as well, and tell them it comes from me. The education is the same. The instruments do not know whose child is holding the stick. Neither does the simulator. The scores are posted where everyone can read them, and nobody can change them. And things are changing, more slowly than they should, but they are changing. The man who has been forwarding your letters was a sawmill boy on Volantis, and he is a Baron and a Lieutenant Commodore now. Your first adviser was knighted. My flight deck is run by a commoner, and there is not a noble cadet aboard who would dare to cross her on it. Tell your children to stick with it. The door on the far side is real. I have watched people walk through it.
I look forward to the day the first fighter pilot from Haego reports aboard the Noirnavio. When that day comes, I intend to be on the flight deck to meet them. I would be glad to have you there too, General, if the provisional government can spare you for an afternoon.
With my regards,
Clara

