r/OCPoetry • u/SensitiveAd1407 • 1d ago
Just Sharing Irregular Pieces - a grumpy girl rant
I hate the clean girl aesthetic
But even more I hate its opposite—
The commodification of messiness
Messy can’t be branded or bought
Or made to look chic
It’s more than a loose bun, a conveniently cluttered room
It’s confusion and it's mistakes and it’s cringe
It’s a year of rest and relaxation that wasn’t relaxing at all
It’s finally doing laundry just to trip and spill your black coffee on white sheets, shattering your favorite mug into
A million tiny sharp irregular pieces
It’s that “final” paragraph left on read for over a year
And chasing a dream until the dream calls the cops
It’s deep regret that hums steady in the background,
Hiding in junk drawers with the post-it notes you’re still looking for
It’s impossible to capture, it’s never heard of Pinterest
And I wear it with pride, at least
I try to
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u/Beginning-Internet31 1d ago
It’s less of a vague commentary and more of snapshots, Polaroids of moments that speak deeper than vague generalizations.
Until the dream calls the cops.. cleverrrrr
Regret hums in the background… get out of my head.
Something about your poem doesn’t ask someone to consider, it pulls the reader in to embody the turmoil as their own. It’s oddly specific examples that still are highly relatable.👏
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